Writing Tragedy and the human response.

[Brasil]

?Can You Tell Me?

Now another one is lost,
Youngsters leaving at what cost?
Can you tell me?

Why?s youth in such a rush
To get that final push?
Can you tell me?

They?re all dropping off like flies,
But we all keep spinning lies,
Why?s that happen?
Can you tell me?

Young lights are going dim,
But this isn?t V.R. sim,
They?re really going.

Our youth is disappearing,
But none are re-appearing,
They?re really going.

It?s a destructive epidemic,
Death?s pattern is systemic,
They?re really going.

We can?t stop what we can?t see,
Can?t tell them ?stay with me,?
Oh no, it?s not possible.

Such a daunting task it is,
Shutting down a deathly biz,
But we?ve got to.

Our future is at stake,
Right choices we must make
Or else they?re going.

Chorus:

Young lights are going dim,
But this isn?t V.R. sim,
They?re really going.

Our youth is disappearing,
But none are re-appearing,
They?re really going.

It?s a destructive epidemic,
Death?s pattern is systemic,
They?re really going.

The time to act is now,
But some are asking how,
The answer?s understanding.

Death no longer will continue,
If you seek the power in you,
The answer?s understanding.

Now we?ve almost won,
This horror?s nearly done,
Just be strong now.

The choice is up to you,
Continue like you do,
Or change for the better.

You?re flirting with disaster,
Death will become your master,
If you don?t stop this behavior?
Do you understand me?

You?ll add one to the count,
See the bodies on the mount.
Please understand what I?m saying,

Don?t throw your life away,
You?ll regret it soon one day,
As on your back you lay,
Wishing back to yesterday,
A time when you could play.

Chorus:

Young lights are going dim,
But this isn?t V.R. sim,
They?re really going.

Our youth is disappearing,
But none are re-appearing,
They?re really going.

It?s a destructive epidemic,
Death?s pattern is systemic,
They?re really going.

Why?d you go so soon,
Leaving for the moon?
Can you tell me?

You were added to the count,
A body on the mount,
You dropped your silver spoon,
But why?d you go so soon?
Can you tell me?

That isn?t your time to go,
That?s not the curtain for your show,
The roses, they aren?t thrown,
They?re placed neatly on your home.

Tears are running, falling to the earth,
Can you hear the sobs of sadness?

We want you to return,
But you?re gone now,
Never to say another word,
Never loud enough to be heard
In the world of the living.

Now another one is lost,
Youngsters leaving at what cost?
Can you tell me?

Why?s youth in such a rush
To get that final push?
Can you tell me?

They?re all dropping off like flies,
But we all keep spinning lies,
Why?s that happen?
Can you tell me?

Young lights are going dim,
But this isn?t V.R. sim,
They?re really going.

Our youth is disappearing,
But none are re-appearing,
They?re really going.

It?s a destructive epidemic,
Death?s pattern is systemic,
They?re really going.

[GreenEyedDragon]

wow...that's a song, i assume, from the Chorus lines...its really powerful, and i hope you can actually do something with it, the world needs to hear it. I'm not sure the exact message you were trying to get across, but i think you were referring to how childhoods are constantly being shortened, to where they're practically non-existant. On that topic i totally agree, and i find myself constantly wishing that i were a kid again...

i profusely apologize if i got the wrong message from your poem...but i do think it's really great...9.8/10

[TheShinje]

[size=1] I think the point you're trying to get across, and correct me if I'm wrong, is the tradgedy of youth suicide, a very common thing these days.

If that was your intention, then you did a great job crwating the emotion. The poetry of the lyrics worked together to paint a picture of, almost despair at the loss of youth I guess.

Well done, it was entertaining and insightful, even if I missed the point somewhat. [/size]

[Brasil]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Shinji Ikari [/i]
[B][size=1] I think the point you're trying to get across, and correct me if I'm wrong, is the tradgedy of youth suicide, a very common thing these days.

If that was your intention, then you did a great job crwating the emotion. The poetry of the lyrics worked together to paint a picture of, almost despair at the loss of youth I guess.

Well done, it was entertaining and insightful, even if I missed the point somewhat. [/size] [/B][/QUOTE]

VERY CLOSE! I recently learned of an old classmate's car accident death. She wasn't always the most...logical with her life. The song was written out of the disgust of youth throwing away their lives, whether accidental or not, but in a certain sense, suicide regardless. So many children and teens are throwing their lives away with irresponsible actions, and that really is disturbing.