Writing The End of Time

[DragonofDestiny]

The warm and dusty wind hit the small town out of no where. The Saloon sign creaked and banged agianst the building as it was rampaged by the wind. A lone shadow figure walked slowly down the diserted street. It was a dark night, almost no windows held light inside. The figure walked up the steps to the Saloon and opened the door. Another blast of air swept into the room and everyone turned to see the man that struck fear into so many hearts.
Vash the Stampede.
He shut the door and took a seat at the bar. He ordered his drink and otherwise remained silent. Visibly bleeding but completely calm, Vash waited for his drink. A few outlaws in the corner moved their eyes onto Vash. The snickered amoungst themselves. This was the legendary Humanoid Typhoon? They laughed and started planning on getting their hands on the 60 billion double-dollar bounty on Vash's head.
Vash drunk quickly and stood up, flipping some money to the bar tender. In a dry, yet kind voice he said, "Thanks for the drink. Keep the change."
And with that, Vash left the saloon and walked up the street to a small inn.

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The band of outlaws got up and headed out after him. The thundered out onto the street and Vash stopped walking.
"So you're Vash the Stampede? You look like something a cat dragged in."
They all laughed and the leader, a big burly man pointed his gun at Vash's head.
"We'd like to thank you, Vash the Stampede, for all the money we're gonna get off your sorry head."
He began pulling the trigger but Vash wheeled out of the way, appearing next to the leader. He pressed his silver gun at the leader's temple.
"I'm not in the mood if you don't mind. So go have some more drinks and don't give me any trouble."
He lowered his gun and started walking again. But the leader yelled and punched Vash in the back of the head.
"Why you sorry excuse for a gun-slinger. I'll kill you with my bare hands!"
"Leave him be Gero!"
Gero, Vash and the rest of the outlaws turned and saw a woman standing in the street, a large machine gun in her arms. Her brown hair fluttered in the wind and she narrowed her steely blue eyes. But Gero started laughing, as did the other outlaws.
"Go home Kanna. We all know you won't hurt us. Especially since we've got your daddy."
He laughed again, and kicked out at Vash. Too bad Vash wasn't there. He was up and in front of Gero.
"Why you!" Geor lunged again, but this time at Kanna. He grabbed her and, being so huge, got her in a painful headlock and lifted her off the ground.
"If you let us turn you in, we promise not to kill the girl."
Vash stopped moving, pocketing his gun, "That's no way to fight. She's not your target, I am. Put her down adn i'll fight you."
Gero smirked and threw Kanna away. He pulled out his gun and started shooting at Vash. Vash, who still hadn't taken out his gun, kicked Gero in the face, sending him flying backwards. Vash ran over to Kanna and picked her up. He ran away to the shadows as Gero yelled after him.
"I will kill you Vash the Stampede! You're as good as dead!"

[Epsilon]

This is a great start to an FanFic. It seems like it really would be one of the epi.s shown on t.v. or in the manga. Your writing style is near perfect. And it's a great starting. I really like it, if you post the rest I'll be reading it. ^^ Your a very good writer, keep up the good work.

P.S. Don't double post.

[DragonofDestiny]

Vash slid inside the Inn and set Kanna down on one of the couches. He walked silently over the the attensent behind the desk.
"Have any rooms for a night or two?"
The attendent nodded slowly and handed Vash a key with a wooden circle attached to the key's loop ring. "R-room 009, it's just to the left up the stairs."
"Thanks." Vash put the wooden handle in his mouth and went back over to Kanna. He picked her up and walked up the stairs.
The key jingled against his chin and Vash smiled as he stood in front of the door.
"This must be it..." He held Kanna with one arm, which was rather difficult and opened the door. He slid inside and looked around. There was a table with chairs, a couch and an armchair, a bed in another room, a lavatory and shower. Vash put Kanna down on the bed and stretched. He doubled over though and started gasping for breath. The deep wounds on him had not yet closed up and he sat there on his knees regaining his breath.
Finallly regaining strength, Vash stood up and went into the room with the shower. He shut the door and started the water. After taking off his shirt, he studied the deep cuts along his side and chest. There were many other scars all over him and these were just some new ones that would probably take some time to heal, he asumed. Something unknown had attacked him, Vash bearly had time to dodge. He finished and stepped into the shower; the water was pretty cold and Vash yelped, adjusting the water temperature.
The blood was washed away and trailed down the drian. Vash got out and stared at his reflection in the dusty mirror.
"....this is what I get I guess...."

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Kanna rolled over, her head was pounding. She sat up and looked around; she was in a small bedroom and there were only a few lights on. She saw the brightest light coming from the bathroom and picked up a lamp. The first thought that ran through her mind was "I've been kidnapped!" She snuck silently forward and pressed her back against the wall. She gripped the lamp tightly and reached for the door nob.
Inside, Vash had wrapped a long towel around his waist and also reached for the door nob.
Kanna opened the door.
They stared at eachother and Kanna finally screamed!
"HEEEEEEEEEELLLLPPPPPP! I've been kidnapped!!!" She through the lamp at Vash and sprinted for the door. Vash dodged the lamp and started after her. Kanna broke out into the hallway and slammed the door behind her. She breathed out heavily but sucked it right back in when she saw Gero and his alckies down at the other end of the hall. She gasped but Vash opened the door and pulled her back inside. She squirmed in his tight grip on her shoulders.
"Let me go!"
"Do you want those guys to find us?"
Kanna stopped and looked at him, cocking her head to the side like a bird.
"B-but you're Vash the Stampede..."
"That didn't stop you earlier." He smiled at her and walked back towards the bathroom. "I really owe you for helping me out back there."
Kanna looked down at her feet, her head was still throbbing from the hard impact from Gero's throw. She stumbled and kind of slumped down onto the floor. Vash ran to her side, "Hey are you all right?!"
Kanna glanced up, seeing several Vash's looking scared at her. She fainted again and Vash put her back in the bedroom. He bandaged himself and put his clothes back on. He threw the towel into the shower, it was stained with blood. He sighed and went to sit on the couch. But Vash became restless and stepped towards a large window. He opened it and leaned into the now cool night air. He stared up at the stars and felt the cool wind careess his face. Vash closed his eyes and leaned against the window sill, enjoying his moments of peice.

[Epsilon]

Yeah, this story is perfect to be shown as aa epis. on tv. Anyways it's an intresting story. I haven't seen a plot like this one from as far as I can tell of it. Your writing style, seems, to be able to take the same course. On of which other writers have problems with sticking with some times. Very good story, well written and good grammer.

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Vash fell asleep in the arm chair, which he had pulled over to face the window. Kanna came out of the bedroom and laughed becasue Vash was up-side-down in the chair; snoring loudly. She pulled a shall out form her pocket and tied it around her face. She took the key out of Vash's hand and went outside to get some breakfast. She went to a bakery and bought some doughnuts, rolls and coffee. She walked carefully back to the Inn room, balancing everything in her arms. She couldn't open the door sho she knocked on it with her foot. Vash opened the door and stuck his head out. He smiled and opened the door fully. He took a box for her.
"Hey, you got doughnuts!" (Inner Vash- YESH!! YESH!! YESH!! ^^)
He put the boxes down on the table and pulled a chair over for himself. Kanna set down the rolls and set down a cup of coffee for Vash.
"Leave some for me!" She said grabbing the box out of his hand seeing him reaching for the last three. She frowned and muttered under her breath, 'Pig...'
Vash took a big swig of coffee, swallowed and yelled. "OOOOOOOWWWWWWW!!!!! That's hot!!!!" He yelped, fanning at his burt tongue.
"Well of course it's hot, it's coffee after all..." Kanna said smiling and sitting down. "Look, Mr. Vash, I wanted to thank you...for saving me last night..."
She looked down at her coffee cup, somewhat embaressed. Vash swallowed and smiled at her.
"You're welcome but I should thank you as well. You helped me a lot but I'm very sorry you got hurt at my expense. Why did those thugs say they had your father?"
Kanna looked to the window, "My family owns some property with a large amount of water on it. We give it out for free to all the people who need it. Gero and his gang wanted to buy the land and sell the water to get rich. My family refused and they were all killed, except me and my father. They were originally going to kill him to but I gave myslef to them so they would spare his life. My dad operates the purifier so the water stays clear and clean and Gero keep me around for kicks."

[Epsilon]

^^ You got Vash perfectly in this story! Must be another reasone why the story's so great. This story is also very fun to read. And that's really good with having Vash's inner-self speak out. It's great. Kanna's personaility seems to be really in deep, like it's based off a real person. Could be, but only you would know that. Anyways, keep up the great work.

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Vash stopped eating and reached across the table, putting a hand over hers.
"I'll help you get free and get your father and land back. I promise."
Kanna stared at him, then slowly smiled, "Thank you Mr. Vash."
Vash pulled back and finished his doughnut. He stated through a full mouth, "Just call me Vash, Kanna."
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Vash and Kanna set out later that day for Kanna's home. KAnna kept glancing at him, and finally got the nerve to ask him.
"Vash, were did you get the scars all over yourself?"
Vash slowed his pace, staring up at the sky, "It's what I have to deal with since I won't kill any one. Love and Peace Kanna, that's what I beleive in."
"You aren't anything like the 'Vash the Stampede' I've heard so much about. I thought you were some kind of ruthless killer or something."
Vash satyed silent, as did Kanna, thinking she said something wrong. The two continued walking down the dusty road.

[Epsilon]

That's how Vash really would act if some one asked him that. I take it you have seen most epis. of Trigun...Or are just a really big fan. You really are a great writter, I love your writting style. Your story is cool. ^^Anyways, haveing him with his most known saying "The world is made of love and peace," or the "Love and Peace." It's so great that you have him saying love and peace. Love your work. ^^; Hee, I'm gonna lay off that now.

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:bawl: Oh you are very nice Ruby! :bawl: It makes me want to cry!!:bawl:

Kanna snuck behind a boulder and beckoned for Vash to follow. He crouched next to her as she pointed over the boulder at a large white house with several metal tanks around it.
"There it is. My father must be inside the house or the control house." She ponted at a small brown shed on the far side of the property.
"I've hardly ever seen so many trees in one place. How did you managae it?" Vash asked her.
"I'm not sure but my father always said that geoplant landed here and his father took care of it. It's dying though, they haven't been watering..." She said frowning.
Vash stood up then helped Kanna to her feet. I'll check out the control house and your house. You check the the tanks."
Kanna nodded and they snuck away.
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Vash crept up to the control house and peaked in through a small window. His eyes roamed the room but there was no one inside. He headed for the house and went into through a back door. He snuck along and started walking up the grand stair case when he heard a scream from outside.
"Kanna!" He said under his breath and ran outside. He barreled down the front steps and straight into Gero and his gang. Vash stopped and was quickly surrounded. He saw Kanna, who was being held by a rather stupid looking gunman with a patch over his left eye. Vash glared at them and started to pull out his gun.
"A-a-ah Vash the Stampede, I wouldn't do that if I were you..." Gero smirked and snapped his fingers. The man holding Kanna put a knife to her, sending a small trickle of blood down her throat.
"Be good now Stampede and we just might let her go." He snapped his fingers again and other bandits began tying up Vash. They hauled both him and Kanna away and put them in a small shed near one of the tanks. Vash yelled out when they shut and bolted the doors shut.
"You said you'd let her go! Gero, release her!!"
Vash managed to stand and glared out through the tiny window on the door. A side of Gero's face filled the other side and he smiled at Vash.
"I never said I would Stampede, I only said I might. And I have to be married to a member of this family to have the rights to own this water plant, so..." He laughed deeply and wickedly, "I think I'll just keep her around for a while."
He laughed again and shut the window's little door, plunging Vash and Kanna into total darkness.

[Epsilon]

^^; Don't cry, I hate making people cry. Ahem, anyways...that's just how a really villian of Trigun who act. This is truly a great story. And having Gero being the level that he is, well it makes him a great person for the villian. The story is so great and fun to read, truly caputuring the moments of Trugun greatly. And having so many trees in the story when usually the world is like a waste land. ^^ It's great.

[DragonofDestiny]

Vash kicked at the door, rammed himself into the door, then tried his head. Unfortunatly, that didn't work and he tumbled backwards.
"Vash give it up, we aren't going to be able to get out of here..." Kanna said quietly.
"Don't say that!" he yelled, kicking at the door again, "There *bang* has to *bang* be a *bang* way *bang* out *bang* of here!!! *bang*"
Vash fell back down and pouted, muttering under his breath, "Stupid door...bet I could get it open if my arms weren't tied up...stupid...stupid...stupid..."
Kanna rolled her eyes and started looking around. She could hardly see a thing in the thick blackness bet she made out the shape of a hoe. She crawled over to it on her knees and rubbed her ropes against the sharp edge of the hoe. Soon, her ropes were breaking and she slithered out of them. She crawled over to Vash and tapped him on the shoulder.
"Hey, I think I found a way out of these ropes." She said showing him her wrists. She started untying his ropes and eventually got them off of him.
Vash stood up and took out his gun, "Cover your ears, this is going to be loud." He took several shots at the door, penetrating the thin metal. Now Vash was able to kick the door open and he helped Kanna out. He snuck around the shed so he was hiden slightly and scanned the surroundings.
"Do you see anybody?"
Kanna came beside him, also trying to hide.
"I think I hear soemthing coming from the control house. Come on, follow me."
Vash dashed across the ground, stopping to hide behind trees or tanks along the way. Kanna followed him, doing like wise and eventually, they were outside the control house. Vash looked in through the window but pushed Kanna away from it as he slumped onto the ground. He held onto her wrist, pulling her down beside him. She hit his shoulder.
"Vash, why won't you let me see? What's gonig on in there?"
"Ssssh, keep your voice down."
She whispered, "Vash, what did you see?"
Vash lowered his gaze to the ground, and then returned his gaze up to her.

[Epsilon]

Wouldn't want you to break the comp. now would we? And I know that answer is a no. Anyways, that's funny. Vash trying to open the door with his head. Then Kanna opening the ropes that held her while Vash is still tied up. The word for that and the head banging: Funny. That's also a good idea having Vash waiting to know what Kanna sees, makes you want to read it more. Hee, it's great. ^^ Keep up the great work!!

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"Kanna..."
But Kanna was tired of waiting, she wrneched herself free of Vash's grip and looked in the window. She gasped, her father was lying on the floor, dead.
She slumped down next to Vash and started to silently cry. She hugged onto Vash and cried. Vash hugged her and patted her back.
"Kanna...I'm so sorry..."
She replied in a creaky voice, "No....no, there wasn't anything you could do...I knew this would happen...It's not your fault...It's all mine..."
Vash looked at her and pulled her away slightly, "Kanna, it's NOT your fault. It was Gero and his gang who killed your father, not you."
She pulled away completly and stood up, visibly shaking.
"I don't want this place anymore. Gero can have it...I...I just want to get out of here..." She said quietly.
Vash stood up beside her, "Are you sure that's what you want Kanna?"
She nodded silently, "Ok, let's go." Vash looked around and started sneaking towards the outskirts of the property. KAnna followed him, some what clumsily.
Once they were clear of the house, Kanna started running and Vash followed her back to the town.

[Epsilon]

O_o Ouch, father died...that's a great thing to get a reader hoocked on the story. Plus it builds great tension. Also that's extreamly like Vash saying that it's not her falut. The story keeps getting better with the plot as the story keeps goiing. This is an extreamlly great story, espiaclly having them go back to the town at which it all had started. ^^ Great job!

[DragonofDestiny]

Kanna slammed the door back and ran into the bedroom, diving onto the bed and burrying her face in a pillow. Vash came in after her, slightly panting and shut the door. He sat down next to her and sighed. He looked out the window, across the dusty ground. The wind was picking up and Vash stood to go and close the window but Kanna's hand shot out from under the pillow and grabbed his.
"Please, don't go anywhere ok? Just stay in the room..." She said quietly, nuzzling more into the pillowand letting go of his hand.
"I won't, don't worry..." He walked over to the window and looked outside. Some one called to him from the street and he ducked inside. But he recognized the voice and looked again.
"Heya Mr. Vash!"
"Hi Vash!"
It was Milly and Meryl, both looking very tired. Vash waved to them, "Hey there! Come on up, it's room 009!"
Milly dashed off, clearly eager to get out of the wind, with Meryl on her heels. Vash closed to the door to the bedroom, as Kanna had fallen asleep and went to the door. he let Milly and Meryl in and poured them some drinks.
"So Mr. Vash, what ahve you been up too?" Milly asked before chugging down her drink.
"Yeah Vash, no damage at this town I see. What's been goign on?"
And so, Vash relayed everything to them about Kanna and her situation.
"She's in the bedroom asleep now. She's had a rough couple of days."
"Is there anything we can do to help out Vash?" Meryl said, looking over at him.
Vash smiled, "That's just like you guys, always wanting to help out but don't worry, I can handle this."
Milly smiled and hiccuped, "Well that's good 'cause we *hiccup* have to go back to the office tomorrow for a week or so. *hiccup*"
"Milly, you have a drinking problem, don't you?" Meryl said rolling her eyes.
"I'm JUST fine THANK you. SO what IF I HAD a FEW drinks? *hiccup* *hiccup*"
Vash laughed as Meryl scolded Milly and watched in vain as Milly drank Vash's and Meryl's drinks.

[Epsilon]

He, yay! Milly and Maryl. You've done a great job of getting there characters too. They seems so like they are in the show/manga. It's great, and Meryl scolding Milly for drinking their drinks. So true. I like how you put the setting of every thing. And watching out as the wind blust around, then having them come into the story. Just how they would normally.

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Night falls quickly and Milly and Meryl fall asleep on the couch and armchair. Vash is left alone and walks into Kanna's room to check on her. She is still sleeping and Vash sees that her pillow is soaked with tears. He sighs and goes over to the bedroom window, opening it and staring out at the night sky for a second time. His eyes scan the town, everything is quiet, 'almost too quiet...' he thinks.
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On top of the Inn's roof, the infamouse Trigun cat Nyeows into the night and stares up at the moon.
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Vash turns back around and hears muffled crying again. He walks silently over to Kanna's bed and put a hand on her shoulder. She looks up at him, apparently, she was never asleep.
"Hey, how are you holding up?"
Kanna looked at her pillow and pushed it away, grabbing a new one, "I've been better I suppose..." She says to him, trying to sound cheerful but failing miserably.
"Do you want anything? Maybe some food or something to drink?"
"Just don't leave ok Vash? Please, stay with me...I don't want to be alone right now...."
Her voiced trailed off and she sunk back into her pillow, starting to cry again. Vash sat down on the floor and leaned againt the wall.
"Don't worry, I'll stay here all night."

[Epsilon]

That's very good, it can create an image in the reader's head. Can image it now. Anyways the polt line keeps getting deeper, which leads the reader to read it more. And again with having you able to read what Vash is thinking and get into his head is great. ^^ I love the Trigun Kitty part, it's great. And having Vash stare out at the stars, and waiting with Kanna is great.

[DragonofDestiny]

Kanna slept for the majority of the next day. Afternoon sun trickled in through the window and Kanna stirred. She sat up, rubbing her eyes, then looked around. Everything was very quiet. She got out of bed and searched the rooms but Vash, Milly and Meryl (who she hadn't known were there) were gone. Kanna began to panic, what if Gero had taken Vash at night but hadn't seen Kanna? She had been burried under a blanket after all. What is Gero had Vash prisoner? Or...no she refused to think that.
She ran towards the door, terribly frightend, but the door opened before she reached it and Vash came stolling in.
"Oh, you're up. Good morning!" He said gently.
Kanna flung herself at Vash, causing him to stumble backwards slightly.
"Don't you ever do that again! Hear me? Don't....what, what if they'd gotten you...stupid..."
Vash pulled her away, "I was just seeing some friends off. They came by last night and they left this morning."
"Just don't ok? I know that gero's going to be on the war path since we escaped. He has an incredibly bad temper when his plans don't work out."
"All right, all right, I'll be careful." Vash smiled and hed up a bag, "Hope you're hungry!"
He walked over to the table and sat down, but when Kanna didn't move, he stood back up.
"Kanna, you've got to eat something. Come on."
Kanna walked slowly over and sat down, pulling a roll out of the bag and quietly munched on it. For a while Vash forgot about everything that had happened as he sat stuffing himself with doughnuts. When he finally came back to the real world and looked at Kanna, she was facing the window.
"Hey...how are you holding up?"
She looked over at him, "Better than I thought I would be feeling. My father lived a long and happy life. Maybe, maybe it was just his time to go..."
"........"
Vash stood up, walked over and sat on his knees infront of Kanna. He half smiled at her, "Kanna, everything's going to be ok. But you can't dwell onit forever. Maybe's there's still something we can do so your father's spirit can rest in peace."

[Epsilon]

^^ Just like Vash would do. It seems that all your characters made up or not have a deep personality to them. They stay true to them self. (if possible for a story)Their personilty gives a strong feeling as if they are real people. The plot moves in the story moves on quilky and you don't have them dewling on one thing that's happened to them. Whcih is a great thing, which gives you the feel that they're not like a basic hero with no feelings. It's great, keep up the great work.

[DragonofDestiny]

:flaming: ARGH! Stupid Windows XP and stupid Virus! My computer has been blacked out for SOOOOO long! I'll get right back on the ball and sorry to have kept you waiting!:flaming:
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"Vash don't joke around alright! I'm really not in the mood!" She stood up, smacking Vash's hand away and walking towards the door.
"And w-what makes you think I need help from-from some one like you! A terrible outlaw l-like you! Who needs you?! Who needs this stupid town?!" She screamed.
Vash sighed and looked down at the ground, thinking to himself, 'I guess this is what I get...'
Kanna covered her mouth and tried to think of something to say. She just shook her head and pointed at him, "You, Vash the Stampede, are no better than Gero and his gang!"
She started backing up and opened the door, "T-this stupid town... W-why is this happening t-to me?! WHY?!" And with that, she ran down the stairs and out of the hotel. Vash ran after her but a huge gust of wind came and when the dust settled, he couldn't see Kanna anywhere.
"Kanna! Hey where'd you go?"

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Kanna stumbled along, not really noticing or caring in which direction she was headed. She just wanted to get out away; and she didn't care if she died in the desert, she just needed to get far, far away.
"Stupid Gero...stupid town...stupid worthless...damnitt!"
She fell to her knees and felt the ground shake. She didn't bother to look around as a car pulled up beside her. Some one got out and kneeled beside her, then pulled her close. Kanna tried to get away put who ever was holding on on held tighter.
"Kanna stop, there's no point in running away, believe me, I've been running all my life and look where it's gotten me."
Kanna opened her mouth attempting to protest but she couldn't think of anything before she felt herself being picked up and placed in the car. The person started up the car and it trundled along back towards the town. When it stopped outside the hotel, the person got out and put the keys on the seat.
"You can choose what you want to do now. The best way out of town is straight ahead, in case you really want to leave."
Kanna didn't move but she looked at the person who was walking into the Hotel from the corner of her eye. She grabbed the keys and started to drive down the road.
The words echoed in her head:[I]'There's no point in running away.'[/I]
Vash the Stampede watched in dismay as the car drove off in a cloud of smoke. He went back to his room and sat on the bed, looking up at the ceiling.
*Flashback*
[I]'NO! I won't help you kill people! I won't do it!'[/I]
[I]'Then why did you follow me into the desert and wait for me to return? It's becasue you're hopeless on your own isn't it?'[/I]
[B]BANG![/B]
"I ran away then...and in ways I'm still running from everything."
Vash got up, very frustrated and went to sit in the arm chair. As he sat down he felt drained and frustrated. He put his hand over his face and leaned back so that he was staring up at the ceiling.
"Damn you Knives..."

[Epsilon]

Like I said before, [u]don't[/u] double post. Anyways it's still good, therefore I still like it. ^^ It's intresting to see the different side of a char.'s personality. That's like Vash also, mumbling about Knives for the things he done. And the problems he's cause. Kanna seems to be a dromtic character, which is a good mix. With the usuall light hearted, goofy Vash.