Writing The End of Time

[DragonofDestiny]

Vash lost himself in his memories and he didn't even hear the door open behind him. He felt the familiar cold of a gun pressed against his temple and he looked up. He couldn't see who it was before he was over come with blinding pain and knocked to the floor. His head was bleeding and he lept for his gun, only to be kicked in the side from the other direction. He landed on his knees and again felt the cold gun metal against his head.
"Just take it easy and no one else in this hotel has to get hurt. On your feet now and come along-quietly."
Vash felt himself being jerked up and he attempted to look around before he was bashed over the head again.
To be continued in the next episode:
Half a Heart

[Epsilon]

That's a pretty cool ending, and good title. having it stated as the familiar cold feel of a gun is a good idea. Considering how many times he's had a gun put to his head. Having the voice unreveled and unknow is good too. Being bashed over the head was a nice touch, also. This fan-fic is always fun to read.

[DragonofDestiny]

Very slowly, some one came into the room, carrying large bags. They set them down on the table and turned around.
"Vash, listen, I'm---"
There in front of her was Gero and his gang standing over Vash. Gero put his boot on Vash's head and pressed down.
"Nice little show you two put up back at the house but I'm afraid I can't have you both running off anymore. I'll get the deed to the land AND I'll be rich! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!"
Gero clicked his fingers and Vash and Kanna were dragged away.
They were thrown into the back of a truck and started to head out back to Kanna's house.
"Kanna, y-you came back. W-why are you here?"
"I-I wanted to apologize. After all that you've done for me and I just go and yell at you like that. I'm so sorry Vash, you aren't any of those things..."
Vash smiled and leaned his bruised and bleeding head against the trucks' side.
The car screached to a hault, sending Vash and Kanna flying out of the back. Gero's gang jumped out of the car and dragged them into a storage shed.
Gero kicked Vash against the wall and dragged Kanna over to him. He stood them both up and smirked.
"How's about a trade? All I could ever need for two one way tickets to the pearly gates?"
He held up his hand and a gunman aimed, "Kill the Stampede first."
Gero said just before dropping his hand.
It all happened so fast; the gun fired, there was a shout and in a flash, seven people fell to the ground.
A thick smell of blood was in the air

[I]No matter how far I go, no matter who I meet, some one always gets hurt. What should I do? Rem, please help me, what should I do?[/I]

[Epsilon]

Gero's char. sounds cruel, but that's what makes it good to read. And having him think of Rem was a good idea, cause in most cases he would. The thick smell of blood lingering in the air was a nice touch to the setting of the story. And having Kanna apologize at the place they're in makes her char.'s personality come through stronger.

[DragonofDestiny]

"Oh Kanna..."
Vash knelt beside her and a tear fell out of his eye.
"Kanna, Kanna please...oh no... Kanna!"
Kanna's eyes were closed and blood spread out from around her. Vash picked her up gently and brought her into the house. He set her down on a large couch. Vash started to panick and he searched the house for bandages. Finding none, he grabbed a large towel and went back to Kanna.
He stopped dead in his tracks, dropping the towel, and rushed over to Kanna.
Her eyes were open wide and she was staring at her hand, which was covered in blood.
"Kanna...thank god, you're alive! What-what-what happened?!"
She started to shiver but kept her eyes fixed to her hand. A drop of blood dripped onto her face and she blinked.
"I-I couldn't l-let them...k-kill you...Vash..."
Vash hugged onto her as Kanna closed her eyes again.
"No...please...don't let her die...PLEASE...Kanna!"

[Epsilon]

What a way for a char. to go. I like it, her getting hurt and on the brink of death cause she didn't want Vash to be hurt. The way Vash acts in the story is really how'd he'd act. It's great, I like how you having the drop of blood bringing her back to her-self. Then losing her self once more. Good story, I think I'm gonna like what might happen to Gero. Considering how close you come on to Vash's personilty would make it intresting for what'd happen between them.

[DragonofDestiny]

(best when listening to 'Scattered Rain'-if you can. ^^)
Vash wrapped Kanna's wound as best he could but his hands were trembling. When he was done he kissed her forehead and walked slowly outside.
The wind picks up, billowing Vash coat around him. He takes out his silver .45 Colt Custom and walks down the steps. Putting on his sunglasses, he walk up to Gero and points the gun at his arm.
"Now you can never pull a trigger again. You will never hurt anyone, EVER AGAIN!"
Vash fires at both of Gero's arms and looks around. The other outlaws stare at Vash. Vashs' eyes seem to glow as he turns to face them.
"Get out of here if you value your lives."
The outlaws scramble to stand and Vash points the gun at them.
"I've got five bullets left, if you swear to give up your lives of crime and take this guy to the sheriff, I'll reconsider doing to you what I just did to your boss here."
They nodd eagerly and struggle to dragg Gero away and into the back of the truck.
Vash aims and fires two of his bullets, grazing the cheeks of the outlaws in the back.
"Drive, damnitt, DRIVE!!!"
The truck speeds off towards town as the humaniod typhoon lowered his gun and turned around to go back inside.