Writing An odd poem..O.O

[Guest Aznchick]

lol..yea..read the title---->

She stumbled as she walked along,
a wrinkle graced her jaunty brow
the heavens fell cast downward when
a hand exposed the path she found

She longed for warmth, ensnarled by youth
along horizon's arms that fled
persistance of a heart that weeped
to walk the road that so few tread.

With fleeting eyes that seemed to scream
She stood admist the lashing air
wispy tendrils masked her face
her fingers laced in longing prayer

And when she fell, I knew not why
her hands perturbed with death had slain
Freedom came, redemption none
and only tears fell free from pain.

^^** yup..thats it

[Boo]

damn thats cool O.O
I really really like this one.
Dont have anything to say about it either...
Just one thing though. Great job ^_~

[wild thang]

nice. very deep. post some more of your poetry, i want to print them off, make a book and pass it off as my own work. muahahahahahahahahahaha *runs to the evil minivan of doom*

[Guest Aznchick]

*shoots wild thang* dirty bum now u DIE...muhahaha *chokes* muhah...lol jk thanks everyone ^^** Here's another one I wrote..one of my friends didn't understand it so yea x_x haha not my best work i guess but o well..got bored..nya i never have titles -_-;

Cupped in prayer midst mournful howls
A bead of light played o?er the sky
Poised against the velvet black
A feather?s touch, a single cry

Unnoticed, though it danced with grace
Across great time and willful space
And strung along with fateful ease
As wind does when it rustles trees

A warmth aloft the cold that stung
Undaunted by the touch of pain
Yet in a form of death had come
A hopeful call now crushed and slain

A luring darkness shattered light
And brought the striking chill of night
As death had crept, and loomed, then left
A torrent spread the seeds of blight

And yet against the milky sky
A smote still burned; unlike it should
Deliverance of the fallen souls
Proved death was for the greater good

And though the tears still fall in vain
Time cleanses wounds and heals all pain
And ?cross the dazzling darkness find
Perpetuate, a trace will shine.

[[Sound_Nin]]

*strokes tiny goatee* that is very interesting stuff. Creepy too. I want to... *sees wild thangs post* DAMNIT WILD THANG! *kills wild thang* hehe... that'll teach you to use a good idea!

[ladyscorp2006]

I like both of them. Wow how do you come up with poems like that. You should post more. Oh and by the way you have to be one of my favorite poets on here.

[Ellerby]

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Those are great! I love the first onemore. Ever thought of writing Greeting Cards for a living? :smirk: But yeah. Keep writing! ^^[/b]

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[Doukeshi]

Finally, someone who can write ****ing poetry! No offense to any of the other poets here but you're stuff just isn't my cup of tea, other than that one by Heaven's Cloud, but we'll not get into that ^_^.

This is masterful work, remeniscient of poets such as de la mere and walt whitman, seriously, I thought noone wrote poetry like this any more. My friend calls the style 'Olde Tyme' but I love it and I love this. You're going in my green book of poems ^_^ be proud.