Shinobi Posted August 17, 2003 Share Posted August 17, 2003 Ok, here is a crappy attempt ^^ [center][b]I Try To Walk But Slip Through The Thin Air Forever Falling[/b][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spikey Posted August 17, 2003 Share Posted August 17, 2003 [size=1][center]we all have, good times, but then we all colapse[/center][/size] That was a weird one... o.0 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted August 17, 2003 Share Posted August 17, 2003 [size=1] sacrifice yourself everything you know bleed your blood build your cages to the sky sacrifice yourself everything you feel everything there build your cages to the sky things are seldom what they seem; things often never leave even though you continue living to breathe things are seldome what they seem; things often always strike you when you continue living to breathe so sacrifice your life; everything you hated long ago; build your raping cages so sacrifice your love; everything you kissed long ago; build your dead cages build your cages to death build your cages to death and never let; and don't ever let build your cages to death build your cages to death and never let; and don't ever let[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted August 17, 2003 Author Share Posted August 17, 2003 Thats pretty deep'n dark. In my counting I feel a few parts had too many syllables, but whos to judge? :) I do like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted August 18, 2003 Share Posted August 18, 2003 [size=1] Yeah. I don't see anything wrong with slipping a few syllables in there. Heh. And I can't always be too consistent with them anyways..I usually just clap them as I write it. lol. Ah well. I still love free verse eons better than this, but it's fun to work on it. itchin the scab on your heart and it's falling down on every little thing i knew it'll suck you down to the other side; the other side; the other side. they should drain. they should drain you down the other side; the other side; the other side. they should drain. toilets are made for us made for the other side; the other side. so use them right. toilets are made for us and sinks are where we kiss much sinks are where we kiss itchin the scab on your heart and it's falling down on every little thing i knew kiss me itchin your scab kiss me with every thing you knew your heart will be mine your heart will be mine it'll suck you down; to the other side; to the other side other side; the other side it'll suck you down like a drain your heart will be mine[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted August 18, 2003 Author Share Posted August 18, 2003 Your poems always disturb me Mitch. You are a sick boy you know that? *looks around* [color=blue][i][size=1][center]When poetry delves to a level of distained vile. I'de lay praise for soap.[/color][/size][/i][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinken Posted August 18, 2003 Share Posted August 18, 2003 [COLOR=orange]The filtere[/COLOR][COLOR=orangered]d golden rays [/COLOR] [COLOR=royalblue]On th[/COLOR][COLOR=blue]e crys[/COLOR][COLOR=darkblue]tal-cle[/COLOR][COLOR=blue]ar wa[/COLOR][COLOR=royalblue]ters;[/COLOR] [COLOR=limegreen]A pe[/COLOR][COLOR=green]aceful m[/COLOR][COLOR=limegreen]orning...[/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted August 18, 2003 Author Share Posted August 18, 2003 oh how beautifully transcribed upon this html page! *smiles* (will edit post for my haiku for today lata.gtg for now) [i][center][color=red][size=1]Incandescense is but the illusion of light. Heat alone bring not.[/color][/size][/i][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luminaire Posted August 19, 2003 Share Posted August 19, 2003 [color=crimson]Beautiful Petals Falling in a pink shower As winter draws near[/color] [color=blue]Dancing Twirling Leap Dance the dance of life and grief 'Til you fall down dead[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted August 19, 2003 Author Share Posted August 19, 2003 [i][center][color=teal][size=1]Bloom. A flower, yet not. Bloomed amongst the trees of red and yellow. Bloom.[/color][/size][/i][/center] say ur name reminds me of a tech that Crono does in Chrono Trigger :) Ever wrote a very offbeat poem which doesnt nessasarily reflect anything about your current thoughts? :-D [color=red][size=1][i][center] Cheating biaches, I hate them. Whores...hate em. Ho's ...hate em' quite a lot.[/color][/size][/i][/center] ....eh. thats a new style :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luminaire Posted August 21, 2003 Share Posted August 21, 2003 My name is a tech that both Crono and Serge use in Chrono Trigger and Chrono Cross. [color=crimson]Slowly dripping time Away like an hourglass Sometimes it's not sand[/color] O_o where did that come from? [color=crimson]Why do we all fight? What's the freakin' point of it? Can you answer me?[/color] All questions...that's new for me. [color=crimson]Soft purring comes from Her small pink nose I love so A kitten and she's mine[/color] I wrote that for my kitty who is sleeping in my lap ^_^ ~Lumi ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted August 21, 2003 Author Share Posted August 21, 2003 Good 1's! :):) [i][color=red][size=1][center]A kitten is much akin to depend. Furry little little buggers eh?[/i][/color][/size][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted August 21, 2003 Share Posted August 21, 2003 [COLOR=indigo]The glittering snow Becomes red from our own Treachery inside First attempt at a Haiku please forgive.... [/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted August 21, 2003 Author Share Posted August 21, 2003 Haiku in english seems to be the affinity of all poetic injustice.. :) Its soooo hard to use bigger words because of the syllable limits, so of course Japanese versions are much more...vivid :) I like that one... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted August 23, 2003 Author Share Posted August 23, 2003 [i][color=red][size=1][center]Thou hast likely not read even a smidge. Can'st thou write thy own for us?[/color][/size] [color=blue][size=1]Tears, pulling. Choking. Haze of red. Pure death upon all who oppose it.[/color][/size] [color=green][size=1]When alone, my mind stirrs. A murrmur unlike any ever faced. Why me? Why?[/color][/i][/size][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted August 23, 2003 Share Posted August 23, 2003 People are staring Staring straight into my soul Staring at my heart Please let me go free I can not stand all of this I beg you free me I went running down The hill where I once knew dad And now, he's not there I've only written one before. That was the first one, I think. I might have done more. All I know is I just made up the last two, the first one I did for a project. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinkoru Posted August 23, 2003 Share Posted August 23, 2003 [color=indigo] ____ Walking amist the, placid faces of people, who don't notice me. ____ Staring, looking from, the mirror, who shows me who I'm not. I don't know. ____ The looking glass is, something I fear. Showing me, what I will never be. ____ Just a few.....[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted August 28, 2003 Author Share Posted August 28, 2003 *yawns* Im about to pass out! Its not the poem danni... hehe im just dead! :) [color=red][size=1][center][i]Eyes closed. Tired and oh so exhausted. Why so damned worn? Just need some more rest.[/color][/size][/i][/center] [color=blue][i][size=1][center]Let me drown. Lets end this game. Its so useless and has no point at all. Lets face the facts; you and your dreams. Dreams of lost thought, stupor and conscience. Put the past behind you and start again. Face the facts; you dont belong.[/color][/i][/size][/center] Ohh... :) hehe. ------------ havent done one in a while so here it goes: [color=sienna][size=1][center][i]Sucked deeply into your sick mess. Usurped from your vile, putrid little dreams.[/color][/i][/size][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted August 30, 2003 Share Posted August 30, 2003 Silver strands of hair Caressing her tender skin Defining beauty The beat continues As the drums of war proclaim The blood spilt of innocence Gah just for you phantom I suck at these I don't know why you insist on me doing them.....blech.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted August 30, 2003 Author Share Posted August 30, 2003 [color=red][size=1][center][i]When oneself can peer into their work, seeing the flaws. Grand...that one is.[/i][/center][/size][/color] Just for you Bri :-D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Carr Posted September 5, 2003 Share Posted September 5, 2003 I like yours Phantom. *.* yay! impromtu poems! [color=tomato] [size=1] The day's end has come darkness has fallen. If only certain rest comes also. Is dark consceptions, what keep me from sleep? Or thoughts of rousing?[/size] [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted September 5, 2003 Author Share Posted September 5, 2003 a haiku...syllables not withstanding :( ..but oh well.. [i][color=red][size=1][center]Two corpses, for nothing. From nothing there is nothing. why is it there? why am I here? For no more reason than that a corpse is a corpse.. and I am as well, however fleshbound.[/i][/color][/size][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tattoi nobori Posted September 5, 2003 Share Posted September 5, 2003 [center][SIZE=1][color=red] This noble banner, Flipping lightly in the wind: A proud heritage. [/color][/SIZE][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinkoru Posted September 5, 2003 Share Posted September 5, 2003 [color=indigo]Sorry itz been a bit... _____ Seeing you, seeing me. I see the look in your eyes. I love you so. Thats one was just 4 you Phantom :) _____ Her, this woman I see. Why so I look so much like her? Shes not me. _____ Luck in love, luck in life. Its a gamble, roll the dice. You won, have fun! IT RHYMES!! Whoot. _____ A strong willed lover, My heart in shuch a tight bind, wings of love are mine. _____ My heart flutters so, when you look into my eyes, my love is all yours. Yeah last ones were for Phantom too.:) Someone grade my Haiku's!!!! PLEASE?!?!?!:):):)[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted September 5, 2003 Author Share Posted September 5, 2003 On a scale of from [color=blue]1[/color] to [color=red]10[/color]. I give your overall rating of [color=red]8[/color]. Why? well for several reasons... 1. its not in japanese lol. 2. its good, they have very few weak points, as they shouln't...for if you follow the rules and let your mind flow... haiku is a simple style. 3. its not my place to give perfect or underperfect 'scores' on anything ..and in response... [color=blue][i][center][size=1]A poem is a poem. Poetry makes sense regardless of how interpreted.[/color][/size][/center][/i] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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