Guest pantalaimon Posted August 20, 2003 Share Posted August 20, 2003 The shadows were amassing all he could do was run back to the safety of the outside world he went back to the window he came in from but the shadows had boarded it up he reached for his last few bullets. and loaded them into his berreta and fired at them and once again they just laughed and and all he could say was damn.....so that boy died in the abandoned hospital consumed by the shadows eventually he became one of them. :devil: :butthead: :demon: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kumori Urufu Posted August 21, 2003 Share Posted August 21, 2003 [SIZE=1][COLOR=darkblue]learn to punctuate.[/COLOR][/SIZE] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Patronus Posted August 22, 2003 Share Posted August 22, 2003 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Shadow Wolf [/i] [B][SIZE=1][COLOR=darkblue]learn to punctuate.[/COLOR][/SIZE] [/B][/QUOTE] [size=1][b]And write..and think.. You seriously need to learn to depict the scene, and work on your grammar. If you want this to be good, detail [i]everything[/i]. Leh[/b][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest dayday Posted August 23, 2003 Share Posted August 23, 2003 You know, I give out free lessons. If you want I could give you a one, or a dozen. You don't see to care if you use correct grammer though. You've been told about it many times. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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