Assassin Posted September 19, 2003 Share Posted September 19, 2003 [size=1][color="666666"] Summer Winds Winds that blow at night. Winds that blow untill morning's light. Winds that carry love so far. Winds at some times, leaving me ajar. Winds that carry me far away. Winds that will carry me back some day. Winds...Oh Summer Winds... ________________________ ________________________ Please read and rate. If you have any suggestions I might change it. [/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Whiteblaze Posted September 20, 2003 Share Posted September 20, 2003 I really like that, Aoshi! I don't like to rate things, but since you asked, well, I'd give it a . . . 9/NINE. I don't like to "critique" poems either because it just doesn't seem right to me some how. However, I will say that something inside of me wishes this wonderful poem was longer. :) BTW, nice rhyming! ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Assassin Posted September 20, 2003 Author Share Posted September 20, 2003 [size=1][color="666666"] Thank you Yami! I am thinking of expanding it. Here is another poem of mine. -------------------------- The Midnight Sky The midnight sky that shows up at night. The midnight sky that seems glow and take flight. The midnight sky that in sometimes turns gray. The midnight sky that seems to go away. The midnight sky that will come again the next day. The Midnit Sky...That only last's at night. Until the mourning light. [/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Skyechild91 Posted September 20, 2003 Share Posted September 20, 2003 Both are really good, Josh-chan. I likees! Not bad at all. Rate? Hmm... First- 9/9 Second- 8/9 Really good, Josh-chan! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Assassin Posted September 20, 2003 Author Share Posted September 20, 2003 [size=1][color="666666"] Thank you Sailor Star :D and here is another poem I thought of America and though " Eagle is a sign of america" in my mind. --------------------- Eagle's Soaring! Eagle's that soar through the sky. Eagle's that never say good bye. Eagle's that fly through the evening. Eagle's that will never be leaving. Eagle's that is S-O-A-R-I-N-G [/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maully Posted September 20, 2003 Share Posted September 20, 2003 [color=green]Your poems are good, but they are sorrowfully short. I think I like the summer winds one best. What's the rating scale here? 8/9, I guess, it seems the most personal of the three[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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