Manic Webb Posted September 28, 2003 Share Posted September 28, 2003 This is a little food for thought. Food not taught But food that ought To teach us the differences In our existences. 'Cause I don't know what this is, when I can't live in blissfulness I said I don't know what this **** is Because we were separated by my blackness You cannot deny this Though you denied the feelings And all the appealing Things That pull us closer together So although the spiritual pulls us The visual will keep us apart. Forever. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meteora Posted September 30, 2003 Share Posted September 30, 2003 [color=666666][size=1][i]wow thats an awsome poem. Howlong didit take you tomake it. Formeit would have taken the whole day. I cant write poetry. I wish I could. Well Please post up some more of your Poems Manic. Also the poem, I am getting an odd feeling about it. Did something inspire you to write it?[/color][/size][/i] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted September 30, 2003 Share Posted September 30, 2003 [size=1] Are you condeming white people? Are you saying we'll be apart forever? Scoff at those questions lol. They have nothing to say. Rhetorical, if you'd say. Anyways, the poem/rap-ish-thing/song lyrical-ing is decent, although I feel that it's only a fragment, and could be more fully developed than it is. But what you have now is decent and tasty in some ways at least. Yay.[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Manic Webb Posted September 30, 2003 Author Share Posted September 30, 2003 Scoff scoff scoff. Actually, it's about a lady-friend of mine who wouldn't date me. She was Asian, I'm African-American. People who knew us said that we looked good together, but she refused to be more than just friends. Somebody told me it was probably a racial thing. Apparently, some older Asian adults don't like black people, and there could've been some conflict with her parents. Our friendship even started to suffer at some point. I write what I like to call Incomplete Poems. I'm really scatter-brained when it comes to poetry. I open myself up, and it gets hard to keep track of all of my thoughts as they rush out. Thus, my poems end up incomplete. Those few lines I wrote only took me about 5 minutes to think up, but then I became stuck. Either I could've saved up that poem to finish for another day (which I do way too often. And those poems never end up getting finished), or I submit it as-is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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