Sky Moonflow Posted October 1, 2003 Share Posted October 1, 2003 Lonlyness Lonlyness is black and white It sounds like someone crying It tastes bitter And smell like a rotton apple It looks like an endless pit It makes you feel like you don't belong ----------------------------------------------------------------- Like Me It's so dark I can't see a thing I can't feel a living soul I'm alone All I see is a flower petal It slowly fades away Leaveing me to stay A white rose appears It seems frozen in time It dosen't fall It dosen't rise It dosen't grow tall It dosen't die It just sits there It's like me just alone So..completly...alone -------------------------------------------------- Tears won't go away Pain will forever stay Tired of pretending Can't live like this anymore Have to find a way To fight my sorrow And live my life But still hanging on by a thread Death staring me in the face Trying to take me any chance it gets Standing strong Never to give in Never to fall ------------------------ Well that's all I have "Take the pain of the world and put it in a ball. Then you will find true lonlyness" -The one called Sky Moonflow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CB Shin Posted October 2, 2003 Share Posted October 2, 2003 That was very beautiful. Hope you don't mind an extension Hope still dwindles in my heart, Feeding light to the darkness, An endless Abyss fueled by emotion, Still fighting, Never Faltering, For within the dark, There is a light, Courage and compassion, Feelings of love and grace, The rose petal, Taunting and laughing in silence, But a ray of light, Strengthens your spirit, As you grab the petal, New Feelings, Of warmth and love, Emcompasses your mind, For within the dark, There is always a dark Hope you like it. It's not very good since I wrote this in haste...:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sky Moonflow Posted October 3, 2003 Author Share Posted October 3, 2003 Nice. Well hope for more comments soon. Kitty Lee Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Heavyblade Posted October 4, 2003 Share Posted October 4, 2003 Yeah they're alright. They just don't have alot of feeling and depth to them. But that's just me. Loads of grammatical and spelling errors. Still good though. Good job Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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