Bio Posted October 3, 2003 Share Posted October 3, 2003 [COLOR=red]All the land will tremble All the life will meet Seeking refuge from the tainted one The skies part, to reveal a sword, The symbol of their death As the war rages on below, a greater one rages above, For the rivals collide Seeking to end the battle, is the light Seeking to fulfill their vengeful desires, the dark The war rages, unbeknowenst to the warriors below With unknown desire, The lost one is a slave to the dark As the sword peirces the trembling land, All the innocent perish The ones who seek to do good survive And are destined to battle the tainted one The Elements meet thier kin, and become stronger The tainted one is angered by this, and seeks to destroy them The light will form a power Strong enough to defeat the tainted one[/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ares Posted October 3, 2003 Share Posted October 3, 2003 Okay, that was great, only you misspelled a word or two. Is this something you made up on your own? It's pretty nicely written, I'll say. Well, keep writing. Bye for now. Oh, and do you write prophecies as a hobby? :laugh: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bio Posted October 3, 2003 Author Share Posted October 3, 2003 Yea, I wrote it myself. I'll go back and look for the misspellings... Thanks for responding. I'll be sure to write more of these. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Heavyblade Posted October 4, 2003 Share Posted October 4, 2003 Yeah it's ok but it just doesn't "click" you know what I mean? The lines are kinda choppy and thoughts are scattered throughout the stanzas. Still good but it's kinda "run of the mill" prophecy stuff. Ya know " the light wil destroy the dark" so on and so forth. Still good, I like the voice in it. Good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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