Bio Posted October 4, 2003 Share Posted October 4, 2003 I'm busy tonight... I've written like 5 poems. Well tell me what you think of this. __________________ Sacrifice Oh, but only innocent eyes Must see the face of death, And they alone must sacrifice A child cries, To no avail They shall not die, But stay In torment forever, Till they are saved And saved they shall be, For the tainted one calls for vengence And the gate opens, The child, cold from torment Will slay his kin, Never realizing the truth And the tainted one's lies Until the morning, The lost will cry To no avail Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kittie Posted October 4, 2003 Share Posted October 4, 2003 [color=silver] I liked this one...I mean...it has nice words. There seemed to be something missing in it though...can't quite put my finger on it...but other than that it was a nice poem... :babble: [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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