Moor_Child Posted October 15, 2003 Share Posted October 15, 2003 Well, I had to write some poetry for my english class and after getting some good grades on them, I finally got the guts to put the here in the OB. Comments are welcome, good or bad. I?m Grounded (this is my sonnet. it was really hard to right) I got myself grounded today, it reeked I showed my parents today, they were mad My report card wasn?t what I had seeked The grades were not very good, they were bad It had an F, D, and quite a few C?s But I had a B, and in band an A Now I will have to be a busy bee It is in my room I will have to stay Now I will have to study long and hard Now locked away in my room I will be So that I may get a good report card Hopefully my parents will unground me Hopefully I will be ungrounded soon In fact I hope it will be before noon that's all for now. I might share more later. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kittie Posted October 16, 2003 Share Posted October 16, 2003 [color=silver] i thought your poem was kute though it ended a bit too soon leaving it sounding incomplete... keep at it...[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Break Posted October 16, 2003 Share Posted October 16, 2003 [size=1][color=CC0000]It's alright. Try to make the rhyming flow more, I found that most lines of your poem do not flow into the next, like they should. If you keep trying, you will probably get what I mean soon. Good effort. ^^[/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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