Kyo no Ryu Posted October 31, 2003 Share Posted October 31, 2003 Thanks. The new poem is very good. I read the whole thing but didnt really pay attention to the last stanza b/c of Hamtaro. Hahaha. Its still good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted October 31, 2003 Author Share Posted October 31, 2003 [color=deeppink] Ick, I'm tired. Here's my poem. [b]Beautiful Suicide[/b] Your death is embedded forever in my mind a beautiful tragedy your crimson blood is the perfect paint for a sick masterpiece. metallic finger paint colored red life is bled slowly through your veins. scar tissue and lovely pain write it on the walls slowly salty tears do fall nails scraping against hardwood and alone I stood. This is your beautiful tragedy My insanity Pure and sinful An act of bravery. And still of cowardice. The beautiful paradox The beautiful suicide. Mainly the result of Mitch messing with my mind. I'll get you Mitch...^-~ -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted October 31, 2003 Share Posted October 31, 2003 Wow that was awesome. I like it since it didnt give me suicide ideas. I actually found it humorouse as I read its simplicity. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Muad'Dib Posted October 31, 2003 Share Posted October 31, 2003 man... I can think of so many jokes I could make on that last one, but I don't wanna be rude :babble: lol, it seemed to be something you made out of being spontanious. Can't think of much else to say..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted October 31, 2003 Author Share Posted October 31, 2003 [color=deeppink] As tired as I was before, I am even more so today. * posts her poem and scoots off to bed for a quick nap before trick or treating * [b]Game (The Art of Suicide)[/b] Tic-tac-toe on my wrists Slits on my fists The blood paints a game Of the suicidally insane Move your king, he's in check, Slowly, so slowly, you're a wreck And now we're falling into Candyland Mommy's pills spill in my hand All the pretty colors... Gambling with 9mm Russian Roulette 1 out of 6, will you be next? The art of chance, a dangerous dance; With fickle, Lady Luck. The art of suicide is just a game. Yea. Okay. Sleep. Happy Halloween y'all. -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 1, 2003 Share Posted November 1, 2003 A very nice poem. Unlike the slightly dumber 12 year olds I went trickortreating and got lotsa candy. See ya on the flipside. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arasoi Posted November 1, 2003 Share Posted November 1, 2003 [color=royal blue]I absolutely love your poems. You're a very talented writer. The very first poem, though, was my favorite. I don't think it had a title...at least, not one that I could find. It just reminded me so much of my own situation every day, where I don't like God, and then he spites me, and I hate him more, and the cycle continues. "Game (The Art of Suicide)" was really good too. All your poems seem to remind me of something in my life, and that's what I love about them. All of your poems are absolutely amazing.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted November 1, 2003 Author Share Posted November 1, 2003 [color=deeppink] Wooo! Halloween rocked. I have enough candy to last me awhile...* joy. * As inspired as I was to write a Halloween poem, I ended up writing one about a guy. Basically, I like him, but he's ignoring me. Long story. Read the poem and see if you can figure it out. [b]Accept[/b] I stepped onto this edge so oblivious With thoughts only of you Entranced in the enigma Without realizing you were a darker shade of blue. For a moment I was flying And at the same time dying Drowning inside of us Mixed emotions are the hardest to show Hurt comes from all the things I should have known. And now that you've pushed me away Your indiffrence hurts me more than anything you could ever say I can't accept the fact that this wasn't real I want you to feel I need you to want the same things I do. Defeated at every turn No more trust, love, or concern Just a blank stare from your eyes And then you look away. The heartless part of me The numbness no one can see Keeps saying that I need to let go Accept the things I should have known. But your face is imbedded into my eyes Your voice always speaks in my ears And the little part of your soul that you bared Always seems to calm my fears. I can taste the faded trace of your lips Feel the soft edge of your hips Right beneath my fingertips And it's driving me insane. You lead me around like a blind fool I think I might've heard the whisper Of a promise A whisper, and then it was gone. So long, so long What a sad song. And all the things I should have known All the things I learned before I lost them in your eyes Lost them in the breath of a sigh. Let down my defenses inside your soul, Swallow me whole Take my heart and destroy it Kill me with a single blow Because that would be so much more easy Accepting your rejection is more than I can bear. I can't accept all the things, That I really, should have known. Okay. Have a good 'day after' everyone! -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Muad'Dib Posted November 1, 2003 Share Posted November 1, 2003 wow.. you seem to write better when you're depressed ^^! no, really! all the best ones so far have beem the depressing ones! lol, you could call me nuts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arasoi Posted November 1, 2003 Share Posted November 1, 2003 [color=royal blue]Wow...that poem almost made me cry. It reminds me so much of someone I used to love...and how I used to feel about him. And, on some rare occasions, still do. My feelings for him used to be [i]exactly[/i] like that. I have a poem about that, but seeing how I wrote it a long time ago, it's not that great. Your poem says everything so much better. I'm going to have to stop by this thread every day to see what your newest poem is, because I love them all.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 1, 2003 Share Posted November 1, 2003 mmmm....candy. Yeah yeah new poem really good reminds me of .hack whatever, caaaannnddyy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted November 2, 2003 Author Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=deeppink] Thanks for the reviews, again. =) I'm glad my poem spoke to you Arasoi, if I can do that, then it makes it all worth it. The last line of the first stanza in Accept is similar to a No Doubt song, although at the time I didn't realize it. No Doubt rocks my socks... Anyway, here's a short, melancholy little poem I wrote awhile ago, after I had been listening to Marcy Playground obsessively: [b]Tin Angel[/b] Tin angel, rattle your wings It?s such a sad song you sing Metallic soul you cannot steal Born without the ability to feel. Held up by strings Master puppeteer, Please hold her here Or else her fragile body might fall. Echos through a darkened alley Words that no one can hear Screams born of things you fear Plague the mind, it?s way too near Tin angel, rattle your wings It?s such a sad song she sings Damaged soul no one will steal Broken without the ability to heal. I?m standing here all alone I?ve been shoved and thrown I?m waiting for my angel Tin angel, won?t you rattle your wings? This is a nice little symbolic poem. Tell me what you think. -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bio Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=royalblue][size=1]Wow. I'm assuming you speak of the tin angel as either you, or someone you know. I think it's someone you know, possibly the best friend you spoke of before. Maybe you look up to this 'Tin Angel', but he/she isn't happy with him/herself, and is probably depressed, making you upset feeling pity for him/her, because you can't understand why they are so unhappy. But thats just me. Anyway, great ryhming, great words, great everything. YAY! I can't think of any word besides great to describe this... Excellent! Yay again! I expanded my vocabulary by one word![/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 wow thats prett good. For some reason every time I read it (3) I forget it instantly. Weird. But good. You still forgot t reply to my thread........ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arasoi Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=royal blue]Wow...excellent, as always. Your poetry's touched me once again. I know I feel like the tin angel described in that last poem a lot, particularly now. My favorite part of the poem was "Damaged soul no one will steal / Broken without the ability to heal" because I always feel that way, regardless of how I may appear on the outside... Simply amazing, Karma. ^-^[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Muad'Dib Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 that was... *sniff*... so beautiful! Ok, I'm not THAT sensitive... that was a good one karma... and what did I tell ya? the best are the depressing ones! lol... wait a sec... yup, all the poems on this page are depressing... go figure! :wigout: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted November 2, 2003 Author Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=deeppink] Yes. Often times, the painful emotions are what inspire the most beautiful and vivid art, because people feel them so deeply. But...since I just posted Untitled, which is not, and will never be mistaken for a happy piece in any way shape or form, I thought I'd post one of my happier poems here for today, to kind off-set the depressing tone of Untitled. Here it is: [b]Let's[/b] For one day Let?s just be Let?s just be you and me And forget about everything else Let?s sit out on the roof, and watch the raindrops fall. Let?s not answer any of our calls. Let?s pretend, and make-believe, that if you give, you are sure to receive. Let?s not listen to any of the sad songs, Let?s stay away from all the mad throngs, of all those crazy people, and all their abominations. For just one day, Let?s just be, Let?s just be you and me, and forget about ourselves. -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 ....................wow.....that was awemazecool. (aweaome, amazing cool, for future refrense) It was an actually....spirit lifting piece....and I liked it...short as it may be. Continue on and kep my thread updated -_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arasoi Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=royal blue]That's amazing. It's so simple, yet so beautiful. That's what I wish could happen with me and someone else...to just get away from everyone and be ourselves. I wish that people could always be themselves...but, that will never happen. There will always be those who pretend to be someone else... Another excellent poem. ^-^[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted November 3, 2003 Author Share Posted November 3, 2003 [color=deeppink] Thanks you guys. Sorry for the lack of my usual enthusiasm for poetry and such. Not really having a good day. But I'll let my poetry talk for me. [b]Hated[/b] Standing here in the rain Full of lonliness and pain Strands of hair pasted on my face Tears leave a red-rimmed trace Of all the hurt I feel inside. Staring at the window, watch the houses pass by Taunting cries, cruel made-up lies, and a choked-up sigh Shame that shouldn't be mine Guilt that shouldn't be felt And yet my heart is nothing but black. Amidst all these people I know All this love is just a show I'm not really here They don't really care Amidst all these smiling people And all I feel is hated. Hated for who you are Hated by eyes that stare from afar And think hateful thoughts that they whisper to the wind. Every word I say is a sin Hated for existing in my own skin To everyone it seems My life is just a mistake. Curled up inside this cold leather seat My life is shambles, nothing but defeat They all hate me, I'm sure of it now I'm sorry, I tried as hard as I could But I guess I just didn't know how I tried to be the person you wanted But I guess I'm just not good enough They scream at me again, startled cry Mocking laughter, let's make her fly Sleep is no escape from the hate Respite is nowhere that I might find Lost inside my own mind. Shuffle down this concrete hall Walk until you hit a wall And slowly open the door Only to realize that home isn't safe anymore Because here the screaming just gets louder The people are angrier and prouder Than anyone in the outside world. Lay in my bed Rest my aching head Hate pounds in from all sides And there's explosion on the inside The smell of hopelessness pervades everything The sick sight of surrender is everywhere, And slowly I die... Feeling hated by the world. Yep. Pretty straighforward. -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 3, 2003 Share Posted November 3, 2003 ....................what the hell inspired that poem?...............is that about you?............holy crap.........thats what happens when you give in to every steryotype thrown at you........its my favorite yet.....I shouldnt have read that poem........._._._. Be shure to check out my latest pieces. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arasoi Posted November 3, 2003 Share Posted November 3, 2003 [color=royal blue]As usual, I can relate to this poem, especially now. That poem describes how I feel constantly, particularly now, from events that have been happening over the past few days. It's an awful feeling, one that no one should have to experience. Regardless, though, many do...every day. Stereotypes rule this world, and they hurt everyone to varying degrees. Well, anyway...that's enough of my rambling. This poem was absolutely beautiful. The lines go together so well, and when I read it out loud to myself it sounded wonderful. I was almost moved to tears...it's very sad. "Hated" is definitely my favorite out of all your poems thus far. And...I hope the response to your letter was a good one...but...somehow, from the poem, I get the feeling that it didn't go too well. If that's true, then I'm very sorry. I hope you feel better.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted November 4, 2003 Author Share Posted November 4, 2003 [color=deeppink] No response whatsoever, which is the one thing he could have done to hurt me the most. Aya, I've given up on him. Yes, Hated is partially his fault. I should give it to him and tell him 'this is how you make me feel. happy?' Of course, that would be rather spiteful of me. And I don't want to be like that. Maybe if I keep repeating "This too, will pass," it just might come true. Probably not. But enough of that. Another poem I wrote today, inspired by my beloved friend Beezel, and written listening to Disturbed. Here we go: [b]The World's Fantasy[/b] The world's fantasy Becomes my insanity Apathy settles beneath the skin Prick the finger, A blood bath begins with the tip of a pin Desire consumnes me Wrapped in chains, I cannot flee Drunk on temptation Overloaded by sensation This is the world's fantasy. Touch me, tear me Rip me apart with seduction's claws Lust's lips devour me with shining jaws Drowning and flying with pleasured pain Wicked laugh of the insane Unholy worldly fantasy Confessional walls covered in blood Child's innocence ground in the mud Greed and jealousy entrace me Bombarding me with burning, colored lights It's the plain blank truth no one can see Behind all the pretty lights and lies. Instigate the emotion Drown me in my own compulsion Explosion This is the world's fantasy; Insanity, Kill me with your sweet sickness End. I started this poem because of the fact that insanity and fantasy rhymed, it was supposed to be lighthearted. I guess this where listening to Disturbed gets me. Although I actually love how it turned out. The only suggestion I have to anyone who reads the poem is to search for hidden meanings within the lines, sometimes they're hard to find. I myself didn't realize them until I had read it after writing it. Enough of my rambles. TTFN. -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 holy shiznick! I love it! Oh snaaap! That was awesome! The whole time I read it I was laughing and getting more and more into it. That wa hilariouse! Aw man I love it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arasoi Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 [color=royal blue]Hmm...hidden meanings...I might have found some, but I don't know. I have to say that I liked the way it turned out, too. It was different, and I'm sure there are more hidden meanings within it that I didn't catch. It's one of those poems that has a different meaning to me every time I read it. Good job. And, I'm sorry about what happened with that guy...something like that's happened to me before. I hope you feel better.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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