Bio Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=royalblue][size=1]All of these poems are copyrighted under the username Kaiho. I am, obviously, Kaiho. By the way, even if you attempt to steal these, the moment you post any type of document that plagerises my work, about seven Federal Agents will tackle you, and take you to an insane asylum, [strike]where you get cupcakes[/strike] where I [b]heard[/b] you get cupcakes. ------------------------------ [Full Moon] The peace of the night's soft light The living day, the sun so bright And though this may all end so soon, There's still the sweet intoxication of the full moon As we sing the soft praises of noon, The lulluby of the crescent moon, The telltale song of the rain at night, The orchestra of snow, at morning light Though these all may end so soon, There's still the sweet intoxication of the full moon Can none compare, To the happiness in the air? As we run with laughter, to the song of the loon, Let be known the light of the bright, full moon The river's ebb and flow, The earth may sing, So? I will sing along to the song of the loon, For the sweet intoxication of the full moon ------------------------------ This is my self-proclaimed best self-written peice. It's not very metaphorical, which is suprising, since most of my poems are. I'll post more poems later, once people have responded. By the way, yes, I mean 'the song of the loon'. It's not a misspelling, a loon is a type of bird. Also, don't worry. Not all my poems are this cheerful. I was just in a good mood. [/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=deeppink] Quite beautiful. The imagery is gorgeous, and you have done it superbly, something not a lot of people can do. The poem had a nice, bittersweet tone, (complimented by the fact that I am currently listening to the Moonlight Sonata). I kept getting the image of a child playing blissful in a field at night, and even though he knows that it's going to end soon, he's still so happy to be out there. Very good, I'm excited about seeing your other work, do post it soon! =) -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bio Posted November 2, 2003 Author Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=royalblue][size=1]Thank you, Karma! Alright, here's a poem dedicated to my closest friend, who recently moved away. ------------------------- [Wingspan] In the corner of my mind, In the deepest, high blue sky, I see what else I've lost, but also what I've found I can now see how it has hurt you so And as we both scream mutely, The danger passes, and so we may breath Though one may have fled, Be sure they will return, For loss is not what was planned And so, if we are seperated, Keep this gift to remember me by, Keep the sky And though my gift seems selflish, look beyond its value, See what it truely means within If you cannot see, then use my eyes; I will use your ears Though our the circle is broken, The idea still remains, So we still may meet, And create that infinite line, Of an unbroken peace, Hope of once lost sanctuary So as we sing in the heart of the forest Let be known to the birds and trees, Let be known to the the humans of metal, Let be known to all on earth, You may break our circle Keep us from the forest, From our valued peace Then our circle may be broken, But our wings may still one day fly ---------------------- Well, I hope you like it. It's a perfect example of me going crazy with metaphores. I know it's kinda messy.[/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 wow. I am speehless. I cannot describe your (insert word) poetry. Its just so (insert 1 or 2 words). I am (word similar to bewildered). Be sure to check out my and Karma's threads. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bio Posted November 2, 2003 Author Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=royalblue][size=1]Here's a poem that's kind of hard to follow. Don't worry, I wrote it that way. I made it while I was listening to 'Butterfly' from DDR, so that kind of explains it. -------------------------- [Strands] Singing from the sun to moon You dance on strands of light Parading in the moonlight, Tell a tale from star to star If the darkness were as stone, You would pound it to powder Such a fine powder, It would sift through my hands If the light were as a web, You would dance 'cross its surface To find such a thing, Would be very rare, indeed If the sun were your bride, you would dance with her 'till the end of time To dance such a dance, A peaceful dance Sneaking from the sun to moon It breaks the strands of light Slaying in the moonlight Tell a tale from star to star So, if the darkness were as stone would it raise it up on high? Such a solid stone, It would be hard to use for sand So, if the light were as a web, Would it break the strands with joy? To do such a thing Would be very cruel, indeed So, if the sun were its bride It would mistreat her night for night To make such a plan A malicious plan Meeting between the sun and moon They do battle on strands of light And though they fight for different causes, Both tell a tale from star to star ----------------------- Enjoy! And many thanks for the compliments![/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 holy mo'in shiznicks. That was (word). I can- -ick u- -y jaw. (cant pick up my jaw). That was amazing. My eyes are still big in amazement. My brain keeps saying "holy mother of crap" over and over. I got a littlle lost near the end but was still bewildered. I almost laughed when you said that thing about cheeting on the sun but I was too breathless. Be sure to check out my poem thread. ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=deeppink] Absolutely wonderful Arch. Wingspan: Lovely and bittersweet. My favorite stanza was the one with 'keep this gift to remember me by...keep the sky.' Really beautiful. The rhythm was bit akward, but you still convey your message. I also liked the idea of a circle that's broken, but still there. Very good. =) Strands: Another nature-esque poem, and a gorgeous one at that. Yes, it was rather hard to follow, but I think it was about a war between the Sun and the Moon, and these strands of light that hold them all together. Or something along those lines. Sometimes it's better to leave your meaning abstract and full of metaphors, and this is a great example of that. I think this is my favorite so far, although Full Moon is a close second. Once again, good job. ^-^ -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bio Posted November 2, 2003 Author Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=royalblue][size=1]Thank you all, once again. Alright, here's another poem that I wrote a while ago. It sounds rather paranoid. ---------------------- [Window-Shopper] Though in the shadows you are as stone, Your haunts go unheeded Your abscence is unknown You lurk in my shadow, Where I don't want you to be You're still there watching, but you make no move on me As if your window-shopping, You watch, then pass me by But later you'll come hunting Only to satisfy the eye As I stumble through your darkness, You slither past my feet Your only here to scare me, I'm only here to see So why am I so frightened Of one who looks but doesn't touch? I know your here, but still you stay Only to pass, be on your way[/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 ..........-.....___....----.....nothin. Window shopping. Holy crap. How? How did you come up with such an interesting similie? Wow. It almost....makes my unafraid of the dark....almost. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bio Posted November 3, 2003 Author Share Posted November 3, 2003 [color=royalblue][size=1]Alright, here's another one. It's extremely short, but I plan on adding to it later. ----------------------- [Pieces] As we awalk Down a path To our sweet insanity We will find, We are here Where we aren't supposed to be In the dark, we will crawl, and we will not find a thing Though in the dark, We still search For an unknown fragment of life We might find, just one peice Of our never-ending bliss As we search, in the dark, Will we only find peace in this? ------------------------------ Well, there it is. Probably my darkest poem since Window-Shopper.[/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 3, 2003 Share Posted November 3, 2003 Holy crap where the heck do you come up with this awehotsweeool crap? (awesome, hot, sweet cool). That poem reminds me VERY much of .hack//sign. Please dont change it, its perfect as it is. And please look at and post in my poem thread. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 [color=deeppink] Absolutely lovely. I may not be able to keep up with them all, but still lovely. ^^;; Window-Shopper: Intresting. I'd like to know who you had in mind when you wrote it. Reminds me of my stalker. *shudders * Very nice rhythm and rhyme though. (?): I must say...I [i]loved[/i] this one. It's dark and sensual, like a lust tinged with a sort of black love. Excellent. Definitely one of my favorites, you don't need to add to it, although it would be intresting to see how you would if you did. Overall, great job. =) -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bio Posted November 4, 2003 Author Share Posted November 4, 2003 [COLOR=royalblue][size=1]Eh, sorry Chibi_Sango, but This isn't a thread about posting your own poetry, but since your poetry isn't bad, I think you should make your own thread. Please delete your post, however. Thanks! Eh, I just noticed that I forgot to put the title on that poem! It's called "Pieces". Well, for Window-Shopper, I didn't really have anybody in mind, but I was inspired to write it because of all the little kids that scream in those stupid haunted houses, even though the actors are never going to touch them. It's not all that, though. Thats just how I got the idea. Well, thanks for the comments! I think I'll post the first poem I've made... Heh, it's kind of like "Strands". --------------------------- [Rise] Lost one's reach for the stars, Kept only by their thoughts of glory Still, they reach for the sun Only to find a burning hell Rise, the earth shatters still, Lost in its bitter, pointless warring Fly, fly past the moon Search for a starlit sanctuary News of the shattering world breaks on a planet, found and guided The shattering threatens to kill, And annihilate this starlit sanctuary Past the wonderful world, Lies a planet vengeful and misguided This world conpires, Resolves to steal, Steal the power of the world Rise, the planets devide Chaotic warfare splits the nation Save, saving the world An angel punishes the evil hoards Rejoice! Restored are the worlds, Never again to be in darkness A monolith stands to remind, Remind of the sacrifice Rise ------------------------- Yes, doesn't it remind you of "Strands"?[/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 Ummm.... okay thats more of a short story... me no likey. Oh well. Check out my poem thread. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arasoi Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 [color=royal blue]I liked it. Your poems are unique...and they do seem to tell a story. Of course, I pretty much know what they're about already, seeing how...well, you know. ^^; Keep on writing. Your poems are interesting...very different from mine. But it's in a good way. Mine are dark, yours tell stories. Everyone's different.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bio Posted November 4, 2003 Author Share Posted November 4, 2003 [color=royalblue][size=1]Well, here's another old one. Enjoy! ----------------------------- [Holding On] All you, staring at me Tell me, how can you see? I'm really not that different anymore Tell me, how can you tell That I'm such an angel? I'm not so full of life anymore What happened that day, The day I gave my life away? To save the others from the fall I can no longer see the difference between you and me I just can't stay here anymore So, I've done some good things, Why do I feel so bad? The darkness in my heart is beating strong, Ever since that day, when I gave my life away How, can you see into me I'm not that simple, you'll find, I'm not that different anymore This darkness in my heart may be beating strong, But I've got to hold on You may think you've got me, And that you understand Well it's really not as simple as that I've been poisoned since that day The day my soul gave way And I am still holding strong The quavering darkness may be near, And my heart will have to find a place to take hold I may be fighting a war Against the one who tore my soul apart But I've still been here all along I'm still here, through it all[/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 [color=deeppink] Kyo - I disagree completely. Poems are usually meant to tell a story of some sort. Arch has done it beautifully with Rise. Arch - Yes, it's somewhat similiar to Strands, but not enough for them to be copies or anything. I actually liked Rise better. Actual Review of Poem (yes, that would be nice XD) - Bittersweet, beautiful imagery, and a very unique way of presenting an age-old theme. I love the idea that you're reaching for some sort of haven, 'the starlit sanctuary,' yet you cannot seem to reach it, and when you do, you find it's not what you thought it was. The sanctuary is more of an idea than an actual place, yet it exists too. And that the bitter wars between nations and planets threatens to destroy this idea, this hope. And then the angel comes down...very lovely. -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Arch [/i] [B][color=royalblue][size=1]Well, here's another old one. Enjoy! ----------------------------- [Holding On] All you, staring at me Tell me, how can you see? I'm really not that different anymore Tell me, how can you tell That I'm such an angel? I'm not so full of life anymore What happened that day, The day I gave my life away? To save the others from the fall I can no longer see the difference between you and me I just can't stay here anymore So, I've done some good things, Why do I feel so bad? The darkness in my heart is beating strong, Ever since that day, when I gave my life away How, can you see into me I'm not that simple, you'll find, I'm not that different anymore This darkness in my heart may be beating strong, But I've got to hold on You may think you've got me, And that you understand Well it's really not as simple as that I've been poisoned since that day The day my soul gave way And I am still holding strong The quavering darkness may be near, And my heart will have to find a place to take hold I may be fighting a war Against the one who tore my soul apart But I've still been here all along I'm still here, through it all[/color][/size] [/B][/QUOTE] I like that. Its very inspiring. Even though youve been beaten and battered you stand strong and live through it. I admire that. Theseaare the knd of poems I want to see more of. As for Karma, Im entitled to my own oppinion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arasoi Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 [color=royal blue]Your poems are very interesting. I liked this one a lot, it's very hopeful and inspiring. You know, as I was reading this, I thought it sounded more like a song. Of course, I don't know if there'd be any way to put music to it...but who knows. Maybe someday you can.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 [color=deeppink] Darnit Arch, you posted your newest poem before my review of your old one got posted! Curse you and your fast postage-ness! Lol. Just kidding. Kyo - And I'm entitled to disagree with you. ; ) [Holding On] Bittersweet, just like the last one. People don't see you as any different, even though you're now carrying this darkness inside you...I know how you feel. Very nice rhythm, as always. Who hurt your soul so much? (sorry for this shortness, I'm getting tired...) -Karma [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bio Posted November 5, 2003 Author Share Posted November 5, 2003 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by KarmaOfChaos [/i] [B][color=deeppink] Darnit Arch, you posted your newest poem before my review of your old one got posted! Curse you and your fast postage-ness! Lol. Just kidding. Kyo - And I'm entitled to disagree with you. ; ) [Holding On] Bittersweet, just like the last one. People don't see you as any different, even though you're now carrying this darkness inside you...I know how you feel. Very nice rhythm, as always. Who hurt your soul so much? (sorry for this shortness, I'm getting tired...) -Karma [/color] [/B][/QUOTE] [color=royalblue][size=1] Eh, no one did. I just write things depending upon my mood, and then I tie the strings together. Some of my poems are from personal experience, some are not. Most of the dark ones aren't. Alright, I guess I'll slow down a bit with my posting. I'll post another after someone posts. Heh, I already have all these so far written down, and I'm running out... Must... find... more inspiration![/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bio Posted January 3, 2004 Author Share Posted January 3, 2004 (I'm back!) If you see this on DeviantART, its because I submitted it there too. --- [Jewel of the Sea] Bring the twilight to the azure sky The wake in the water is rising far too high Build a fortress or we all shall die; Only for me? Only for me? Sound your bell in the twilight The wave approaches by the night Take shelter in the fortress for fool?s delight; Only for me? Only for me? Midnight falls, devouring all at its darkest time The storm pounds down in ironic rhyme Our shelter gone; life is but a weak design; Only for me? Only for me? Down we fall, ironic laughter as we seek our fate Drown we shall in this hopeless state Those walls we built were made far too late; Only for me? Only for me? Heed the warnings of the seer; Even just a wake could destroy what?s dear The smallest ripple struck the world with fear; Only for me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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