Phantom Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 This poem is about somthing I know very well, Its about the times that ive spent in hell, The goblins, the zombies, the old warehouse bar, Drinking and fighting, death from afar, Where no innocense exists, troubled souls, revelled hate, A journey here lasts not measured in time, worms on thy plate, Taken from a weeping childs beating heart, given for a warlord's new throne, A view unlike any others, where bats and hordes and the antichrist still reign, I see the thigns of pitiful vile, I feel the muck and sense the bile, Tasting freedom but everlast, touching heaven is not in grasp, We see the spectrum of our hate, we know the sanctum of hell's gate, Ive cherished the moments of heaven and hell, the moments unheard of that have given me my spell, of staggering life and staggering death, of placid assurance and stealthy unwealth. You see it u feel it and touch it all day. You know it u show it you throw it away, I have given you power ive given you hope, ive given corruption and tainted the pope, you want to unwravel the novel of me, you want to sit back and take in what you see, but i give yo no chanecs i give you no fame, you sit back and watch in your pitiful shame. than once it all setltles and ones it all falls, my empire going, up to the halls, of the heavenly place, the place of redemtion...i find my place with god and you stop it all. your shame is now my game, and you lose the sight you have seen all along. My times in heaven my times in ell sharing u the poetry that should never be loved at all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Annie Posted November 2, 2003 Share Posted November 2, 2003 [color=teal][font=times new roman][b]Whoa, easy killer..Don't worry about what the newbie said, I loved your poem. You know how you can tell if a poem is really moving? I will tell you my secret..If a poem is truly captivating, one will see past all of the spelling mistakes or grammar mistakes. If someone can read it and think "Man, I know how he/she feels", then it's all good. Once again, I loved the poem and I would love to read more of your poetry. ~anima[/color][/font][/b] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wiccansamurai Posted November 3, 2003 Share Posted November 3, 2003 theres no possible way to have grammar mistakes in poetry, different uses of grammar evoke different emotions in the reader. I liked the poem and how it was written, it was original. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted November 3, 2003 Author Share Posted November 3, 2003 thanks and im not going to kill anyone.. he was just too mean to say anything about it..only how it was wrote.. kinda annoyed me.. if he was gona have the nerve to knock it at least read it... i dont mind being burned but..lol oh well. thanks.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DarkElfAngel Posted November 3, 2003 Share Posted November 3, 2003 wow...this poem is really good. it doesnt even matter wat about the spelling and grammer. i mean its not like anyones perfect ne? ^_^;; at least i know im not. well great job hope to read some more work soon! l8erz! Short Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Isus Posted November 3, 2003 Share Posted November 3, 2003 i liked it!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Annie Posted November 3, 2003 Share Posted November 3, 2003 [color=teal][font=times new roman][b]I am sorry Mitch, I know that you moderate this forum, but...Newbies, I would suggest for your own good, do not post one senences. I just wastes space.... That being said, once again I apologize Mitch...please don't hurt me..:nervous:.. And once more...Phantom, I would love to see more poems. Are you going to post anymore? ~anima[/color][/font][/b] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted November 3, 2003 Author Share Posted November 3, 2003 Yes. i wrote a song...sory for the repEtizhun mr period guy. ------ Death Toll -- I want to die, take me to my place, just take me to the end, I want to die, take me to my place, just take me to the end, I want to die, take me to my place, just take me to the end, I want to die, take me from this place, and never bring me back! I, have to find myself, have to reach the end, cant take it any longer, I, cannot hold my grace, the mask I wear is old, have to reach my sole, cant take it any more, CAN YOU TELL ME WHY? There, Is no peace, not for me, not for me not for me, There, is no place, I am safe, I have no haven, no haven for me, CAN YOU TELL ME WHY!? I want to die, want to die, want to die, I want to die, want to die, want to die, I want to die, want to die, want to die, cant hide my face any longer, cant pretend im fearless any more, dont want to play this fucking game, I'm sick and tired of... I, have to find myself, have to reach the end, cant take it any longer, I, cannot hold my grace, the mask I wear is old, have to reach my sole, cant take it any more, CAN YOU TELL ME WHY? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DarkElfAngel Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 wow this song is really good! it sort of reminds me of LP. that' probablly why i like it ^_^;; but it really is good. im jealous lol well i guess thats all for now. l8erz! Short :sleep: ((soooo sleepy...)) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inuyashagurl_15 Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 I like both your poem and song Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Inuyashagurl_15 [/i] [B]I like both your poem and song [/B][/QUOTE] [size=1] I also like your seven-word sentence without a period. It should be obvious that creatures such as your quote above are against the rules and considered spam. And Phantom, double posting as well as bypassing the censor when it isn't required is against the rules. Bypassing of the censor should only happen in posts where it is a part of the story/poem/whatever. You should know this well and written, you've been here long enough. And if you don't straighten out soon enough, you shall have to consider the consequences.[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted November 5, 2003 Author Share Posted November 5, 2003 I bypassed a sensor? I never thought there was no sensor, it usually just gives the ****. :) Oh well. If you did your job half as well as you think you do you would have checked it out long ago when it wasnt a double post. I cant help it if the dumb idiot deletes his post thus making my post a double. *shrugs* Yes im wrong for being too stupid to realize there must not be a sensor for this particular category and for not being attentive enough to spot when people delete their posts. ----------------------- tandom poetry between me and a friend. Hope you like. ------ To Whom It May Concern ------- [color=sienna][center]So I wait, Its not my choice, I'd love so much for a chance to rejoice... The flowers of time shed no peace, No pain no freedom, no release,[/color] [color=purple]I try to let go, but with all I have I still seem to hold on, I sit and work, but no matter what I do I hurt, I tell you I have not feelings Because for this I feel there is not a healing[/color] [color=sienna]Time-stamped, time-warped, alone with shame, Honor-meshed, Honor-guided, alone? that I came. [/color] [color=purple]Here I sit, hopeless and lost, Not realizing for love this would be my cost[/color] [color=sienna]For heavens and hell I?m flung, I?m tossed, The starry night gaze I?ve yearned for and crossed. [/color] [color=purple]Someone take me, shake me, Oh please wake me. I never thought Our love would come to this. All I wanted was for true bliss from your kiss[/color] [color=sienna]The lips, the grasp, a hold unknown, For me to experience thus, a wholesome bestowal. [/color] [color=purple]I don't know how to get through this... Your words are so sweet and soothing They are so moving These words you say are a lie Please just tell me why [/color] [color=sienna]You?ve told me enough you?ve told me too much, To tell me any more would bring death to my touch, I?ve bartered, I?ve challenged, and I?ve coupled our strengths, But still you don?t realize I?ve contempted your ranks. We knew such love we knew no pain, Together in bliss and harmony reigned. The end was near the time was close, Then when it happened, it lacked in verbose, When no one would help you and my end was sane, you drove me out and declared me no named. I?ve given I?ve tried I?ve soaked in my pain, But not even now am I truly insane. [/color] [color=purple]To know a hate that is so great is merrily unheard of I tried to let go, is that not what you wanted? My heart and sold are now nothing but haunted Take you words else where... Where they belong because I have listened to them far, far too long[/color] [color=sienna]So I wait, Its not my choice, I'd love so much for a chance to re-voice... The final words i speak of, The final breathes I take, The times we?ve spent together, The times we knew were fake... [/color] [color=purple]It's time to let go, but this I want you to know, My love was not untrue, and I will always be here for you[/color] [color=sienna]In these final breaths, With these final thoughts, Our words have deaths, Almost from our souls they were wrought.[/color][/center] ------ im the sienna she is the purple :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted November 5, 2003 Share Posted November 5, 2003 [size=1] Well, the censor is no longer used in this forum...but swearing blatantly and without purpose isn't heh. I'm sorry...I didn't notice that he'd deleted his post, and I hadn't noticed your post was probably before the censor was removed.[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted November 5, 2003 Author Share Posted November 5, 2003 tip of the tongue 4 now, an idiot poem without thought. [color=red][size=1][center][i]Touched, moved, heartfelt and warm. Thunder, lightening... the bolts of this storm, The colors, the words, the powers are mine, The becon, the testing, the sender is blind, My blender is churning and spitting out shit, The time has come for me to return it, The blender, symbolic and meaning unsheathed, The purpose now given but never released, The turning, the moving, the tumbling unrest. Is all about my bent-over failing best.[/color][/size][/center][/i] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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