Chichiri's Girl Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 K first off I'm not gonna take credit for this. It's one of those ideas for a mnag me and Erinzyger had that we both fell in love with. So yeah I wouldn't be postin this if it wasn't for her. This is told from Dea's point of veiw at the begining of the third season by the way.... **************************************************** Fear. That's what is was. Memories from long ago being uncovered after so long. She forgot. She had been made to forget. Forget everything. Then when she remembered no more what did they do? They left her. Or more she left them. All she had left....a few short flash backs of three figures and a photograph of strangers. Looking at the picture she remembered something. One was her best friend since the age of two. The other had been her soul mate, her lover. Now they were gone. She gentely traced the faces in the picture. Good god was that her? What the hell was up with her hair?!? It was in 2 buns. It seemed like they were glued tight on her neck. She looked closer. She saw something she never had seen before. Cat ears! What the f**k!?!?, she thought to herself. Why did she have cat ears? The other girl, she too had them. And the two men. They were wearing lab coats. One with his spiked up hair and the other with his steel rimmed glasses. What kind of weridos did I hang out with back then? She wondered only for no anwsers intill..... Suddenly she remembered. Everything. The demons. The robots. The string. A pain deep in her chest. She closed her eyes. They were in trouble. She knew it. He was in trouble. She was blinded by a quick falsh of light. After it dimmed the item she recogized, the thing she dreaded, appeared. She knew what would become of her future if she grabed it. It would go down the drain. But if that ment saving the people she loved....she'd give up anything for their safety. [b]Anything![/b] but it would mean leaving [i]him[/i] behind. Her first love. Her present love. The love she had deserted so long ago. Could she do it? To end her future would be to reach for the item.... She reached fro the item floating in midair. Hesatint at first but more surely as she grew closer. She was drenched in sweat. She squinced up her eyes bracing the effect the travel would have on her body. But at the second she touched it her dorm door swung opened. "Dea?!?! What's goining on?!? Dea!!!!!!!!!!!" She opened her eyes and blinked back tears looking back at him. He could yell all he wanted. She was gone. Lost to him foever.... ************************ Yes well comments? Mind you I wrote this at one in the morning.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pagan Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 Wow I actually like this. Its pretty good, you and your friend should be pretty proud of yoursevles. I guess I can blame the typos on the time of day when typed. Over all though its good and has a pretty decent plot from what I can see. Keep up the good work!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Skyechild91 Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 PING!!! ::jaw hits keyboard:: Wow.... ::is speechless: That is so detailed. I can actually feel what Dea(you) ar efeeling! Very expressive! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chichiri's Girl Posted November 4, 2003 Author Share Posted November 4, 2003 It's not me! It's a whole nother charcter! See "Dea" is my nickname which was given to me by Erin. It figures it was the name of one of the main charachters in the story....haha! But when we start writing Princess Erinzyger (we better get a better title cause that one sucks....:sweat: ) it will be Erin's turn to pay! *laughs evily* so there! Yes well thanks for the complements and Tony be happy I fixied most of the spelling errors from the first one! The spelling when I was typing it to him over AIM was just sad....oh and I'll write the next part after Erin says something about it. (like that will ever happen....) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
erinzyger Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 [color=chocolate][b]*cough, sputter, dies*...*comes back to life* Oh my God! Deanna! You're frickin' brilliant! *pokey* But why didn't you tell me you were going to do this before hand? Oh, and is this the part with the android and the...yea...You know what I'm talkin' 'bout, Dea. -Erin[/color][/b] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chichiri's Girl Posted November 4, 2003 Author Share Posted November 4, 2003 Haha! Well geeze you guys are all so nice....and the andriod was in season 2 erin...but yeah I know what you talkin about. Now this part is from Aiden's point of veiw.(aka the guy who opened the door and was yelling) ************************************************* She was gone. She had been standing there a minute ago. Not even a minute! Where was she?! "Damn it!" He yelled softly hitting the wall with his fist. If only he knew she was safe! He would be alright then. But no, he didn't now. And that was what was ripping him up inside. It was [i]his[/i] job to protect her. But he had failed. Horribly. She was crying when she left which only hurt more. He looked at the sport where she had stood. On the floor was a picture. He bent down and picked it up. Part of it was crinkled. He smoothed it out and looked at it. Imeditatly he reconized two of the faces. One was his friend. When they were kids, after he had met Dea of course, the three of them had always hung out. Intill that day...he shook his head trying not remember the pained look on her face. It was a mistake that he wished had never happened. But it had and shortly after she saw she and Lyra left town. Then she had come back to him. That was the happiest day of his life. He looked back at the picture, at the other person he knew- and loved. Dea. But this was an old picture. Why she had her hair in some werid buns. Really werid buns. He never remembered her hair like that. Did she do that after she left? He looked closer and saw cat ears. Cat ears?!?! Lyra had them too. In the end he concluded they were those head bands with fake ears glued on. It would be to freaky if they were real. Then he noticed the other two people. Two guys who looked a little alike. [i] they must be brothers[/i] was all he thought aboput it before he was distracted. The one with the glasses was standing [b]WAY[/b] too close to his girl! Oh hell no! That guy was going down. Suddenly a thought occured to him. What if she had left to be back with him!?!?! With that thought he leaped up and ran to his dorm to get supplies. He WAS going to find her or die trying! ******************* lol yeah so this part was a little more humerous.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pagan Posted November 4, 2003 Share Posted November 4, 2003 Not bad though I liked the first part a little better. I really enjoy your writing and find it refreshing. This paer is fnnier then the first but since I'm not really a comedy fan it didn't appeal to me as much as the first part. When is the second part coming? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlazinReddrgn Posted November 5, 2003 Share Posted November 5, 2003 Ok... sorry Chichiri's Girl but I didn't read the second part... I could get a good picture of whats going on and how she was feeling... and you know how everytime Miaka gets hurt (Fushigi Yuugi) in the story and Yui gets effected? Well... yeah... except for the effected part.... I think.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Prozen Posted November 5, 2003 Share Posted November 5, 2003 [color=royalblue]im kinda confused. let me try to figure this out. so some girl used to live somwhere and she used to have a boyfriend but then she moved right? then she eventualy moved back and then she started remembering somthing about demons and robots (which makes no sense) and there was some weird item floating right? and then some guy ran in shouting after her but she grabbed the thing and now shes gone right? and now the guy thinks that she came back for some nerd? *scratches head* I dont get it.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chichiri's Girl Posted November 5, 2003 Author Share Posted November 5, 2003 *Dies from laughter at BlazinReddrgn and Lord Prozen's post then comes back to life* You guys are so weird. This is what I get for tellin my buddies to post in this I guess. On what level were you comparing this to Fushigi Yugi BlazinReddrgn? I guess little Prozen wouldn't get it. Heh okay enough of the insults while I try to explain it better. See Lyra and Dea use to fight monsters and demons and stuff. that will all be explained later. This being the begining of season three and everything...and the boyfriend/girlfriend thing is partly right i guess. Except only her and Lyra went. They ran away more then "moved". An hey man Churichi is a cool nerd!*laughs as Tony flinches at mention of name* but um yeah...erin feel free to jump in with helping me explain this at anytime.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fyxe Posted November 6, 2003 Share Posted November 6, 2003 [SIZE=1][COLOR=darkblue]Lol, I like it. Just a bit confusing.. at some parts, but I love it. You truley have a talent in writing. ^_^ It's interesting, it makes you want to read more! Keep it coming, you are doing great! ^_^ The plot is starting to come.... I like the way you went from one point of view to another. It's great. Get the next part up soon!!! :D [/COLOR][/SIZE] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chichiri's Girl Posted November 6, 2003 Author Share Posted November 6, 2003 K i'll write the next part Friday. It turns out i do my best writing at ongodly hours. Yes I know i'm werid so back off. Oh and I think I fianaly got where BlazinReddrgn was going with his post. Something like how in Fushigi Yugi when Miaka is hurt or something Yui will atumatically get the wound. She cause it said Dea felt a pain deep in her chest and knew they were in trouble. So that could mean that Lyra could be deeply wounded. Don't worry she's not. I'm just trying to scare you. lol Oh and the next part will be written by Lyra' point of veiw followed by Churichi's then Surchiri's. Yeah I think. That order might change though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pagan Posted November 11, 2003 Share Posted November 11, 2003 Ok this story just keeps getting better and better. I've been waiting for the next part but is has come yet. When is it coming? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chichiri's Girl Posted November 11, 2003 Author Share Posted November 11, 2003 The next part is coming....now! It's told from Lyra's point of veiw. by the way I had a pic of Lyra on the boads a long time ago...it migh still be there.....yo this is dedicated to Erinchan! yeah cause with out you Lyra would be just an idea with no personality! And to all Lyra fans eyerwhere! Much love! *************************************** She looked out the window being pelted with rain drops and sighed. They were hitting the glass so hard that it was making a loud drumming noise. The thought of music automactily made her think of her gutair. She turned to look at it. It was so shinny you could almost see your self with every detail in it's surface. She didn't clean it everyday for nothing. Slowly she got up and walked to where it was propped up against the wall. She plugged it into her amp and began plucking nothing imperticular just starring out into space. A meldoy came to her mind. An old rhyme. It was odd but she remembered playing it to Dea and Surichi while he had been asking Dea something. It scarred the crap out of him. Of course he also yelled at her for breaking all the windows and vials and well, hell, anything glass, when she had that last note all the way up on Max. But hey anyone could sneak into the lab. That boy was so into his work he didn't think of anything else. She even had time to bring her amp down...bu that time he had been sweating and he never sweat while he was doing experiments. She shrugged it off. It was only a dumb memory that never had happened. She wondered what Dea would think of Churichi if she ever met him? Probably a geek, a nerd, well he was anyway....but they'd never meet. In fact Lyra was unsure id [i]she[/i] would ever see Dea again. With a malencouly atittude she remembered the last time she saw Dea. They had been walking home from school when they were complaing about a whole week of exams. Dea had gotten well, pissed off, and had smashed her fist into a car. The owner came out of his house when the alarm went off so they ran. They ran so fast they lost there place and ended up lost in the wrong side of town....but she couldn't remember anything after that.....anything! The next thing she had known she was living with two brother scientist. She thought about the other brother, Shuichi. , her boyfriend. It was odd...she had fallin in love the second she saw him...she and Dea always agreeded there was no such thing as "love as first sight" except for extremly shallow people. She had always felt she and Swurichi had a past together that she couldn't quite remember. She'd come right to the edge of it only to suddenly be pulled back. In a daze sshe pluked the first few notes of "Twinkle Twinkle Little Star" and it all came back to her. Everything. But one question still remained. Where in seven hells was Dea?!?!? [i]BOOM!![/i] ******************************** yeah I'd write more but my bro wants on...agioan I wrote this at 12:57 am so exscues the bad spelling grammer ext. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
erinzyger Posted November 11, 2003 Share Posted November 11, 2003 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Chichiri's Girl [/i] [B]yo this is dedicated to Erinchan![/quote] Aw! I feel so loved! *hugs her soul sista* [quote] It was odd but she remembered playing it to Dea and Surichi while he had been asking Dea something.[/quote] Didn't she play it for Dea and [b]Chirichi[/b]? [quote]It scarred the crap out of him.[/quote] I also think that she also broke a few windows and other miscellanious objects. [quote]They had been walking home from school when they were complaing about a whole week of exams. Dea had gotten well, pissed off, and had smashed her fist into a car. The owner came out of his house when the alarm went off so they ran. They ran so fast they lost there place and ended up lost in the wrong side of town....[/quote] Hehe, I remember that. [quote] She thought about the other brother, Swurichi, her boyfriend.[/quote] I beleive the spelling is S-H-U-I-C-H-I. [quote]yeah I'd write more but my bro wants on...[/QUOTE] Aw, poor Dea-baby. ----------------------------------------------- Anyways, this is definately going well so far Dea-chan. We're going to have to start drawing it seriously soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chichiri's Girl Posted November 11, 2003 Author Share Posted November 11, 2003 lol Yes I am poor.....no really I'm flat broke! lol And you know I can't spell either of their names worth crap.... I mena the " U" sounds like a"W" okay!??! Oh and I still have the They had been walking home from school when they were complaing about a whole week of exams. Dea had gotten well, pissed off, and had smashed her fist into a car. The owner came out of his house when the alarm went off so they ran. They ran so fast they lost there place and ended up lost in the wrong side of town.... part. I read it sometimes. I swear I always laugh when Dea saya"Frig!".lol yes I'll edit the other stuff.*nodds* Um and exactly how soon are we gonna start drawing? Cause I'm hopin to get some copic markers for Christmas....screentones would be nice too....but then I'll need speicl paper...hmmmm.....yeah well I shall fix the mistakes!*races off to last post* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Assassin Posted November 12, 2003 Share Posted November 12, 2003 [size=1][color="666666"] Yay Chi Chiri's Girl! It is totally awesome. I just loved the way you wrote it but they was some typos here and there. Nothing to worry about or nothing. It would probably help if I knew about Tokyo mew mew by chance, woul it not? Well keep up the great work and keep the story going! [/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chichiri's Girl Posted December 31, 2003 Author Share Posted December 31, 2003 I hope I'm not too late to put this back up...Oh and um I added something to the last part I wrote. there is now a [i]BOOM[/i] after Lyra remembers all the stuff. I got the inspiration to do this while i was playing monkey ball 2....(don't ask cause I don't know either....) Oh and this part is dedicated to Hells Fire cause I know how much he hates Chirichi. Erin I was ure it was Churichi....*checks the big old painting she did of him* YEs you're right. my bad. Okay now on to the story!! ***************************************** Down in the basement a lone figure leaned over a work table. He had turned the basement full of cobwebs and dust into a sparcling clean labatory. Well most of it was clean anyway. There were stains all over the cold concret floors and ceiling. The tables had suffered too. Someof them had burns making holes right through them. They were probably about to be joined by another hole soon anyway. The figure of course was the scientist. Or the would be scientist if he ever got any where [b]WITH HIS DAMN BROTHER CRANKING UP THE FRIGGIN VOLUME LIKE THAT![/b] He thought to himself as he climbed the stairs. Sure enough once he was at the top he saw his brother, Shuichi, pressing random buttons on the Game Cube controller. (It was espically sad he was pressing random buttons since he was playing Animal Crossing....) While Chirichi looked at him in disgust Shuichi picked up the remote and promtly turned up the volume to 60. At this point Chirichi's was ready to kill his younger brother. "For the love of god Shu! Turn down the damn volume! The way those animals talk is annoying enough at a [i]normal[/i] level. Say 10? But I guess you don't kow the meaning of that word do you?!?!" Chirichi yelled at his brother clenching his fist as not to be charged with murder. "Wow Chirichi I didn't even hear you come in? You workin on super-quiet shoes down there? You could callt hem sneakers! Get it cause you sneak around-" Shuichi strated but was stopped at a snaping noise came from his brother. "It's been done Shuichi. And I belive you are wearing them on your feet." Chirichi manged to get out before he completly snapped. " Oh yeah I knew that." Shuichi smiled as he scratched his head. At this Chirichi had set his phaser to 'kill'. No literly he had made a phaser after watching the old reruns of Star Trek. Seeing his brother with the look to kill in his eye Shuichi ran for his life to the kitchen. He had had encounters with Chirichi that mad before and it usally ended up with one of them in a hostpital bed with an IV stuck in one of their arms. Chirichi glared as his brother fled in horror toward the kitchen then bent down and turned off the game cube. Immeditaly a commercial came on for an insurence company((you know what I'm talkin bout Erin)). Before he could find the remote a loud shrill, "[i]AFLAC![/i] rattled the air around him. Suddenly all his thoughts conserning the remote and turning down the volume vanished from his head. Instead memories of someone appered. "Dea...." was all he could say as the memories of Aflac ducks flooding all around him when he had tried to ask her out. When he had finally suceeded and he rode one out the window falling two stories into the rose bushes. Apparently he was too much weight for that duck. Engrossed in memories he started for the staircase to the basement and started climbing down in a complete daze. When he finally reached the bottom something was wrong. All of the tables were tuned over and some were broken. All the vials containg chemicals had been spilt and broken. Sometime when he was gone his quite lab had been distrupted by chaos. He ran to his desk and vilontly opened the draw only to find his most prized possion stolen. The possion was the last shread of memory he had of her before he had remember. A picture of them all he offened puzzled over. He turned around to see if it had dropped to the floor somehow. He knew it wouldn't be there of course. He crawled around on the floor intill he came to a pair of boots. "looking for this?" a voice asked and he was sure he could hear the smirk in the voice as he looked up and saw the picture. He began to reach for it but-[i]BOOM[/i] he was flung against the wal like a ragdoll. With the last of his strength he uttered one word. "Deeanna..." ********************* Whoop there it is! Now um I think i spelled her name wrong..oops I'll edit it later if it really is wrong. Well coments?An by the way no "Deeana" or "Dea" is not refering to me..whole different character... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kanariya Posted January 1, 2004 Share Posted January 1, 2004 [size=1][color=chocolate]I like this a bunch Chichiri's Girl! You are decriptive, and I especially like the Aflack ducks. *laughs like crazy*[/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
erinzyger Posted January 4, 2004 Share Posted January 4, 2004 TUXEDO! Yes, Dea, tuxedos....Mwahahaha...Heh, you think the Aflack Duck thing is funny now, wait till you hear the whole story Wasabi. Anywho, Chichiri's Girl, you've done quite well with this. Very well...:sob: Our little baby story has grown up soooo much! *wipes away tears* I feel so proud. Can't wait for Shuichi's part! Just don't kill 'im! -Erin Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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