Writing Burnt-Out Angel

[Brasil]

Burnt-Out Angel

Azrael was getting bored. He was getting restless. He was tired of his dead-end job. Sure, he was working for the biggest boss this side of Eternity, but that didn?t change the fact that the work was monotonous and dull.

It?s not that Azrael wasn?t good at what he did, certainly not. He was the best Angel Of Death the company had ever seen or had the pleasure of employing. But the pleasure was all theirs, and Azrael was now bored with his work.

He had slain countless droves of mortals, sent so many to their graves, and that was getting really old. He had lost track of how many mortals he had sent to another plane of existence.

He estimated somewhere around a couple of million, but figured he stopped counting around the first hundred-thousand. The victims?sorry, the [i]punished ones[/i], weren?t individuals anymore. They weren?t people with families, and dogs, and cars, and houses, and friends. No, they were just a graph on the chart; just tick marks on the blackboard; dollars on a paycheck. Azrael didn?t see their faces anymore.

Frankly, he no longer cared. He worked for the pay now, earning his wage like every other angel.

[Muad'Dib]

:blulaugh: oh, man, that's amazing! where'd you come up with that? :haha: I mean, angel of death, and all that about sending them to another plain of existence as if it was like an incredibly dull job!!!!:rotflmao: I LOVE IT!

[Sara]

[size=1]Just pointing out that I read this, and it amused me, and if I weren't so sick I would have something more to comment about.

Interesting/amusing. And short, which was nice, because I was dreading opening this thread and finding several pages worth of something.[/size]

[Radaghast]

Quite amusing, I agree with Sara. I like the whole "just another job" mentality. It reminds of a game a while ago called Grim Fandango. I think that's what the name was. Now what I want to see is what Azrael's antics after he gets really bored.

[Mitch]

[size=1] I feel that this story really has a good premise and a good chance to become something good, PT. It'd be cool to see you keep it going.

While it didn't make me laugh or anything, I thought the entire take on an angel and religion as such to be a nice job at poking fun. It's so short though lol.

But yes. I feel it's a very good idea for a story...

Write more of it. Heh.[/size]

[Mimmsicle]

[color=firebrick]it reminds me of [b]Disc World[/b]... you know, when [i]Death[/i] gets sick of his job ?

it's nice that it's so short, makes it easy on the eyes.
and in keeping with the short leash:
[b]excellent idea, good writing and promising for the future ![/b]

- Mimmi[/color]

[Brasil]

Yeah, Mimmi, that's the funny thing. I've never played Disc World, never even read about it. I have no idea what the game is about.

Mitch, it's part of a longer piece, yep. The longer piece is in the process of being written. I'm looking at it to be mainstream literary fiction, character-driven, but yet have a certain...flair to it, something original, a fun eccentricity.

Grim Fandago...I was talking with James, and he very adamantly recommended Grim Fandago to me. Apparently, it features the same demented and oddball humor that I love, and that runs through Burnt-Out Angel.

Sara, lol. You were right in worrying about something extremely long. Hopefully, Burnt-Out Angel will be a novella when complete, looking at 70 pages. I suppose some of my work here is...wordy. Thinking of EPICITY? Hope you get less sick there. ::sends some good, wholesome chicken soup her way::

[Mimmsicle]

[color=firebrick]I don't really know much about Disc World myself, my sister did all the reading... out loud... whenever I had something liquid in my mouth *lol*[SIZE=1] (I only remember the line "[i]the water tasted like warm farts[/i]")[/SIZE]

So I'll not make anymore references to it in the future.
I'll just be content in reading your story :)

- Mimmi[/color]