Jaganshi Posted December 4, 2003 Share Posted December 4, 2003 I am going to post my random poetry here.The first one I am going to post is a tanka.A tanka is a form of Japanes poetry that is comprised of five lines that follow a pattern of 5-7-5-77. Life Death and Love; pain Rip my heart out, let me bleed And feed it to me Now feel the pain you caused me Vengeance is as sweet as you The next one is haiku, another form of Japanese poetry.Haikus are comprised of three lines that follow the pattern of 5-7-5. Torture, pain, anguish The shadows are everywhere Human Nature One more for today.This one is a poetic cryptogram.It's basicly a sentence or phrase where you regroup the words.Try and figure it out.I'll give you a clue it's four words. Onl yt hep ari noi dsu rv ive. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wiccansamurai Posted December 4, 2003 Share Posted December 4, 2003 Only the paranoid survive. Anyway, though I thought your use of different kinds of poems was spiffy, they were really cliche. The topics, that is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RioLaskand Posted December 6, 2003 Share Posted December 6, 2003 I like your use of the different ways of expressing your thoughts, but I feel that you aren't really hitting or surprising anyone. Your flow is stunted a bit, and I feel that you could definitely do more with your ideas. Otherwise, keep writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jaganshi Posted December 10, 2003 Author Share Posted December 10, 2003 I wrote this one in careers class yesterday and just got around to typing it. American Dream They tell you how to be, How to see, And how to live How can I go day in and day out Living the way I am told to Having no freedom Liberty and Justice for all is a lie How can we go spewing those words from our mouths like fools Living in the dark like blind mice Turn a blind eye to people who are not like you Who do not believe in what you do Who do not live like you do Freedom of speech is encroached upon Privacy is no more Women are minorties All I strive for All I believe With as many rights I have I cannot be free The hypocrisy has yet to end We twist and bend to conform to society But conformity deforms I have another poem about the holoucast I have to get back from my english teacher.So it will be up soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wiccansamurai Posted December 13, 2003 Share Posted December 13, 2003 That one didn't seem to have much rythm. Freedom of speech is encroached upon Privacy is no more Women are minorties That stanza, especially. And sometimes it ryhmed, sometimes it didn't. Make up your mind because it kind of deteriates (sp?) the poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hakira Posted December 17, 2003 Share Posted December 17, 2003 I love it. And I love your siggy WiccanSamurai. ^_^ The second poem I didn't exactly understand but the haiku and tanka I totally loved reading. Oh, and your last stanza on the haiku was.. 5-7-4. I hope you noticed that. Even if that mistake were made or not I still believe they were good poems. Do write more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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