Writing Your very own composed songs

[thethespian]

I know some people out there have musical ability like myself, :D and have composed their own songs. Here you can write down your lyrics and the genre of the music. Whether its upbeat, lowbeat, rap, heavy metal, classic, pop, or just how the music is. Here is my song and i would like comments please!

[U]When you left me[/U]

The darkness closes in,
there's nowhere left to run,
now that you left me here.
ohhhhhhh
the thing i still don't know,
is why you disappeared,
my heart is still with you,
but where is yours?

And now I see,
that you and me,
were never what,
we meant to be,
and now you're gone,
and i can't do,
anything except,
just think of you.
And every day,
i hope and pray,
that i can see,
your gorgeous face,
for just in case,
you have something,
left in your heart,
please anything?

We're throught is what you said,
you made me lose my head,
for my soul you caused trouble,
ohhhhhhhhhhhhh
we were unseprable,
so i thought we were ok,
but your heart just flew,
..............................
..............................
away.


Alright, there is my song and it is more of a slow tempo song meant to be depressing. Yeah, so please give me your comments and post your songs.

[AnonymousSource]

I wrote this one about an ex-girl friend, but i got over it...but i like the song...it's a punk-rock sort of song...
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You? always told me that you?d always stay at my side (and)
You? said that anytime I need your help won?t be denied (and)
You always seem to care
But when I open up my eyes you?re never there

Chorus
You say you?ll always be there
But I ask for you and you?re never there
I wish you would not change your mind
I wish you?d admit when you lied
I wish you all the luck in the world
But I wish you wouldn?t be?
Such a superficial girl

You always told me of your dreams how the world can always seem
To come down on you and be oh so hard on you (and)
I?m supposed to always care but when
My turn comes around you?re never there

Repeat Chorus

(Pause) Bridge
Tell me exactly who you are
Tell me who I?ve been talking to?so far

Change 2 acoustic
Acoustic Chorus?
You say you?ll always be there
But I ask for you and you?re never there
I wish you would not change your mind
I wish you?d admit when you lied
I wish you all the luck in the world
But I wish you wouldn?t be?
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we already have done this for a concert-esque thing...idk...I like it

[Inuyashagurl_15]

I made this song then In the night it disapeared I have looked all over for it but cant find it and can only remember a part~~~Sorry for the spelling

That is about my x when he cheated on me!!!!
So now Im singel and lovin it!
(punk)
Wake up its me it's you whats goin on
you tried to speak. but you never spoak
And you thought but you never told
Are you keeping
are keepong something from me...
Something from me..
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and another one that vanished was
(punk)
Waten for the weekend..
but tha school bell is still ringin in my head
get called to the office
have to listen to the same ol stupid rules
never listen to what they say to me
im so tired of the same D~ thing

-Chorus-
Waten for the weekend but
the school bell is sitll ringin in my head
Im so tired of the same D~ thing
--
When I get home still talkin on the phone
listen to what he says only
and I think that its time for a change

[thethespian]

Good job you guys! Its kind of weird how all of our songs relate to relationships and them braking up and how we get that inspiration for making a song. I don't really have any critisicm at all! But i wish there was some way that we could do a sound byte post where we could hear the songs. Then we would get the whole feel of it. Inuyashagurl, try and find the rest of your song! I'd like to read it. Just one question for you guys, what did you think of mine? Any suggestions? Thanks.

[AnonymousSource]

I like both of your songs...
And the song i put down was punk but i try to vary a little... Unfortunately my other band members are hugely into punk music...and ya...Phatty's in it...where you at?
Ahh w/e... here's another one I wrote, not necesarrily about a girl, but it's about popularity and how much they fake to get there (if you can't tell I'm not popular:))

the Verses are nice and slow, singin in a lower register but the chorus is loud guitars and sing

Verse
Miss perfect?do you ever lie?
And when things get dim you want to cry?and socially die?
Miss perfect?what do you say when I?
Ask about the way you hold your eyes?as cold as ice
Miss perfect?what happened now
I thought you had the world inside your palms, and?

Chorus #1
How does it feel to be miss perfect
Perfect in ever way, and every single day
How does it feel to be miss perfect
When every thing you do, the world looks up to you
Miss perfect?

Verse
Miss perfect?what did you do?
What did they say, to make you you?
Miss perfect?what do you say?
When these questions, riddle your day?
Miss perfect?what?s wrong with you?
I thought the world couldn?t touch you, BUT YOU?RE BLUE?

Chorus #2

How does it feel to be miss perfect
All of the close you wear, the way you do your hair
How does it feel to be miss perfect
When they roll the dice, how you just roll your eyes?


Bridge
-MISS PERFECT---
How do you stay so blue?
When the world? is bowing down for you?
-MISS PERFECT---
Why do you lock up yourself?
When everyone is waiting on your shelf
-MISS PERFECT---
You got all your friends
?(so) How can you be alone in the end?
-MISS PERFECT---
What do you do with your fears?
When the world can?t stand to see your tears

Only wants to see you fly, do you ever want to cry

(guitars fade to a quiet hum)

(almost whispered) Miss perfect?

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as for the sound byte thing...we're already trying to record superficial girl and this one I'm gonna work on by myself b/c my bassman's attempting to slaughter it(music-wise)

[Raiha]

[color=royalblue]Verse 1: So you were let down,
It was all my fault this time,
Even though I'm sorry,
You can't forgive me.

Bridge: And I'm so gone over you,
You're so drawn over me.

Chorus: Stay with me this time,
Hold me in your arms,
Remember I love you,
Even when we cry.

And the way I care for you,
Even when you fight,
For yourself and not for me,
It's this reality.

Verse 2: It's sad the way we dance,
In circles around eachother,
So very afraid,
So unwilling to change.

And I'm so gone over you,
You're drawn over me.

2nd Chorus: Leave me again,
Don't hold me in your arms,
Remember I loved you,
Even when we cried.

And the way I cared for you,
Even when you fought,
For yourself and not for me,
It was our reality.

Not meant for me.[/color]

[AnonymousSource]

wow..................nice

Yeah I have some other songs, too, but I don't have any typed out on the computer yet, and they're somewhere in my room...but yea.
They're somewhere around here.

[Circ]

French song. The rythm and first verse are roughly inspired from [i]Bring me to life[/i], but only on a general feeling (At least, the way I hear it). I could give a translation, but all rhymes would be lost in my very lousy english poetry.

It's titled [i]Don't come[/i] (I am a rather lousy titler too :sweat: )

Comment peux-tu voir dans ma nuit
À la lumière de mes étoiles?
Comment peux-tu trouver la vie
À la surface de mon âme?
Apprend-moi donc l'alchimie
Qui contrera la mort glaciale

J'ai besoin de ton coeur!
    [i]J'ai besoin de ton coeur![/i]
J'ai besoin de tes pleurs!
    [i]J'ai besoin de tes pleurs![/i]
Tes sentiments de bonheur!
    [i]Tes sentiments de bonheur![/i]

J'ai besoin de ton coeur!

Je suis perdue dans le noir
Dans le vide et le froid
Je suis perdue sans espoir
Sans couronne et sans croix
Un fragment de vérité
C'est à en devenir cinglée!

J'ai besoin de ton regard!
    [i]J'ai besoin de ton regard![/i]
J'ai besoin de te croire!
    [i]J'ai besoin de te croire![/i]
J'ai besoin de te voir!
    [i]J'ai besoin de te voir![/i]

J'ai besoin de ton regard!

Pourquoi veux-tu donc visiter
Les abîmes de ma noirceur?
Pourquoi donc veux-tu explorer
Les affres de ma douleur?
Pourquoi est-ce que je tiens
À ce qu'ils deviennent les tiens?

J'ai besoin d'une mission!
    [i]J'ai besoin d'une mission![/i]
J'ai besoin d'une raison!
    [i]J'ai besoin d'une raison![/i]
J'ai besoin d'une vision!
    [i]J'ai besoin d'une vision![/i]

J'ai besoin d'une mission!

Tu t'es perdu dans ma mort
Et pourtant je t'avais prévenu
Tu ne connaîtras plus d'aurore
Parce que tout a disparu
Pourquoi fallait-il que tu explores
Les tréfonds de mon âme éperdue?

J'ai besoin de ton coeur!
    [i]J'ai besoin de ton coeur![/i]
J'ai besoin de tes pleurs!
    [i]J'ai besoin de tes pleurs![/i]
Tes sentiments de bonheur!
    [i]Tes sentiments de bonheur![/i]

J'ai besoin de ton coeur!

Nous sommes si semblables
Et pourtant tu nous a séparés
Nous sommes si impénétrables
Que nous ne pouvons nous écouter
Pourquoi-donc vouloir pénétrer
À l'intérieur d'un monde intenable?

J'ai besoin d'être guidée!
    [i]J'ai besoin d'être guidée![/i]
J'ai besoin d'être réveillée!
    [i]J'ai besoin d'être réveillée![/i]
J'ai besoin d'être sauvée!
    [i]J'ai besoin d'être sauvée![/i]


J'ai besoin d'être guidée!

[Inuyashagurl_15]

Ill look for the rest and when I find it i'l poast it...Yes thethespian
I love your song.

[AnonymousSource]

Circéus, I have no idea what the song said, but I think I like it:S
haha, It could be cool if I understood it probebly. I'm uneducated forgive me!
The band I'm in has another really cool song but I didn't write it...
Phatty? Where ya at? Post your song dude

[thethespian]

Nice job, and Circeus, I had no idea what that said so, i couldn't really compliment it, though i'm sure it is good. Do you think that you could possibly translate it? The rhyme would be lost and all, but atleast we'd get a feel for what the song is about.

Here's another one i made up. Its not really a very serious song, and i didn't compose the music. I just made up new lyrics to "Cestnuts roasting on an open fire" So this song is to that tune.

Marshmellows burning on an open fire,
Misquitoes nipping everywhere.
Annoying camp songs being sung by a fire,
and folks dressed up in lighter clothes.
Everybody knows,
S'mores and marshmellows,
help to make the summer bright.
Tiny Tots, with their clothes all aflame,
will find it hard to sleep tonight.
They know the fireman's on his way,
he's loaded lots of foam and water on his fire truck,
and every neighbor's child is gonna cry,
to see if the children are really gonna fry!!
And so, i'm offering this simple frase,
to kids from one to (pause) about eleven.
Although its been done, many times many ways!
Stop, Drop, And roll. Today!!

Yeah, as you can see. This is meant to be a humorous song and well, umm yeah.

[Circ]

That should give you a god idea, though I couldn't get the good rythm some places, anyway...


How can you see into my night
With the light of my stars?
How can you find some life
Within the darkness of my soul?
Please, teach me some alchemy
To counter the icy death

I really need your heart!
    [i]I really need your heart![/i]
I really need your cry!
    [i]I really need your cry![/i]
I really need your joy!
    [i]I really need your joy![/i]

I really need your heart!

I am but lost into the night
Into the void and the frost
I am lost into despair
Without any crown or cross
With so little truth to trust
I'm going completely nuts

I need you to look at me!
    [i]I need you to look at me![/i]
I need you to trust me!
    [i]I need you to trust me![/i]
I ned you to love me!
    [i]I need you to love me![/i]

I need you to look at me!

Why did you have to visit
The abysses of my darknes
Why did you have to explore
The horrors of my pain?
Why do I yearn so much
For them to become yours?

I just need a mission!
    [i]I just need a mission![/i]
I just need a reason!
    [i]I just need a reason![/i]
I just need a vision!
    [i]I just need a vision![/i]

I just need a mission!

Now you're lost into my death
And yet I had warned you
You won't ever see again
The lights of the sunrise
Why did you have to explore
The depth of my pained soul?

I really need your heart!
    [i]I really need your heart![/i]
I really need your cry!
    [i]I really need your cry![/i]
I really need your joy!
    [i]I really need your joy![/i]

I really need your heart!

We are so similar
Aand yet you've set us apart
We are so inpenetrable
We cannot talk to each other
Why did you want to penetrate
This unbearable place?

I just need to be guided!
    [i]I just need to be guided![/i]
I just need to be waked!
    [i]I just need to be waked![/i]
I just need to be saved!
    [i]I just need to be saved![/i]


I just need to be guided!

[Nate]

White Dove
By Nate

(no beat, just lead singing)
Verse--> Sometimes i sit there and think/
And every freakin second i blink/
Every blink's a change, a change in thought/
Everyone leds back to you/
(drum starts beating)
I don't sell my dreams/
I don't sell my love/
But you stole my heart/
I'm like a white dove/
(full band starts beat)
A dove, lost in the deep blue sky/
Forever, I will be your guy/
If you will be my girl/
Life ain't notin but a whirl, in the dark/
But your my light/
You lighten my day, even my night/

Hook--> A dove, lost in my mind/
You were the only person who was kind/
You showed me love/
I'm like a white dove/

Verse--> Nobody understands my life/
(low beat) Nobody except my OB wife/
(increases Flora, but enough about dat/
every 3 My friend ship wit both of yall was phat/
lines) To bad I had to move out of the hood/
My life there was good/
Now my only work-out is splittin wood/
Maybe i should pull a gun and shoot myself dead/
You know, straight into the head/
But then i think of you/
And I think of Brandon, too/
(full beat) You two keep me a live, you two keep me
well/
I'm tellin you, you both good/
Maybe my parents will return to da hood/
Then we'll be together again/

Hook-->

Verse-->(no beat)dove...white dove...I am the white dove/ X2
(beat starts, plays for 5 mesures) (beat stops, guitar and drum solo)


It's not dome clompletely, but i thought i'd post it up anyway

[Guest phattmasterdj]

INVINSIBLE MAN

(verse 1)
Can?t wait to tell my friends how her kisses taste so sweet
And how she makes my heart heart skip a beat
And when I hold her she warms my soul
Every time she walks by she makes me whole
My love as I?m holding her close,
HOLDING YOU CLOOOOOSE?

(verse 2)
If you could look at me and feel as I do,
Your eyes, so deep like the ocean blue
I can swim in your beauty, like it?s a sea
This passion runs through me, set me free
By telling me I might have a chance
JUST GIVE ME A CHANCE??

(Chorus)
I owe you all I am
So I give you all the love I can
Let me tell you who I am
Then you won?t see me as
The invisible man,
THE INVISIBLE MAAAN,


(verse 3)
I could spend my hours on the phone,
talking to you about nuthin at all
we could lay under the stars
on this night it could all be ours
but you leave me as
the invisible man,
THE INVISIBLE MAAAAAAAN?.
(chorus)

(verse 4)
I?ve lost my way in a love so real
If words could describe it I?d make you feel
I can?t remember which way?s home
Waitin on the day that you?ll no
I am right for you?but I can?t change?
THE INVISIBLE MAN

(chorus)

(verse 5)
I see you all the time
I wish you could be mine
And though I?m always around
for you, I can?t be found,
the invisible, INVISIBLE MAN
(Chorus)
(Bridge)
If you would look at me
Maybe you would finally (fine?ly) see
Who I am, and who I be
But I just wish you?d talk to me
I wish that you could be with me
But you see nothing, the light goes through me

Don?t wanna be the invisible man
No one sees the invisible man
Leave a shadow in the trees
Know my voice?not just the breeze
Just look my way*?walk my way^?know my name*?know my pain^?I remain...(cut music)*^
(* = INVISIBLE, ^ = MAN yelled in background)

well dude, theres the song, its not quite the same as it's sung, but hey, it works haha

[thethespian]

Nice song phatmasterdj! I like!! Much! Just one question, what is the style of this song? And also phatmaster, don't double post. Its baaaaaaaaad!! alright, just if you've posted before and you forgot to add something or you want to post again, edit your first post so that you include the new thing.

Nate, good job so far! Though i'm not really sure who Brandon and everyone is. But great job anyway! Nice!

Circeus, Wow!! I can actually read it!! lol. Great job! Yes, the rhyme is lost but i really like the message of the song!! And the song itself!

Raiha, Nice job!! I like it!!

Everybody, Keep up the great work!! I didn't know people would be this talented.

[AnonymousSource]

Ya...phatty's song is sort of a dreary rock...I know, cus I sing it:D
But ya, personally, despite all of the songs I've wrote that I like, phatty's is my favorite!
So awesome phatty, glad to see you showed up!

[island gurl]

Wow we have some really talented people in here. The french song was really great too.I love listening to music in other languages. I write songs too. Just stupid though. I'm nowhere near as talented as some of you guys and I always seem to lose my songs too. I make them up in the worst possible place when i don't have a pen or paper! lol

This was written half during and half after I broke up with my boyfriend. It's kinda like a slow ballad.

When I first saw you I couldn?t believe my eyes,
you were good looking, sweet and an all around nice guy.
I found you again but couldn?t think what to say
- if only we?d had another day...

Chorus
I bet you weren?t thinking you?d love me
I bet you weren?t thinking I?d love you
I bet you weren?t thinking it would end like this
?coz I wasn?t thinking it too.

I really like you but at first it was a game
I had no idea that you would feel the same.
You moved away, oh can?t you see
That not being with you is killing me.

Chorus

Why did it have to be this way?
Who would have known that you would move away?
Who would have known we would have to admit our feelings somehow?
Who would have known I would not be able to see you now?

Chorus

I?m scared that you won?t want me,
that you?ll think I?m a bore ?
and one day turn around and say you don?t want me anymore.
Say you love me so
say it isn?t true
because for me, all i want is you.

Chorus x2

I also wrote a stupid little song one day. i don't know what genre it is. Kinda rock...fast.

This is a sad song, a very sad song
it's so sad it won the sad award
because this is such a very sad song
i'm not gonna sing it to you anymore

but because you're a sad person in a very sad world
i'm gonna sing it to you anyway
shutup and listen to my very sad song
a sad song that might change your day

and it goes like this....

that's it but it's a start anyway. lol I just repeat it over and over, like thos eplayground songs we used to sing in primary school. drives my friends nuts! lol

Rock/punk

I look in the mirrir and all I see is a fat b****
can't stop laughing at myself
gotta get out of this ditch
and i can't tolerate it
no i can't tolerate it
not now!

Nobody undertsands the way that i feel
and nobody ever seems to take me for real
noone hangs around
trying to bring me down
well i can't tolerate it
no i can't tolerate it
no more!

I had more but I lost it. Aaargh!
If I find it I will post.

Anyway what do you think - about any of them?

[AnonymousSource]

Wow....I love the first one! Seriously! The other two are cool, as well, but I REALY love the first one! What kind of song is it? Rock...what? I think it looks awesome and I can almost hear someone singing it...but it's probly not the same way you hear it.
But yea, it's got a lot of passion to it and stuff...are you in a band?
Well yea! Keep it up, I hope to see more sometime!

[island gurl]

Um...thanx. I'm stunned. i didn't think my songs were that good. I might actually keep posting now. :) Yeah it is rock. How do you hear it? I always seem to sing it with a different tune and I'm open to new suggestions. No I'm not in a band. *Laughs out loud* I just write songs. I can't sing and I can't play any instruments 'cept the recorder! PM me if u have an idea for the tune. Does anyone have any ideas for the end of my second or third song?

[Brasil]

?Can You Tell Me?

Now another one is lost,
Youngsters leaving at what cost?
Can you tell me?

Why?s youth in such a rush
To get that final push?
Can you tell me?

They?re all dropping off like flies,
But we all keep spinning lies,
Why?s that happen?
Can you tell me?

Young lights are going dim,
But this isn?t V.R. sim,
They?re really going.

Our youth is disappearing,
But none are re-appearing,
They?re really going.

It?s a destructive epidemic,
Death?s pattern is systemic,
They?re really going.

We can?t stop what we can?t see,
Can?t tell them ?stay with me,?
Oh no, it?s not possible.

Such a daunting task it is,
Shutting down a deathly biz,
But we?ve got to.

Our future is at stake,
Right choices we must make
Or else they?re going.

Chorus:

Young lights are going dim,
But this isn?t V.R. sim,
They?re really going.

Our youth is disappearing,
But none are re-appearing,
They?re really going.

It?s a destructive epidemic,
Death?s pattern is systemic,
They?re really going.

The time to act is now,
But some are asking how,
The answer?s understanding.

Death no longer will continue,
If you seek the power in you,
The answer?s understanding.

Now we?ve almost won,
This horror?s nearly done,
Just be strong now.

The choice is up to you,
Continue like you do,
Or change for the better.

You?re flirting with disaster,
Death will become your master,
If you don?t stop this behavior?
Do you understand me?

You?ll add one to the count,
See the bodies on the mount.
Please understand what I?m saying,

Don?t throw your life away,
You?ll regret it soon one day,
As on your back you lay,
Wishing back to yesterday,
A time when you could play.

Chorus:

Young lights are going dim,
But this isn?t V.R. sim,
They?re really going.

Our youth is disappearing,
But none are re-appearing,
They?re really going.

It?s a destructive epidemic,
Death?s pattern is systemic,
They?re really going.

Why?d you go so soon,
Leaving for the moon?
Can you tell me?

You were added to the count,
A body on the mount,
You dropped your silver spoon,
But why?d you go so soon?
Can you tell me?

That isn?t your time to go,
That?s not the curtain for your show,
The roses, they aren?t thrown,
They?re placed neatly on your home.

Tears are running, falling to the earth,
Can you hear the sobs of sadness?

We want you to return,
But you?re gone now,
Never to say another word,
Never loud enough to be heard
In the world of the living.

Now another one is lost,
Youngsters leaving at what cost?
Can you tell me?

Why?s youth in such a rush
To get that final push?
Can you tell me?

They?re all dropping off like flies,
But we all keep spinning lies,
Why?s that happen?
Can you tell me?

Young lights are going dim,
But this isn?t V.R. sim,
They?re really going.

Our youth is disappearing,
But none are re-appearing,
They?re really going.

It?s a destructive epidemic,
Death?s pattern is systemic,
They?re really going.

---

Pink Floyd does wond'rous things. I think if you play "Hey You" as you read this, it will speak to you.

[Guest lunastarlight]

alrighty, i wrote this song hurr. lol its kind of a depressing song if you think about it. a girl love this guy a lot but he doesnt realize tht she loves him until its too late. its pretty much a love song. um... other than tht idk wut category it would go in lol :rolleyes: ooo i like the facey! lol o and btw, i prolly am like replying this wrong or something so i'm prolly gonna get yelled at or something... O WELL TOO BAD! lol

DANCING THROUGH MY DREAMS

when im dreaming
im dancing with you
but its a dream
i know will never come true
because of you
i know what life is
and what i need to do, in mine

i never stop thinking about your face
or your smile when you laugh
i cant get you out of my mind
i need you to survive

chorus:
you see her
and she sees you
you forget about me
but i know
i can't stop trying
if i do i'll start crying,
and die.

some other girl in a pale pink shirt
makes her way towards you
she smiles and you hold her hand
and look into her eyes and you speak
you ask her to dance and she accepts
and i stand by and watch
you've broken my heart
so much i can't say
i just wanna go awayyyy!

chorus

why won't you see that i love you too much
i wanna be with you forever
you look at me
and you'll suddenly see
what love really means to me

chorus

and someday when its too late to ask
you'll want to dance with me
but then you'll know how much it hurt in me
when i say, "no, im sorry, its too late. i have a husband now"
and then you'll see how much it hurts to be
rejected like the person i once was

chorus

but now i love you too much to know
and you don't see it at all
but i won't ever stop
until you finally realize
(finally realize)
how much i really love you.

chorus

i want to hold your hand
and glide with you through the air
i know that this is not meant to be
but in my dreams we will still be dancing
until the end of eternity

-lunastarlight aka kimmyyy!