Writing Kanchana and Other Short Stories

[Motfati]

Hello everybody, this thread is basically going to be a bunch of short stories that maladjusted and I will write on a daily basis. Feel free to reply, but don't write stories and post 'em here...since...yeah. The first one is by me, so comments and criticism are welcome!
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[B][U]My not-friend Kanchana[/U][/B]
Okay so...one day there was this girl named Kanchana and uh...she came over to America and she...uh robbed a bank- wait.
Okay, anyway...so this girl was like, walking down the street except it wasn't girl. It was a ferret. Since ferrets have super smell powers, it smelled her coming and ran for its life. So, she kept on walking and saw this Korean hobo that plays the cello. She was sitting on the sidewalk playing a viola. So, she couldn't play. Everytime someone would walk by, she would scare them off by screaming: "MAH! GET AWAY FROM MY CART! REAL HOBOS DON'T WEAR GLOVES! MAH! MEEP! MAH! AGH!"

[img]http://prodigyrewinded.250free.com/Artwork/hobo.bmp[/img]
So, Kanchana kept on walking and fell over a cliff. At the bottom of the cliff, she saw a magical cello. It glowed in radiance and um...stuff.
It said to her: "Hello. I am a cello type thing. Nice to meet you. Wait. So, I need to get to my Korean hobo friend. Can you help me?"
"Dikana mic ono be lala sonota laka bo."
"Uh...anyway," it said. "Let's-a go!"

*Mario theme song*

So the Korean hobo's cello and the...other girl skipped merrily along in the flowers until they came to a magical city named SKALGHTFNMG. They went into the magic city named SKALGHTFNMG. It was there. And uh...yeah. So anyway. As they were walking into the city, trying to find there way back to where the hobo was, they saw City Hall and thought that it would help them. So they went into it. But, they didn't know how to use the door (aw.) so they were stuck outside until someone came and opened the door for them. YAY! They went inside...

The mayor was standing right infront of them He looked like this:

[img]http://prodigyrewinded.250free.com/Artwork/MAH.bmp[/img]

They gasped. No, not really...It was more of a grunt...mrgh...yeah. [/size]

TO BE CONTINUED WHEN MALADJUSTED IS NOT BORED.

P.S. The hobo is definately Mal. Kuukuukuu...




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[B][U]Luigi's Rage: The Story of a Rejected Italian[/U][/B]

[size=1] Hello, friends. It's-a me! Luigi! I just-a wanted to say that-a my brother, Mario has-a always put-a me down. It all-a started...

When I was-a born. Mario was of course-a born-a first-a and-a he was-a named after my-a father, while I got-a named after my distant cousin three times-a removed.

Then-a I remember when we was about a year old. Aww...how-a cute-a we were. Mario spoke first because I was-a mute and-a didn't know how to talk. So-a my mother praised him while I-a said my first-a word: "Plumber". No one-a heard it.

Then when we were-a two, Mario took his-a first steps..first. I-a ran into a tree.

When-a we were five and started school, Mario a-got enrolled-a first because-a he's-a older. Only during role call was-a I ahead of him. Only then.

I-a remember all throught-a school-a. If I-a would get a 99, eh, Mario would get a 100. It-a happened like-a that all throughout high school. I-a once remember we was-a both in the school play, eh? Well, Mario a-got the lead role and me? Oh, I was-a his dog-a. Then-a one shining moment came-a during 10th-a grade-a. I-a was completely in love-a with-a this girl named Peach. Oh, Peach-a. She-a was so pretty. *sighs* Anyway...I asked-a Mario to hook-a me up with-a this girl on a count-a that he was-a more popular than-a I was. So, he-a did it for me as a favor-a, considering he was-a my older brother and all. But...what-a ended up happening was-a this: Mario a-got Peach to fall in love with-a him instead. I was-a so sad.

Then later in-a 12th grade at the prom, Mario a-got crowned king with Peach-a as-a his queen, while I was-a runner up with-a Daisy. Daisy was-a prettier anyway.

So, we-a were now-a for college and-a we-a both-a wanted to be plumbers. But-a...my-a mom did not have enough-a money and only-a Mario got to go. Well, I would-a have to wait until next-a year for this-a college opportunity, but it-a never came for-a you see-a...the college I was-a gonna go to sort of well, blew-a up. Mario was-a the hero who-a got everyone to-a safety. He was-a awarded a big award-a. Big-a. I-a never-a went to college. *sighs*

So-a yous see? I-a was-a always shunned down in-a life...Shadowed by-a my older brother...Mario the III...*sighs*
Now-a I'm-a gonna commit-a suicide. *jumps off cliff* [/size]

Aww....

[Mitch]

[size=1] Pretty good stories so far, nicely random.

Honestly a-though, the-a second one was-a annoying-a. I-a was a-a wondering-a just-a why-a it was-a so annoying-a, and I-a couldn't-a figure it-a out. Oh-a well-a.

Heh.

I combined your two posts together; double posting isn't allowed.[/size]

[Motfati]

[size=1] Oh, yeah. I forgot. How do you do that bar line thing though? I'd like to put that in there so it doesn't seem like one whole story.
Hey, man. Don't-a insult the Italians. It's not-a their fault they-a talk-a that way. Kerr. [/size]