Writing A poem that doesn't rhyme... scary...

[Kitty]

[color=blue][size=1]This is a poem I thought up a while ago. Not very good, and I'm not imaginative enough to make it rhyme. Nothin' big.

[i]I look around and see nothing but hate,
I look around and see nothing but fear.
Through all the fog I call for anyone,
Nobody comes.

I tell no one of my secret, little fears,
I tell no one of my stupid, little dreams.
Alone in a corner crying for comfort,
Pain surrounds me.

I listen for laughter and joy,
I listen for tears but of hope, not of sorrow.
Before you I stand, weak and afraid,
You hold me.

I follow you silently through all the screams,
Coming from people you say don't understand.
But it's I that doesn't understand,
What am I?[/i]

It's a down poem about being a 'freak' in today's society. I'm not quite sure why I thought it up, but I wrote it down, thinking it was an 'okay' piece of work.

Any comments?[/color][/size]

[Ellerby]

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That was awsome! Bravo. You must've been in a cheerful mood when you wrote that... Whaaat? It was a joke. It's a good idea aswell. I really liked it.

[b][u]Poem/Kitty/???[/u]
Rating:[/b] 5/10

I really liked the idea but I think it could use some work.[/color]

[Flashlight]

I liked it. There where few problems I could see. Biggest thing is that I didn't like use of of the word "Understand" twice in a row. Just didn't sound nice to me. But, for the most part, I liked it.

You don't need to rhyme to make a good poem, just a good use of words can make it extraordinary. :)