Art As long as it's here

[Kinetic]

This thread is solely meant to be an area to critique my latest work, [url=http://images2.deviantart.com/i/2004/06/1/7/Wayward_Flow.png]Wayward Flow[/url]. But it's also a tiny advertisement for that [url=http://www.otakuboards.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=36943]battle[/url] thread over there :toothy:

Anyhow, it's all the same 3D render, the same one I use in most pieces (I merely contort it each time, but not this time), because 3D Studio Max was taking up too much space on my humble hard drive. I did choose orange and blue for a reason. Complimentary colors, of course. That's all thanks to my art class and such.

I didn't decide to add the little blue renders in until later, because the vast amount of orange created a large area of seemingly negative space. So, I decided to add those in, but I'm going to play with the blending because I think that they stick out a little [i]too[/i] much.

The 2D work in the middle-right area was rushed, merely because it's my second try and I just wanted quick results (as you can obviously see). So I'm going to backtrack and clean that up a bit as well.

I believe there is a fair amount of movement in this piece. If you're used to critiquing, you're not automatically drawn to one thing. The 2D work is a little opaque though, so I might make it a little more transparent just so that my emphatic point continues to be the orange render in the center.

Any comments or critique is much appreciated :)

[b]E D I T:[/b] One more thing that I forgot. The word "UNPREDICTABLE" at the bottom was only thrown in to the composition to make it a little more interesting. It makes you study the image a little bit more, in my opinion.

Well, that's all. Hope you enjoy it :)

[b]E D I T 2:[/b] I made 2 more images. Don't feel like writing another description for them lol. If you want to see the description, visit my DA account.

[url=http://images2.deviantart.com/i/2004/06/a/3/Vivid_Paroxysm.png]Vivid Paroxysm[/url]
[url=http://images2.deviantart.com/i/2004/06/d/9/Roseate_Discord.png]Roseate Discord[/url]

Same original background.

[Haze]

I would suppose that the word WHOA is in order. ^__^ Very pretty Kinetic. May I also add very moving. I guess I could start with "Vivid Paroxysm." The good things first. I'm really liking the reds and yellows you used. They are bright, but not blindingly so. Also the blue 3D portions are really spiffy. They add this futuristic (for lack of a better word) appeal. And is that a hand down there towards the bottom? It seems to be a hand clutching something...maybe it isn't. But it looks neat. Now for the bad. I don't like the greenish-blue. It justs stands out too much. I mean, it is so bright!! Perhaps if you darkened it a bit. Also I think that you could have left the text a little bit less-transparent. I realize you were going for barely readable, but as it is it seems a bit too fadded. All in all excellent work here.

Roseate Discord: I am soooooo liking this one!! I'm not usually a big fan of pink in any quantity, but this looks pretty darn nice. The rose in the bottom corner makes for a subtle addition of reality/non-computer-generation. I love all of the textures. So far I can pick out about 3 different ones. And they blend so beautifully! The bits of black are perfectly placed to draw some attention away from the pink. But once again, I think you could have left teh text a bit-less fadded. With all of the pink, it makes it a bother to read in some places.

But I must say these are masterfullly done. I could ramble on about how great you are, or how you will win our gfx battle, but hey. Who wants that?

[Kinetic]

Lol, that's one of the best comments I've ever gotten :) Longer and more detailed than any others, at least. I don't remember placing a hand in Vivid Paroxysm, but that's cool that it forms one (lol). As for the blues, they were put in there by a mistake that I didn't feel the need to remedy lol. Sooner or later I'll go back and remove them.

I do agree about the text in both, though. It is a bit too faded, but that's just a personal preference :p And I doubt I'll win our battle. That was a great piece of yours.