Writing Beast

[DBZgirl88]

[COLOR=gray]Here is a poem that I wrote for English class when we were studying Lord of the Flies. Anyway, your insight is highly appreciated.[/COLOR]

[COLOR="#004a6f"][B][U]Beast[/B][/U]

You cannot escape me,
For I live deep within you.
I am a part of you.
I am you.

You cannot escape me.
You are my refuge.
I feed off your sin,
Your anger,
Your hatred,
And your wicked lies.

You cannot escape me.
I am a reflection of who
You really are.
And I will hunt you down,
For I am a beast,
Yet I am more than that...

I am your pain,
Your agony,
Your fear,
And your suffering.

I am hatred,
Violence,
Panic,
And corruption.

I am evil,
As so you are.

You cannot escape me.[/COLOR]

[Lady Asphyxia]

[size=1]I haven't actually read William Golding's books yet, although I have it stored on my shelf waiting for the opportunity. Is [i]Lord of the Flies[/i] good?

The use of repetition was good, and so was the idea. Everyone has a piece of evil inside themselves that they cannot escape. However, the emotion level this is supposed to arouse sort of doesn't, and it doesn't...ring true.

I think it's partly to do with the story, Lord of the Flies, and also partly the idea the reader has of themselves. They don't think of themselves as having a patch of evil inside them, and therefore they don't relate very well.

I think on the whole it's a pretty damned good poem. The lines [i]'You cannot escape me./You are my refuge.' [/i] were great, and the stanza and paragraphs were defined for great effects.[/size]

[DBZgirl88]

[color="#004a6f"]Yeah, I actually liked [i]Lord of the Flies[/i], which is awkward because most students hate any books their teachers "force" them to read. It was written in the sixties, so I think it might be difficult to understand sometimes, just the expressions they use or the characters' style of talking. I thought it was a very powerful book and I highly recomend it to anyone.

Anyway, thanks for your insight, it's highly appreciated.[/color]