Mitch Posted March 9, 2004 Share Posted March 9, 2004 [b]where you go is where you know[/b] tracing the lace to the angles of my heart punctured deep the incision's hand rapture over me in this no-where land. veins, the fingers charter on their strings cellos tuned low. will you beat me beat me for show. beat me so low. will you play me. the handles fit. the instrument you're meant to play. make me a prodigy. tracing the lace, the curtains to the end. outside the window we pretend. there shall never be shall never see will never ever bleed such fair weather on the fall's eve. of the death of spring. rebirth and resustanance the blood anew. the heart's axed log. cut to a stub. where a cold man axes and axes [i]identidem[/i][color=red]*[/color]. the identity is woodchips. the smell of musk in the air. born the birth cherished to stare. born the birth the cherished the stare. steel hands steel. may it clang true. feel into me. into you. the heart it punctures through. the blood cocoon. where change will not win. the blood cocoon. swoon. the blood cocoon where change will not win. where change will not win. take me away, young slave. take me where you can only take me. the words escape on their odyssey to the stars. and fall down to the earth in a scar. they will not accept it the rocket's too dead. but shouldered i carry it instead. i dream on. as the world goes on to murder us. . . i dream on. as the world kills another innocent soul. . . i dream on. dear lady, what wry fingers. i dream on. as the world goes to jail. . . dear lady, look to the stares. i deam on. as the world breaks free. . . and writing, in this thing's arm, i fall to the ground. and i clutch. i dream on. as the world heaves its bars. . . . . .as it escapes to kill again. dear lady, i shall never know, capture me. and let me go. there i flow. see me there? a star, faded, slights the sky. the dead cocoon has died. and lady, they will not accept the words. but shouldered i carry it instead. [color=red] *[i]Identidem[/i] is Latin for "again and again."[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mimmsicle Posted March 12, 2004 Share Posted March 12, 2004 [size=1][color=#800000]Poetry, Mitch. Pure poetry.[/color][/size] [size=1][color=#800000]It sent shivers down my spine and played softly in my mind.[/color][/size] [size=1][color=#800000]Again, this is slightly different from your usual style. Yet not. You still [i]write[/i] the same, but there's a [i]feeling[/i] in this poem that I've not encountered much in your previous writing.[/color][/size] [size=1][color=#800000]It's soft, almost sweet. Gentle and accommodating. The flow of the poem was a loving caress.[/color][/size] [size=1][color=#800000]It was easy to soak up and I drank it like fine wine. Lovely.[/color][/size] [size=1][color=#800000]- Mimmi[/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
QuincyArcher Posted March 14, 2004 Share Posted March 14, 2004 yeah, not a bad poem. but isnt paranoid android the title to one of Radiohead's songs off OK Computer? [IMG]http://www.followmearound.com/links/mirror2/synanim1.gif[/IMG] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
starphish Posted April 2, 2004 Share Posted April 2, 2004 [QUOTE=QuincyArcher]yeah, not a bad poem. but isnt paranoid android the title to one of Radiohead's songs off OK Computer? [IMG]http://www.followmearound.com/links/mirror2/synanim1.gif[/IMG][/QUOTE] Yeah, it is (an amazing album IMHO). It's also (paranoid android) from the "Hitchicker's Guide to the Galaxy" series I believe...??? Very nice work on the poem, too. I enjoyed it a great deal. =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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