Sweet Pie Posted March 10, 2004 Share Posted March 10, 2004 [FONT=Century Gothic][color=red][b][size=3]Chapter 1 & 2[/FONT][/color][/b][/size] [color=indigo][size=1] Chapter 3 coming soon.... *p/s: comments and criticism are welcomed. Best regards, Sweet Pie (S.P.^_-)[/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Midnight Rush Posted March 15, 2004 Share Posted March 15, 2004 Hmm... this one is interesting, although her attraction to her father seems a bit unnatural, but its entirely possible. The brother-sister interaction is quite accurate, and the thoughts/speech match the characters well. My biggest question is, what exactly is the plot? No offense, but these two chapters seem to be sort of like set-up chapters, rather than story chapters. Please correct me if I'm wrong, Your friend, Patrick Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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