eleanor Posted March 12, 2004 Share Posted March 12, 2004 :animesmil :animesmil :animesmil :animesmil :animesmil :animesmil :animesmil :animesmil :animesmil :animesmil Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Muad'Dib Posted March 13, 2004 Share Posted March 13, 2004 [QUOTE]I kept on exceeding the 1500 word limit.[/QUOTE] GOOD FOR YOU!!!!! No, seriously... that's awesome. Right, anyway, I haven't read all of it at the moment, but you can bet I'll be comin' back for more... though depressing, it was very, very good. Well, in my opinion anyway. I liked the description of Danny... of how all the other people thought of him and so on. That's a gift... writing so descriptively. Use it. Seemes you already have... whatever. Keep using it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mimmsicle Posted March 13, 2004 Share Posted March 13, 2004 [size=1][color=#800000]I'd be very interested in reading the original draft, if you still have it ?[/color][/size] [size=1][color=#800000]Your explanation explains (heh) why it felt like there were parts missing in the description of the fly and Danny's reaction to it. That was the only negative comment I would've made about it.[/color][/size] [size=1][color=#800000]The spacing of text, descriptions to reactions/surroundings, flow of the story - all of it is great. It was easy to follow and understand.[/color][/size] [size=1][color=#800000]Good job ^_^[/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Godelsensei Posted March 13, 2004 Share Posted March 13, 2004 [COLOR=Gray][SIZE=2][FONT=Courier New]I was very pleased with how you [I]did not give the name of the dog[/I]. It would have ruined everything in the way tying up every little thing does. A couple of sentences were worded rather oddly (sorry for not quoting them--maybe I just read them wrong), so maybe you should read through it a couple of times. However, the piece is very good. I kind of wish my English teacher gave us interesting assignments.[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eleanor Posted March 14, 2004 Author Share Posted March 14, 2004 :sleep: :sleep: :sleep: :sleep: :sleep: :sleep: :sleep: :sleep: :sleep: :sleep: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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