Writing Tainted hands

[Mimmsicle]

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As I got home from a relaxing walk, I found the latest instalment of a manga magazine on the kitchen table.[/font][/color] My hands eagerly flipped the pages, my lips curving in a smile as I followed the adventures of my favourite characters. But as I was putting the magazine away, chuckling lightly, I noticed the printing ink on my hands.

[/size][/font][/color][i][color=#400000][font=Verdana][size=1]And I remembered....

[/size][/font][/color][/i][color=#400000][font=Verdana][size=1]My fingers used to be black after thumbing through hundreds of papers. Sometimes there would be dark blotches on my face, after I'd scratched an itchy nose, or tried to fend off the sleep from weary eyes.

[/size][/font][/color][color=#400000][font=Verdana][size=1]Seeing it on my hands had always filled me with a sense of accomplishment, pride even. Like when you were young and someone would smile and ruffle your hair, praising even the smallest of feats.

[/size][/font][/color][i][color=#400000][font=Verdana][size=1]It was subtle joy, and I miss it....[/size][/font][/color][/i]


[color=#400000][font=Verdana][size=1][color=#800000]This is a rough draft. I'm not entirly satisfied with it, so I'd be interested in knowing what you all make of it. [/color][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#400000][font=Verdana][size=1][color=#800000]I have no idea if one can use "thumbing" in this case. But I had no better word for it at the time, so ^_^;[/color][/size][/font][/color]

[color=#400000][font=Verdana][size=1][color=#800000]Any and all help is appreciated ^_^[/color][/size][/font][/color]

[Shinmaru]

Well, in that particular case, I believe it would be "thumbing through hundreds of papers".

Anyway, the story seems good so far. It reads well and very smoothly and you can really feel the joy that the person in the story gets from reading. The rough draft is coming along well so far...I'd like to see you continue, if that's possible ^_^

[Lady Asphyxia]

[font=Verdana][size=1]*smiles and looks at her hands* I thought the piece was lovely, and I could definately connect with it, heh. *currently has ink all over her hands from a drawing she was doodling during English*[/size][/font]

[font=Verdana][size=1]I thought the piece was reminiscient, definately, and wistful, too. It had a [i]lovely[/i] feeling to it. Just magic. You always write so beautifully, and it flows so well. Another gorgeous piece, and I daresay this will be continued? Please? I really wish to see it finished.[/size][/font]

[DeadSeraphim]

[COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial Narrow]Heh, I'm no good at this, but its the least I can do considering you post in all my threads.

I like it. It is very light, like fairy floss, but at the same time satisfying. I hope you keep going with it Mimms, it could turn out good.

~CrH~[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR]

[Mimmsicle]

[font=Verdana][size=1][color=#400000][font=Verdana][size=1][color=#800000]Thanks for the comments everyone ^_^ [/color][/size][/font]

[font=Verdana][size=1][color=#800000]This "story" has taken me by surprise somewhat, hehe. Initially there was only that first draft and I had no intention of taking it further. I didn't even have any ideas for a follow up *lol*[/color][/size][/font]
[font=Verdana][size=1][color=#800000]However, I found that the first draft was part of something bigger. [/color][/size][/font]

[font=Verdana][size=1][color=#800000]I'll post "part 2" only, to test the waters. I'm not sure if my "vision" of this story is identical with everyone elses, so I'll post a revised version....hehe ~_^[/color][/size][/font]
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[font=Verdana]A deep sigh escaped my lips as I beheld the warm water dance like grey clouds down the sink. The soap had cleansed my inked hands, but could not strip me of the visions that clouded my thoughts.[/font]

[font=Verdana][i]Distant memories are always closest to your heart....[/i][/font]

[color=#400000][font=Verdana]To this day I can still recall every insignificant detail, all those feelings that rushed through me like wild fairies on a late summer?s eve. It's funny how, even after all this time, its vibrancy has not faded? oblivious to the fact that it was lost or misplaced as some point.[/font][/color]

[font=Verdana]Why didn't I take better care of those moments then, instead of now clinging to them ... [/font]

[i][font=Verdana]They're long gone now, though?[/font][/i]
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[Maully]

[color=green]Mimmi, I love this section! It's so sad and piercing. It looks like it may be going somewhere unexpected... and I for one can't wait to see where it leads.

I especially really liked the part about the sink water. Good imagery and symbolism.[/color]

[Mimmsicle]

[color=#400000][size=1][color=#800000][font=Verdana]I struggled a bit with this part... it's almost like The Two Towers, unless you see it with the other two movies, it feels... anyway ^_^;[/font]
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[size=1][color=#400000][font=Verdana]Quietly struggling with shoelaces, my eyes tried to shut out the pressing tears and look ahead. The dimly lit hallway cast shadows on my solemn mind, slowly suffocating and drowning the life that fought to surge through me again. [/font]

[/color][/size][size=1][color=#400000][font=Verdana][i]I can feel it?[/i][/font]

[/color][/size][color=#400000][size=1][color=#400000][font=Verdana]The sweet sensation as my hands slowly move across the smooth surface and the wind trying to snatch the pages from me, a childish attempt to beckon for attention. Sleepy eyes blinded by the early rays of sunlight, looking over the shoulder curiously, trying to decipher my distant smile.[/font]

[/color][/size][/color][size=1][color=#400000][font=Verdana]An innocent, healthy high? the kind that is harmless, even if overdosed. Contained ecstasy.[/font]

[font=Verdana][i]It?s still a part of me? still here ?[/i][/font][/color][/size]