Writing 0 look more poems just what we need :rolleyes:

[dark Raven]

hey i know these suck but thats how life is




Would you just listen to what I'm saying
I'm sick of the lies and I'm not playing
If you're not gonna believe me
And that I don't know you
Then I guess I know what I'm supposed to do

Get this over with
And forget about you
I guess this is over now
What is there left to do
I thought we had something
Cuz I loved you
Well it turned out to be nothing

You're just out of reach
Theres no turning back now
I tried to save you but you turned me down once again so I guess it's the end of us now
I'm trying to show you the truth but you just can't see what the truth really is
You're too blind to see how much I've tried to show you it
I guess you don't wanna see or have me

Get this over with
And forget about you
I guess this is over now
What is there left to do
I thought we had something
Cuz I loved you
well it turned out to be nothing

I once thought that you trusted me
I guess that shows how stupid I am cuz this crap has happened again
Why do you defend them when we had so much more
Well I thought we did
I don't know what for
I even kissed you to show how much I loved you
Well I guess it means nothing no matter what I do
Its your loss not mine cuz I know I'm not lying to you

Get this over with
And forget about you
I guess this is over now
What is there left to do
I thought we had something
Cuz I loved you
well it turned out to be nothing

This is your last chance
Your last chance for us
If you don't believe me now
It's over without a doubt
Either love or hate me
If it's meant to be then you'll believe me

[dark Raven]

And another one ..............................



Things have changed, so have I, now all I really want is you on the phone being my lullaby
Hearing your voice makes me know everything all right
But all these people telling you lies, making us fall apart more day by day
I hope you know I'd rather die, than not to have you by my side
You mean the world to me, and then my world came crashing down and there was nothing left to see
Except broken lives and broken hearts, now I just hope that we don't fall apart, that would take the last of me

When you tried to cut that one day, when you showed me all your pain, I went home and did what you did again
I saw your pain and saw your life, and I began to see why you got that knife
Then I laid down that night and cried
I wondered why it had to be you
Why not someone else, but I want you to know I will always help get you through
No matter if we're friends or not, I would sneak out of the house and I wouldn't care if I got caught, as long as I knew that you were ok

Every day that I saw you I realized how much more I loved than I ever thought I would
It surprised me that I could actually love someone as much as I do
I would never use you
I would never cause you pain
If only you could see this, everything would be ok

Whenever I think about you, I just want to come and hug you
If not that, then something else
I wish you knew how I felt

Things have changed, so have I, now all I really want is you on the phone being my lullaby
Hearing your voice makes me know everything all right
But all these people telling you lies, making us fall apart more day by day
I hope you know I'd rather die, than not to have you by my side
You mean the world to me, and then my world came crashing down and there was nothing left to see
Except broken lives and broken hearts, now I just hope that we don't fall apart, that would take the last of me

[Gentle]

[SIZE=1][COLOR=DeepPink]Eh, first I just suggest you edit and put those into the same post.

Anyway, songs. Your stanzas make no sense and your little rhyming scheme makes less. You switch between rhyming and not again and again. It just throws everything off kinda. Then I just started to fade away from the meaning.[/COLOR][/SIZE]