Guest Nadiah Posted June 30, 2004 Share Posted June 30, 2004 Chapter 1:Yolei's plan one day, Yolei and hawkmon found out that there were two more seasons of digimon(via the internet *wink*) that were created. :D "hey Hawkmon, maybe all of us could get together or something!" :) "looks like yolei has a plan" :( "but how do we do it?" :babble: "try leaving messages on their digivices" :D "you clever bird!" So that is exactly what Yolei did, every digidestined got the message on their digivices. She told them to meet in the park and each bring a little bit of food. Takato was soooo excited cause his parents cooked heaveanly bread.koji got to work makin' sandwiches even though he sucked at it :sleep: .The others were really excited and packed what to bring. So all the digidestined slept early to go to the park the next day.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Patronus Posted June 30, 2004 Share Posted June 30, 2004 Some major things you might want to look into: 1. Punctuation. The starting letter of every sentence, including when someone speaks, should be capitalized. So should proper nouns, such as [i]Digidestined. [/i]Your grammatical skills are good, but I have this suggestion: [QUOTE]So that is exactly what Yolei did, every digidestined got the message on their digivices [/QUOTE] Instead of using "got", use "recieve". It sounds so much better. Ending punctuation should be kept in mind. Always put an ending punctuation mark at the end of a sentence. 2. Detail. Yes, it's nice that Yolei has discovered the other Digidestined, but how did she do it? Putting "(via the internet *wink*)" isn't going to cut it. It'd be nice to hear how she discovered them, and how she contacted them, and found out how to contact them. You may want to look into these to make your story better. ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Nadiah Posted July 1, 2004 Share Posted July 1, 2004 (thank you for the help dude with fingers as an avatar :D) Yolei didn't really get her info from the internet...... It all happened during season 3 of digimon, when d-reaper was in control. Yolei and her parents were on holiday there and Yolei heard the news on TV. She secretly ran to the scene of D-reaper and saw it for herself. She knew that there had to be more digidestined to help fight D-reaper. And true enough,CUE, Takato,Henry and Rika along with Guilmon,Terriermon and Renamon. Yolie was fascinated and she found out that there were more digidestined othere than she and her friends. AS FOR SEASON 4........ Hawkmon was flying around digiworld just lookin' around, then, he was ambushed by Mercurymon. He was attaking him so severely that Hawkmon almost had the data sucked out of him. He would have perished if it wasn't for Agunimon :D :D :D :D They battled for quite a while, eventually, Mercurymon dissappered as strangely as he had appeared. :babble: thanks for saving me,say what is a human doing here and how did you digivolve? :smirk:ya gotta lotta questions don'tcha? It doesn't matter now, we gotta take care of you :confused: but wanna know how.... :sleep: (faints) :( poor dude, oh well Sadly that was all Hawkmon could tell Yolei. She was so excited and wanted to get to know them better.Just then an idea struck her,all digidestined have digivices so she sent them all a message on their digivices. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Nadiah Posted July 2, 2004 Share Posted July 2, 2004 The next day, all of the digidestined meet under the Sakura tree right in the middle of the park, all of the digidestined competing on who would get there first. soooooo....Suzie won cuz she was riding on antylamon(nowadays, the people where they lived had gotten used to all of this strange stuff so they ignored it :sleep: ) :D hurry up Henry!!!!!! :sleep: excuse me, we have our own legs :sleep: *pant* both of them turned around and saw an guy on the other side of the tree. judging by his weird cap and goggles like Takato's, he ehad to be a digidestined! Henry, as well as suzie nudged him.... :eek: AAAAAHHHHH!!! who's that?!?!?!? Takuya, finally coming to his senses saw a boy, a little girl and two digimon with oversized ears which sweeped the ground as they walked. :D sorry for scaring you, umm...are you a digidestined? :) are you? :babble: sure am, oh how rude of me, my name is Henry, what's yours? :smirk: oh, It's Takuya and i'm also a digidestined. :therock:ummm,...don't you have a digimon? :smirk: yup, I AM a digimon :wigout: WHAAAT? how so !!!!!!DIGISPIRIT EVOLUTION!!!!!! *tranformation music* AGUNIMON :eek: that's soooo cool!!!I wish I could do that *transforms back* :) a lot of people are hopefuls *shake hands* :) I think this is the biginning of a beautiful friendship :) me too! :) :) :) Cool ending to a chapter huh? :) :) :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Nadiah Posted July 3, 2004 Share Posted July 3, 2004 :p Listen Henry, can you keep a secret? :babble: sure. :confused: well...er. Just at that moment,Izumi walked by and saw Takuya. :babble: hey Takuya, I expected to, see you here... :luv: uhhh...hi izumi *blushes* :smirk: oh, hi what's your name? :smirk: oh, it's Henry, let me guess, you're a digidestined :D yep Then, Izumi walked off and waited for the others by playing with fallen cherry blossoms :) so umm...Takuya, what were you saying :luv:....I like Izumi.... :p ohhh....I don't blame you.... :sweat: I was just wondering ifI should tell her.... ;) I suppose you should, but don't tell her in public of you'll totally embarass yourself,besides, who knows,she might like you too! :eek: really! you think?!?!? :smirk: most posibbly! :love: wow!!! Takuya pictured himself and Izumi in a field of flowers. Then, they got closer and closer, so did their lips,then.... :sweat: umm...Takuya....? :sweat: ohh...sorry.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Nadiah Posted July 3, 2004 Share Posted July 3, 2004 Takuya was talking to Henry when suddenly.... :demon: I HAVE COME FOR YOUR SOULLLLL!!!!!!! :eek: :eek: AHHHHH!!! :faint: *faints* They were so scared they hugged each other really tight :sweat: :sweat: Oh...sorry, I didn't know I scared you that much :sweat: :sweat: :sweat: It's our fault were all wimps :smirk: I thought that was cool!I knew it was you...umm... :) oh, my name is Tai, and yes, I'm also a digidestined :laugh: it was pretty funny though Tai went off and saw Izumi playing with the cherry blossoms :) hi, are you a... ;) ...digidestined? Yeah I sure am.... Izumi then looked at Tai and got an immediate crush on him. he looked so cool and acted cool.Izumi hugged him and started flirting and gossiping.In her mind... :love2: :love2: :love2: GOD HE'S CUTE!!!! :love: school's been a killer huh? :babble: yeah, thank gosh it's Saturday after talking to Henry, Henry started playing with Terriermon and Takuya took a quick glance at Izumi and saw her hugging and flirting with Tai. He was heartbroken. The only girl he loved had fallen in love with a guy slightly older than her..... :crying: :crying: :crying: WHY DOES THIS HAPPEN!!!!! :crying: :crying: :crying: he thought..... :crying: :crying: :crying: how depressing :crying: :crying: :crying: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Nadiah Posted July 6, 2004 Share Posted July 6, 2004 I just wanted to intriduce to you the one who's goinna help me create this fanfic, Izumi. ONLY HER CAN HELP ME!!!! IF ANYONE ELSE TRIES TO HELP, I'LL CONTACT THE ADMINISTRATORS!!!!! Thank-q! :beer: yup, a tall glass of glittering glory I like to call BEER!!!! although, i'm not allowed to drink it :sweat: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Nadiah Posted July 6, 2004 Share Posted July 6, 2004 Eventually,all of the season 1 digidestined arrived. Izumi still fancied Tai, Takuya was still sobbing over his lost love and Henry had no clue what the bloody hell was going on :sweat: ;) Hi Tai a farmiliar voice called out....it was Mimi! Izumi looked at her and asked, :flaming: who is she. :love: oh,...my girlfriend, Mimi .....CHINK! Izumi's heart broke into a million pieces(did I get that right?).She only just met him and....ugh, she felt like sooooo....REJECTED!!!! her heart::bawl: :bawl: :bawl: :bawl: :bawl: :bawl: :bawl: :bawl: Then the did the worst thing she could possibly imagine,.....K-I-S-S now she felt rejected[COLOR=Red] and [/COLOR] disgusted, how could she have liked a guy like him!?!? She promised that from now on, she would not fall for older guys .............but I never said younger or her age guys ;) The end of this chapter, for now ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Nadiah Posted July 6, 2004 Share Posted July 6, 2004 :laugh: this one is funny but [COLOR=Red]rude[/COLOR]. okay, two days before thanksgiving,timmy's parents were having an arguement, timmy's mom called her husband a Bast*** and Timmy's dad called timmy's mom a B****. Then timmy asked, "mom, what is a B****** and a B****?" "ummm..."said his mom"B****** means men and B**** means women. "oh, okay!" The next day, Timmy was watching the S** channel (not on purpose), and they talked about Brea*** and Pe*** .So, timmy asked his mom what *ahem* was :sweat: " :eek: WHAT!!!Oh umm I mean umm, it means coats and hats!"Said his mum."Oh 'kay" On thanksgiving, his dad got cut while shaving and he said Sh**."Dad , what is SH**?" "Urmm, it means shaving cream :sweat: "said his dad "oh okay" said timmy downstairs, his mom accidently burned the turkey and she said "F***!!!!!" "mommy, what is F***?" " :eek: :eek: umm,....it means turkey :sweat:" And whan his relatives came, guess what he said, "Hello B******* and B******, welcome to my house, please put your Brea*** and Pe*** on the coatrack. Dad is busy putting Sh** on his face and mom is cooking the F***! have a nice time" and all his relatives fainted. I know it is pretty rude :sweat: :sweat: :sweat: but I hope you found it funny!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Nadiah Posted July 6, 2004 Share Posted July 6, 2004 Just then, Izumi felt a tap on her shoulder..... :smirk: hey Izumi... :( Hi koji, I didn't know you were here already.... :confused: why the sad face? :bawl: I don't think I'll ever find the special someone in my life..... :eek: whoa, you don't need to think about that yet, besides, you'll find that person someday, uhhh, I don't really have the right advice for this :sweat: :) thanks koji, you're great! she put her arm around his shoulder. He blushed a vibrant red. He had to find a way to get outta this... :therock: uhh, i'm goinna go mingle okay, see ya Izumi. He quickly went off in a huff, still blushin red. :) maybe he is right, I shouldn't worry about this now, I'm sucha dork :blush:. both of them went back to talk and mingle with the other digidestined. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest rumiko the mer Posted July 7, 2004 Share Posted July 7, 2004 [QUOTE=Nadiah]I just wanted to intriduce to you the one who's goinna help me create this fanfic, Izumi. ONLY HER CAN HELP ME!!!! IF ANYONE ELSE TRIES TO HELP, I'LL CONTACT THE ADMINISTRATORS!!!!! Thank-q! :beer: yup, a tall glass of glittering glory I like to call BEER!!!! although, i'm not allowed to drink it :sweat:[/QUOTE] oh,nadi.....................................:blush:....u shouldn't have................... and b sides...*ahem!hope u will take it as a joke......but........[SIZE=1]i also like koji[/SIZE]*and k,i'll b their matchmakers! and now for the list of who+who..... -Tai + Mimi -Sora + Matt -Takeru+Hikari -Yolei +Ken -Cody+Ai -Ryo+Rika -Henry+Alice -Takato+Jen/Jeri -Suzie+Tommy ............................................. the bachelors(haha,too bad...................) Joe Izzy Daisuke/Davis Jenta Kazu Takuya JP(that's what his name is like in eng.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest rumiko the mer Posted July 7, 2004 Share Posted July 7, 2004 Soon,all of the other digidestinied s arrive. ''Hi,what's your name?'' ''Oh,i'm Rika and this is Ryo,that girl there is Suzie,she's in 6th Grade now.'' ''Oh,my name is Izumi and i also know a guy in 6th Grade.Rika,shall we..... :smirk: '' ''Sure,she's quite troublesome,though.'' ''Never mind.Tommy,the 6th Grader,is almost the same...*giggles*'' ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Meanwhile.................... ''Attention people!Since we are all digidestined s,and we finally met for the first time, why not rent a chalet and get together!'' "Yeah,that's a brilliant idea!'' So they rented the chalet,one by the seaside(uhh oh,not a brilliant idea....),near the sakura tree,and big and spacey,even all of the partner digimons can have 2 rooms all to themselves(1 room for the girls and the other for the guys)! --------------------------------------------------------------------------- That night....................... ***************************************************** P.s when i have a line of *********************** s, i mean u may carry on from there.Happi replyin'! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Nadiah Posted July 8, 2004 Share Posted July 8, 2004 Hey, how do u like rumiko's work so far (confidentially, I think she's slightly messy :blush: )all hail the princess of mer!!! umm, okay a chalet, by the beach, she's so original ( :rolleyes: )oh, yes, here we go!!!! Hikari was very curios about Matt and Sora's relationship and last night she saw a very unmentional(did I spell that right :sweat:)sight. this is what happened. :sleep: *yawn* man, I'm thirsty...tailmon, follow me to the kitchen....plaese :sleep: snore, snore :rolleyes: I don't blame her. while on her way to the kitchen, she saw two people outside.She recognised the two people as Sora and Matt.She could just about hear them.... :blush:oh Matt, I didn't know we had to so soon *hikari* :smirk: to....what :( Sora,...I luv you, I have since the certain day we became digidestined.I am honest *hikari* :laugh: sora and matt sittin' in a tree, K-I-..... but before hikari could continue.Matt grabbed Sora and kissed her. their lips glued together.Hikari's mouth dropped open. *hikari*:eek:...S-...S-...I-...N-...G.....!!!!!!!!ewww gross!!!Sora!!!Matt!!! they stayed like that for 5 minutes, apparantly, Sora was enjoying it.... Hikari never told anyone what she saw that night.................. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Nadiah Posted July 8, 2004 Share Posted July 8, 2004 :D Hi everyone! :D I'm so glad you like this fanfic(you'd better!!!! :sweat:) how about the new editing assistant, rumiko the mer? In real life, she is the youngest in our elemental group, apparantly, she is water and I'm fire. She is incredably cute(Don't tell her or she'll punch me like she always does!!!) or....threaten me with rain,oh mi gosh i'm as defendless as an ant on tuesday with an umbrella.....uhhh never mind. I think Sora and Matt make a cute couple, don't you? but seriously, if Rumiko finds out about this, she'll kill me so don't tell, but,she'd find out anyway so I'd better get to writing my will :sweat: :sweat: :sweat: :sweat: :sweat: ............. :sweat: how are you liking the fanfic so far?I think it's going quite well!!! last laugh: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: Pokemon are cramped up in these things!Digimon are given' FREEDOM!!!!!!! pikachu, peekaboo, kickapoo!!! :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest rumiko the mer Posted July 9, 2004 Share Posted July 9, 2004 [QUOTE=Nadiah]:D Hi everyone! :D I'm so glad you like this fanfic(you'd better!!!! :sweat:) how about the new editing assistant, rumiko the mer? In real life, she is the youngest in our elemental group, apparantly, she is water and I'm fire. She is incredably cute(Don't tell her or she'll punch me like she always does!!!) or....threaten me with rain,oh mi gosh i'm as defendless as an ant on tuesday with an umbrella.....uhhh never mind. I think Sora and Matt make a cute couple, don't you? but seriously, if Rumiko finds out about this, she'll kill me so don't tell, but,she'd find out anyway so I'd better get to writing my will :sweat: :sweat: :sweat: :sweat: :sweat: ............. :sweat: how are you liking the fanfic so far?I think it's going quite well!!! last laugh: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: Pokemon are cramped up in these things!Digimon are given' FREEDOM!!!!!!! pikachu, peekaboo, kickapoo!!! :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball: :ball:[/QUOTE] nadi.......i M the younhgest but i'm muchmore matured than u r.*grrrrrrrrr....* and pls,no 1,i MEAN no 1 calls me CUTE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! cus' that idiot will die,faster than u can blink your eye..................... IF ANI! ELSE CALLS MI CUTE,,SHE WILL DIE OF A VERRY HORRIBLE DEATH!!!!!! the end :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Nadiah Posted July 18, 2004 Share Posted July 18, 2004 (I forgot to mention, this was takuya's dad's chalet branch sooooooooo, it was free!!!!!!!)It was finally the day of all days, all of the digidestined were gonna head down to pearl beach(made up name, NOT real :sweat: ). all of the digidestined got dressed and ready to head down to the beach. :D i'm real excited Izumi!!!! :babble: I know yolei, this was ur idea for all of us to get together in the first place, thanks! :blush: awwww shucks, it was nothin' :blush: so FINALLY, everyone walked down to the beach. for starters, all of them built sandcastles, except takeru. -_- I wish......i was in digiworld...... the guy was havin' a flashback :sleep: ......waaaay back then.......we had so much adventure......I wish we still had that much to face......now my life has become so much duller.......I wish we still had........ he didn't finish because perky hikari came to cheer him up, :love2: Hiiiiii TK!!!!!! :therock: oh,hi hi..... he stopped and stared at hikari. She was so happy with what she had(she was lookin' cute too ;) )and who she had fun with. :) let's go build a sand castle together :haha: yay!!! they helds hand and walked over to a spot where they could build in peace. :smirk: :) finally thay finished their sand castle and won first place! :love: I couldn't do it without you takeru..... she laid her head on his shoulder and held his hand( they were NOT gonna kiss :sweat: ) :smirk: thanks hika..... just then, out of nowhere, Beelzemon, on his harley davidson(joke intended :sweat:) drove straight towards.......HIKARI!!!!!! :eek: aaaaaahhhh!!!!!!!!!!!! but luckily, he didn't run over her, instead, he grabbed the girl closest to her, RIKA!!!!! :flaming: grrrrrr, let me go you @$^% :devil: you'rs comin' with me girly :flaming: no one, I MEAN NO ONE CALLS ME GIRLY not even a digimon!!!! She kicked and struggled, but he was too strong. eventually, they entered a portal to digiworld. :flaming: :flaming: :flaming: :flaming: :flaming: :flaming: :flaming: :flaming: :flaming: LET'S SAVE RIKA!!!!!!! all of them ran as fast as they could except takeru, who was carring hikari who fainted of shock. LET'S GOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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