Manga Does anybody want to read my manga?

[Sailor Ganymede]

It's called "Josh and Alana" but it's a MAJOR ripoff of Inuyasha, but hey, I'm learning! Somebody please read this!

EPISODE 1: THE FIRST ADVENTURE

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(the Strotin Realm, an alternate universe of Tokyo)

Narrator: In the Strotin Realm, there was a legendary mirror. The Shetso Mirror was legendary for its mysterious powers, and was protected by the priestess Adriana from anyone that may want to steal it or use it wrongly. It was protected for time, until a demon called Jetsujin attempted to steal it in 2002 A.D. Adriana died fighting Jetsujin, and the Mirror shattered during the battle. Two people are destined to search for the Fragments of the Mirror and defeat Jetsujin. But who are they, and when will they come?

2 YRS. LATER..

(Tokyo)

Alana is sitting with her friends at a diner, chatting.

Alana: Okay, guys, I gotta ride. My mom will kill me if I don't get home soon.

Friends: Yeah, laters, Alana.

Alana gets up and leaves the diner, running as fast as she can to her house.

Mrs. Saotome is raking leaves on the front lawn.

Mrs. Saotome: Oh, good, you're home.

Alana: Right, Mom.

Mrs. Saotome: You need to talk to Abby again. She tried to go near the tree again.

Alana: *sigh* Sure, Mom.

But instead of going to her 8 yr old sister Abby's room, she goes out to the backyard, where a tall tree stands in the corner of the fence. She walks to it.

Alana: Come on, tree, what's your secret? *touches the bark*

A hole opens up beneath her.

Alana: *looks down* Wha-? *falls* AAAAAUUUUUGGGGGHHHHH!

A reddish-pink background is all around Alana for a few minutes then Alana falls to the ground in a strange world (the Strotin Realm, though she doesn't know it yet)

Alana: *looks around* What?

She gets up.

Alana: Owowow.

She looks around some more and sees a boy about her age asleep, pinned to a tree with an arrow.

Alana: *walks to him* What? *pulls the arrow from his body* Is he..real? *runs hand over his face*

The boy wakes up and scowls at Alana.

Boy: Adriana?

Alana: *shakes head* No. Alana.

Boy: Josh. *looks around* Uh, what year is it?

Alana: 2004.

Josh: So I've been stuck here for two years. Damn Adriana. *struggles to get out*

Alana: Here, let me help you. *grabs his arms and pulls with all her might*

Josh: *looks at the Maka Crystal around Alana's neck* Wait a sec..

Alana sees a Maka Crystal around Josh's neck.

Both: You have a Maka Crystal, too?

Josh: Oh..my..God..you're the other destined one.

Alana: What are you talking about?

Josh: Help me out of here and I'll explain.

Alana pulls Josh out with all her strength, he gets pulled out, Alana falls back, and Josh falls on top of her.

Alana: Get off me!

Josh: With pleasure. *sniff* You're SURE you're not Adriana? *gets off Alana*

Alana: Who's Adriana?

Josh: Never mind.

Alana: So what's this about me being the other destined one?

Josh: I'm not sure I want to spill. But, here goes. You and I were destined to find the Fragments of some Mirror and defeat some demon called Jetsujin.

Alana: Destined? With you? As if! I don't even know you!

Josh: Well the priestess of my village said it was so. The teens with the two Maka Crystals were the destined duo.

Alana: O_O

Josh: Do you have a star tattoo on your right wrist?

Alana: *nod*

Josh: Then we're the Jukai no Shukumei. I have one, too.

They both shudder.

Both: *thinking* That's just scary.

We'll be right back.. //COMMERCIAL// And now back to the program.

(in Josh's village, the Niva village)

Alana: So......what's this place again?

Josh: *glare* For the fifth time, it's my village. Well, it WAS my village before that ***** turned on me.

Alana: ~_^

Josh: Okay, I'll just shut up now.

Roaring in distance.

Village priestess Sao: EVERYBODY, EVACUATE!

Josh: 0_o. Uh.what's been going on?

Sao: Since ye've been gone, a demon has been wreaking havoc here.

Josh: I'll take care of it. *grabs a tiny red Frisbee out of his cargo pocket, it immediately enlarges and curved blades pop out*

Sao: Thank ye! Thank ye! *runs off*

Alana: Uh.

Josh runs into a shed, rummages around, and throws Alana a golden Staff.

Alana: Hey! What am I supposed to do?

Josh: That Staff can turn into any weapon you want..I think. Now transform it into something and let's go!

Alana looks at the Staff and it turns into a sword.

Alana: HEY! WAIT UP! *runs after Josh, who had a head start*

Catches up, panting.

Alana: Man, you sure do run fast.

Josh: I'm a hanyou, what d'you expect?

Alana: o_0. You don't look like a hanyou..

Josh: Well, I am. Now can we focus on the more important thing here?!

Roaring gets louder and closer..

Alana: So what's your plan?

Josh: Uh.

Alana: YOU DON'T HAVE A PLAN?!

Josh: Hey, I haven't fought in two years! So sue me!

Alana: Yeesh. TOUCHY.

Roaring gets even louder and closer

Alana: Do you have a plan NOW?

Josh: Do me a favor and shut up! We'll do this spontaneously. How good are you with a sword?

Alana: Pretty good. My dad taught me a bit.

Josh: Okay, that works. Let's get that demon!

A large..raptor demon appears out of the trees.

Josh: DAMN! It's a raptor!

Alana: No duh!

Josh: I never encountered raptors before.

Alana: Oh THAT'S a lot of help!

Josh: No time to reprimand! We gotta defeat this thing!

Demon: *RRRRROOOOOAAAAARRRRR!!!!*

Josh: *rubs his ear* Damn, that thing's loud!

Alana: Just what kind of hanyou are you anyway?

Josh: Wolf. And I guess it's a full moon today if I don't look like a hanyou. *poses to throw the Frisbee thing* GO, HETHUJIN! *throws it*

Alana: Hethu-what-y?

Josh: My weapon's name. Just watch.

Hethujin cuts the demon's face bad and then "flies" back to Josh's hand.

Alana: O.O

Josh: Yeah, I know.

Let's just say demon not be happy..

Demon: *RRRRROOOOOAAAAARRRRR!!!!*

Alana: *grips sword, thinking* Dad, be with me when I wield this!

Alana runs up to the demon, and slices the sword through it with all her might. Instead of falling in two pieces, it disappears with a flash of green light and a small glowing white thing falls to the ground.

Josh: A Shetso Fragment! *runs to the Fragment and picks it up*

Alana: THAT'S a Fragment? It's pretty small.

Josh: Small? FEH! Don't be fooled by its size!

Alana: Well, we found a Fragment, so I guess I'll go home.

Josh: Wait, stupid! We have to find ALL of the Fragments! And besides, you don't know how to get back to your world!

Alana: -_-v Oh yeah, NOW that helps!

Josh pulls a bottle out of his cargo pocket and puts the Fragment in it, along with two others that are in there.

Josh: Let's go back to the village.

Alana: Fine by me.

We'll be right back.. *COMMERCIAL* And now back to the program

(back at the Niva village)

Sao: Thank ye so much!

Alana: Uh. ^_^v

Josh: Okay, people, enough groveling. It's gone, end of story, sayonara!

Alana: Yeah. *bolts*

Josh bolts after her.

Josh: Cripes, baka! You still don't know how to get back to Tokyo from here in Strotin!

Alana: *sigh* Okay, how do I get back?

Josh: Simple. *walks to the biggest tree* You just touch the bark and then you'll go home.

Alana: Do I do the same to the tree in my backyard? 'Cause that's how I got here.

Josh: I would guess so.

Alana: Okay, thanks. *touches the bark*

Josh: Come back soon, okay?

Alana: Uh, okay. *falls in the hole opened up*

Josh: *looks on* Judai no Shukumei, my foot! She's just a girl! *walks back to the village*

So whaddya think so far?

[Oji ryu]

You're right it is alot like Inuyasha,but don't worry some of the greatest manga writers/anime creators have gotten they're ideas from othe manga/anime.As long as you keep trying to make it good but different from other manga/anime you'll do good.(when I first started my manga/anime,Angel's Sorrow,It turned out to be almost exactly like Inuyasha,but after careful thinking and planning it started to be different and better.)So keep trying there's no such thing as a ripoff. :smirk:

[Lusheeta]

Its okay,but im confuzed as to whether it is in Japan or america and if Alana and josh are american and why is the Sao lady tlking wierd when its 2204....well,yes its like inuyasha...but if your not publishing then who cares?as long as its interesting!maybe you can work on some of the inuyasha cheesyness,its a bit bothersome ^_^;
but otherwise nice work,are you going to draw the characters or get someone else to do them?

[naota]

Nice.Even though it is alot like inuyasha.I still like it.And what he said are you going to get any characters illustrated?