Writing My Story.

[Candle Jack]

A Sudden Loss of Sanity


There once lived an average cat, named Sanity. He had a average job, an average wife, and two marvelously average kids. He loved his average family dear. His average job was an office job. Day in and day out he would sign his important papers and converse with his average co-workers at the average water cooler.

But his average life change one day when a new supervisor was brought in due to the previous one dieing of an average heart attack brought on by the average stress that his type of position gave him.

The new supervisors name was Insanity. He was a care free cat who loved to chat with his co-workers and tell them stories of his exploits. He was tall and handsom, loved to explore, and every one loved him.

He and Sanity first met in the boad meeting that was created to introduced Insanity to his co-workers. From that moment on Sanity and Insanity became fast friends. They did every thing together. They explored, they caused mischief at office parties, they even went camping a few times.

Sanity's family treated Insanity like a part of the family. The kids called him Uncle, the wife called thought he was a joy to have around, and Sanity called him Bro. They often did things together on Sunday's. They loved to Bar Be Que, some times they camped out, and almost always they sat around the living room and watch movies while eating take out.

Then the day came for Insanity to go on his hard earned Vacation. He pulled some strings and got Sanity and his family to come along with him on a paid vacation. They family was very greatful for Insanity doing this.

A few days later they all met up at the air port in a average tropical resort. Through the course of the vacation they did all the average things there are to do at a tropical resort. They where having a good time. Til one day Insanity started to feel quite ill. No one thought anything about it, due to in the previous day he had one to many average fruity achoholic beverages.

But as the day passed he slowly became more ill, the family was started to feel concerned for him and they took him to a hospital. Shortly after their arival, Sanity became feeling ill himself. The doctor rushed them into quarentine, where they soon discorvered that Sanity and Insanity some how contracted a new previously undiscovered disease.

The doctors tried to find out how these two cats some how got an unknown virus in such a controled inviroment. After several hours they discovered the cause, it was something in the average achoholic beverages. It turned out that they fruit in the beverages came from a third world country that had no food safetly laws. So the diseased fruit was shipped to the tropical resort where all who drank the beverage would contract the illness.

Soon they had an epidemic. Poeple all over the tropical resort where catching this new illness. The goverment quarantined the whole resort and quickly started looking for a cure. The spent weeks and weeks working in the cure for the illness. Til one day, they noticed that only one group on the island didnt have the illness other than themselves. Sanity's average family.

They conducted test on the family to see what causes their resistance to the illness. For days they family was poked on, x rayed, and experimented on. Til one glorious day they discovered why they where resistant. All of the family excluding Sanity had a rare blood type that seemed to have a resistance most illness's.

Using this knowledge, they quickly made an antidote from the families blood. And administered it to all of the people on the island. But sadly, it was to late for Sanity. He died the night before the cure was discovered. Insanity was crushed. All that night he watched his friend slowly die.

When he recovered a few days later thanks to the antidote. He made a vow to himself. He vowed that he would take care of Sanity's family as if they where his own.

And that is what he did. When they got back, he had them moved into his large house and he bought them clothes and fed them good food.

A few months later, Sanity's wife and he began to start a relationship and not long after they fell madly inlove. A month later they where married.

The children called him dad, and his wife called him honey. They where a happy family. Though Insanity and his family never forgot their friend and loved one Sanity, he never really came to mind that much any more.

The End

[shadow15]

That was a very good story and if you published it lots of kids would read it. :) You really should think about it
luv ash

[Pawn114]

Yes, I agree... that was a very very good story. I dont know if alot of kids would understand some of that though :). Onto the critique: I know it was intentional, but the mention of average that many times actually detracted from the story. The first bit it was good, but after that it kind of got repetative using that. 2.) Thats mostly all the critique I could find about it. It did seem fairly low on the maturity level as a childrens story would be. Overall: I like it. Interesting to read, aside from the average amount of averages :laugh:

-Pawn