Writing A Walz Through the Winter Snow

[DetectiveMikeRS]

This was the first song I ever wrote and it got published, just wondering what everyone else thinks of it. Since this is published it is copywritten and I own it meaning no one can copy and paste it without my written permission. A slow, romantic song done to a piano with light guitar chords in the chorus.

A Waltz Through the Winter Snow
(Written November 10, 2003
by Mike R. Smale
(C) 2004)

Verse:
Snowflakes are falling,
all around me, in the air, outside.
You look so beautiful,
and my feelings for you,
I cannot hide any longer.

Chorus:
Let’s take a waltz,
through the winter snow.
Dancing under the Christmas
lights’ soft glow.
Only you and me,
without another living soul,
through the winter snow.

Verse:
The cold wind blows,
throughout this evening world.
But the fire in our hearts,
is burning so hot,
that no world of ice can freeze.

Bridge:
As we glide through the night
in a romantic bliss.
We stop, and share
one, single kiss.

Chorus:
Let’s take a waltz,
through the winter snow.
Dancing under the Christmas
lights’ soft glow.
Only you and me,
without another living soul,
through the winter snow.

[Pawn114]

Wow, I can see why this got published! Absolutely amazing! Nice rhyming scheme, and for some reason, I like "Dancing under the Christmas lights? soft glow." and I have no reason why. If that's the first song you ever wrote... bravo! Amazing!
I think it gives off a feel of the romance in a perfect winter night. Excellent!

-Pawn
(I didnt think I'd ever use so many excellents and amazings in one reply!)

[Hevn]

[COLOR=RoyalBlue][SIZE=1][B]I love the lyrics. It uses basic words but the feel of it is really soothing...maybe because of the words you used for rhyming. I suppose it already has a tune since it's a song right? If there is, is there any chance I can hear it? ^_^x[/B][/SIZE][/COLOR]

[Lady Asphyxia]

[font=Verdana][size=1]Great job! As Hevn said, it's quite a simple song, but it's got so much imagery and it's so effective at what it does that you just have to sit back and enjoy it. [/size][/font]
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[font=Verdana][size=1]I love the sweetness of the poem, and the dream-like feel it has to it. I honestly think it's fantastic. [/size][/font]
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[font=Verdana][size=1]Well done on getting your work published. It's a fantastic effort![/size][/font]
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[Eragon]

What is there to say that has't been said about your song i just love the way it rollls off your tounge

[Guest MangaFreak]

What is there to be said that hasn't been already? I guess I'll just have to elaberate(sorry but I suck at spelling)
When I read your song it makes me feel like I'm floating in air. My stomache gets butterflies and they dance around inside me that it tickles from the inside out. I have the feeling I get when you jump into the icy cold rivers of Cananda, cool and refreshing. It feels like I'm dreaming or am half asleep. It has an enchanting glow to it. My favorite part was the bridge... I can't tell you why but my heart skipped a beat and jumped into my throat. Strange thing is I'm not the romantic chick-flick/walk on the beach by the moon light type girl. I'm more of the action/ blowing things up girl. I ride dirt bike for crying out loud but when I hear your song it's like it just drifts away and all else fades into the darkness. I have this giant clogg where my heart once was! Some how you hit some thing inside of me that I never knew I had. Sure I write poetry but I never realy think much of it. But when I read your song it finds some thing that's hidden inside of me. That's pretty much all I have to say and i hope I didn't seem too... what's the word I'm looking for? Oh, girly. I'm realy a kick but kind of girl.