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:excited: ATTENTION :excited:

As a hobby, I'm thinking about making a poetry website to feature teen poems and stuff (because I think other sites that provide this service all SUCK and I want to give people a decent place).

Well, to put such a site up, I'll need submissions. Now, before you say 'But Adam, we have a poetry corner topic', let me tell you that it's too unformatted.

The format to submit poems via this post is as follows:

Reply with ONE POST PER PERSON with each of those posts containing all the poems you'd like to submit. Also include your name, email address, and poem's title, and not JUST the poem but an explanation/analysis of your own poem as well. Poems can be on ANY topic.

Take your time with this, I want to, with your help, make the highest quality teen poetry site on the 'net. I tried to find a similar site to submit my own stuff but I had no such luck, just a bunch of super commercial crap with billions of ads everywhere and god-awful super-big, fancy schmansy layouts. Let's show them who's boss the otaku way:).

Hope people respond.

-Ad

PS - We have some cool incentives to the best poets btw:), I like giving attention to those who deserve it.
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Hey Adam, I'm a little confused about what you meant by...

[QUOTE] Origanlly posted by Adam:
not JUST the poem but an explanation/analysis of your own poem as well. [/QUOTE]

Oh, I got a poem, I will write it here so if I don't finish it than I will say so.

[B]The One[/B]

By Ryan Nill (BWAHAHAHA My true name has been revealed :laugh:)
[email]mightywarlord@hotmail.com[/email]

When will you come along?
Into my worthless life
I'm waiting for you
Please come soon
I don't know what I'll do with out you
You have to be smart
You have to be beautiful
You have to be funny
But what I want
Most of all
Is some one that will talk to me
I'm lonely
I need to see you soon
Please come into my worhtless life
When will you come along?

Bla I came up with that one on the spot I hope you like it.
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[color=deeppink]This is an awesome idea Adam...I love poetry :excited:

[i]This is the poem with the most heart that I have written to date...[/i]

[b]In My Dreams
(Eric)[/b]
[size=1][i]By Jenna Winter[/size][/i]


[i]In my dreams I saw my brother walk,
He chased me around our house.
His cerebral palsy gone,
Extinguished from his body.
He talked to me about the things we?ve missed
Over the years.
It was nice to hear his voice,
His real voice,
For the first time,
And we conversed till midnight.
He yawned and told me to take him outside,
Down to the pond.
We caught frogs by flashlight,
But they wriggled out of his small, inexperienced hands.
He giggled with delight,
Told me that he liked the way that they felt.
I gave him a ride back up to the house,
His sleepy head bobbing up and down,
On my shoulder.
I slipped him into bed,
Covered his brand new body,
His brand new strength.
As I looked down at him,
He opened his eyes,
And he smiled up at me,
I smiled back tears
that threatened to fall as,
unbroken,
Eric told me that he loved me.[/i]

I that one is actually quite self-explanatory. If you have farther inquiry about it...I'd be happy to indulge...


[b]Untitled[/b]

[i]I think I imagine too much,
To think of how it would be,
To think of what you would do.
But I imagine?
And my imagination runs wild,
I try to keep the thoughts at bay,
Try to not let them trample my mind?
But you,
Your footprints are apparently all over my smile.
There isn?t a moment I don?t think about you,
To think of what we could have,
What could be between us,
Possibilities are endlessly crossing my mind.
Damn you, distractions,
When my thoughts turn to you,
But then again I still think about what you would do?
And how it would be?
And how much you have me hooked.
They say I?m obsessed,
But not I, couldn?t be,
I?m just terribly, hopelessly, in lust with you.[/i]


Heh, should be obvious that that one is about a crush I once had...I have deeper poems, but most of them are way too personal. So that's it :D[/color]
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[QUOTE]Origanally posted by BabyGirl:[COLOR=deeppink]
It was nice to hear his voice,
His real voice,
[/COLOR] [/QUOTE]

Well, I understand this poem except this line. I know that your brother is *seraches mind for the right word* phyically challenged... or was he mentally challenged? (I'm sorry if I'm using the wrong words cause I know you wouldn't like it if I said retarted or handicapped) Anyways how would you not be able to hear his real voice? Or is it just a lined you used to make it have more feeling or something like that?

Whoops, I said I would only post one. hehe...
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[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by BabyGirl [/i]
[B][color=deeppink]This is an awesome idea Adam...I love poetry :excited:

[i]This is the poem with the most heart that I have written to date...[/i]

[b]In My Dreams
(Eric)[/b]
[size=1][i]By Jenna Winter[/size][/i]


[i]In my dreams I saw my brother walk,
He chased me around our house.
His cerebral palsy gone,
Extinguished from his body.
He talked to me about the things we?ve missed
Over the years.
It was nice to hear his voice,
His real voice,
For the first time,
And we conversed till midnight.
He yawned and told me to take him outside,
Down to the pond.
We caught frogs by flashlight,
But they wriggled out of his small, inexperienced hands.
He giggled with delight,
Told me that he liked the way that they felt.
I gave him a ride back up to the house,
His sleepy head bobbing up and down,
On my shoulder.
I slipped him into bed,
Covered his brand new body,
His brand new strength.
As I looked down at him,
He opened his eyes,
And he smiled up at me,
I smiled back tears
that threatened to fall as,
unbroken,
Eric told me that he loved me.[/i]

I that one is actually quite self-explanatory. If you have farther inquiry about it...I'd be happy to indulge...


[b]Untitled[/b]

[i]I think I imagine too much,
To think of how it would be,
To think of what you would do.
But I imagine?
And my imagination runs wild,
I try to keep the thoughts at bay,
Try to not let them trample my mind?
But you,
Your footprints are apparently all over my smile.
There isn?t a moment I don?t think about you,
To think of what we could have,
What could be between us,
Possibilities are endlessly crossing my mind.
Damn you, distractions,
When my thoughts turn to you,
But then again I still think about what you would do?
And how it would be?
And how much you have me hooked.
They say I?m obsessed,
But not I, couldn?t be,
I?m just terribly, hopelessly, in lust with you.[/i]


Heh, should be obvious that that one is about a crush I once had...I have deeper poems, but most of them are way too personal. So that's it :D[/color] [/B][/QUOTE]

[SIZE=1]That... that is beautiful...:love:

The crow he sat glowring at me
I stared back but he grinned
and said gloating in his tree
you shold never have sinned

ah that suks...:([/SIZE]
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[size=3][b][i]Hell[/i][/b][/size] By Transtic Nerve (Chris)

[list][b]Hell?
Does it exist?
If so where?
And Why?

When one thinks of Hell
They think fire, Satan, dungeon-like.
But is that real?
Does it exist in this world of ours?

Hell is not what we think
Hell is a thought
A feeling...

Hell isn't a place for us to go
It isn't a place for souls who are bad
Hell makes us bad
For we are hell.

Hell is a thought, a feeling in one
It is the way one handles a situation
It is a way one feels for others
A certain thing that doesn't escape us

The saying "... a Living Hell"
It's true, you live hell everyday
Every night, everytime you open your eyes
everytime you talk, move, breathe

Hell is around you... Hell is you!
Hell is what ruins our lives
A place could not be as bad as a feeling
A feeling that is the worst of all

The feeling of Hell....

What burns us not,
What keeps us in,
What is toturous to our souls
The hell spoke of is not a place

For a feeling...
Sorrow, Guilt, Jealousy,
All feelings of Hell
They are Hell!

Why must Hell be this?
Why must i live Hell everyday?
Why does my body cover up this Hell?
Why can't we rid ourselves of it?

Why does it exists in me?
In anyone?
What have I,...
We, done to deserve this?

If this is hell...
Where's my heaven?[/list][/b]
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[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Cecil [/i]
[B]

Well, I understand this poem except this line. I know that your brother is *seraches mind for the right word* phyically challenged... or was he mentally challenged? (I'm sorry if I'm using the wrong words cause I know you wouldn't like it if I said retarted or handicapped) Anyways how would you not be able to hear his real voice? Or is it just a lined you used to make it have more feeling or something like that?

Whoops, I said I would only post one. hehe... [/B][/QUOTE]

[color=deeppink][size=1]Basically it means that in my dream, he could speak perfect English, just like any little brother :) And yes, Eric is physically challenged...not mentally, but because his motor skills are impared by his cerebral palsy, it is not easy for him to talk. Please please, don't make fun of anyone with special needs who has speech impediments or something of the like...it hurts me muchly when I hear people doing that :([/color][/size]
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[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Transtic Nerve [/i]
[B][size=3][b][i]Hell[/i][/b][/size] By Transtic Nerve (Chris)

[list][b]Hell?
Does it exist?
If so where?
And Why?

When one thinks of Hell
They think fire, Satan, dungeon-like.
But is that real?
Does it exist in this world of ours?

Hell is not what we think
Hell is a thought
A feeling...

Hell isn't a place for us to go
It isn't a place for souls who are bad
Hell makes us bad
For we are hell.

Hell is a thought, a feeling in one
It is the way one handles a situation
It is a way one feels for others
A certain thing that doesn't escape us

The saying "... a Living Hell"
It's true, you live hell everyday
Every night, everytime you open your eyes
everytime you talk, move, breathe

Hell is around you... Hell is you!
Hell is what ruins our lives
A place could not be as bad as a feeling
A feeling that is the worst of all

The feeling of Hell....

What burns us not,
What keeps us in,
What is toturous to our souls
The hell spoke of is not a place

For a feeling...
Sorrow, Guilt, Jealousy,
All feelings of Hell
They are Hell!

Why must Hell be this?
Why must i live Hell everyday?
Why does my body cover up this Hell?
Why can't we rid ourselves of it?

Why does it exists in me?
In anyone?
What have I,...
We, done to deserve this?

If this is hell...
Where's my heaven?[/list][/b] [/B][/QUOTE]

[SIZE=1]Chris... you are amazing...[/SIZE]
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[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by BabyGirl [/i]
[B]

[color=deeppink][size=1]Please please, don't make fun of anyone with special needs who has speech impediments or something of the like...it hurts me muchly when I hear people doing that :([/color][/size] [/B][/QUOTE]

[color=crimson][b][size=1]I beat up people that make fun of other people.... since i've been made fun of since.... i can remember....[/color][/b][/size]
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[SIZE=1]My cousin is Autistic... but he is like that. And I hate people who use looks and other phisycal things, 'tis why I hate me... sometimes... I sometimes poke fun of people who poke fun of me, and I'm good with words but I cannot write a descent poem...[/SIZE]
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[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by ShadowGohan [/i]
[B]

[SIZE=1]Chris... you are amazing...[/SIZE] [/B][/QUOTE]

Wow..... thank you.... seriously... no one's ever said that.

That was my first, and only poem I've written so far... I'm thinking of writing another but the time just hasn't come by yet... perhaps I will write another soon. Thank you though :)
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[COLOR=darkblue]ok,stand back and be amazed!POETRY BY STARDUST[/COLOR]

stardust
[email]pixiesparkles822@mail.com[/email]
aim:pixiesparkles822

[COLOR=limegreen]The things I like[/COLOR]

[I]I like to watch the stars at night,
when I'm all alone
I like to daydream
of worlds all my own

I like the rainbows
after rainy days
I like to pick roses
and I wish that they could stay

I like to walk through fields,
of colorful wildflowers
I like mystical things
unicorns and magic powers

I like to walk along the seaside
from time to time
then for just a moment
the whole world would be mine[/I]


PHILOSOPHY

[I]Lifes a one way street
that teaches everything
but what's the point of living?
if you can't have everything

People miss the point
happens everytime
it's not the life your living
but the life you've lived

Philosophy's another thing
few people understand
words that make no sense when first said
but those few words can change everything

You can see the stars
shining in the sky
but it doesn't mean
you can see the light

Courage comes from the soul
love from the heart
but people overlook the true experience
of both

To wrap up this tale
Never forget
things aren't what they appear to be
and that's enough said

[/I]

the first one was written from my love of the world,everything I like sumed up in a poem

the second one,comes from my love of philosophy,and some song lyrics also inspired it
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[SIZE=1]Soz to double post but I have a poem:

He waits, with clear mind
Waiting for him to come
He has his paper of reasoning
And his terrorist's gun

In the afternoon
In a blue estate car
He waits for him
For him to arrive

For the time has come
His hands shake
His gun now seems useless
The door opens

He steps out and sees him
The gun rattles
[I]Bam[/I]
And again
[I]Bam[/I]
People stare and scream

The discarded paper left
Beside the victim
Soaked in the blood
Of the innocent

He drops his gun
And sits crosslegged
In the road he waits again
For the police cars to come

And now his concience
Is filled with guilt and terror
He starts to look around
The police are walking now

He starts to write
With his ballpoint pen
He writes a note to say
They'll never get him

He picks again the gun
Once again it sheds it's metal tears
Into his body
And he falls onto the black ground

The police run now to him
Too late the deed is done
For the paper he had written
Is in the blood of guilty...

Ah, that was good, dya like it?
It's about a murderer...[/SIZE]
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the first one is a metaphor for an abusive relationship, "winter" being the actual relationship, & "spring" being the breakup. i was torn between wanting him desperately & knowing that he was bad for me.

Skeletal. For Phil Jan 1997

Why is it that winter speaks
to the world in such low cold tones,
with his pale blue stares that
pierce my warm heart like
his icicle fingers? Spring
looms terribly in the distance,
miles away from frightening him off.
And though I hate the green he
Scratches from my eyes,
I long for the abusive chill of his breath.

For what purpose, Winter, do you stay?
Is it not enough that you bring death
And setting to each new sunrise,
Inhibiting scavengers and beetles
From feeding on decomposing bodies?
I wait, watching for your exit
And the entrance of Spring,
Terrified that the fleeting cold,
Which preserves morgues and corpses,
Will leave in its place,
The humid, sickly smell of my own decay.
----------------------------------------------------

this one is basically saying that we must oversome the horrors in the world we live in, rise up, & become stronger b/c of it. DeathKnight, this one's for you!

Meditation. for the USRs 6/98

In my disgust I have closed myself?
I wrap my wings of anger
Tightly around my body,
Tighter around my soul,
Frantic that the world
Should not seep through any spaces
Between each fringe of feather.
Contaminated, but still White as Snow,
I turn from the world?s ways,
My face pointing to the East,
Breathing in its coolness.
I cannot explain why I have been chosen
To lead this complex life,
To know what I have come to know,
To stand unshadowed in the face
Of my own self-loathing
& conquer it day by day.
I will not sit idle while I destroy
My own self-respect,
While I let the world &
Ignorance & inclinations break me.
I will raise my eyes to the sun
& they will be wide open to its brilliance.

---Deborah Macaiodh [EMAIL=ruca_1488@yahoo.com]ruca_1488@yahoo.com[/EMAIL]
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[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Transtic Nerve [/i]
[B]

Wow..... thank you.... seriously... no one's ever said that.

That was my first, and only poem I've written so far... I'm thinking of writing another but the time just hasn't come by yet... perhaps I will write another soon. Thank you though :) [/B][/QUOTE]

[SIZE=1]Why thank me? That poem was just... so amazing, it shows in you.[/SIZE]
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[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Lady Macaiodh [/i]
[B]this one is basically saying that we must oversome the horrors in the world we live in, rise up, & become stronger b/c of it. DeathKnight, this one's for you!

Meditation for the USRs 6/98

In my disgust I have closed myself?
I wrap my wings of anger
Tightly around my body,
Tighter around my soul,
Frantic that the world
Should not seep through any spaces
Between each fringe of feather.
Contaminated, but still White as Snow,
I turn from the world?s ways,
My face pointing to the East,
Breathing in its coolness.
I cannot explain why I have been chosen
To lead this complex life,
To know what I have come to know,
To stand unshadowed in the face
Of my own self-loathing
& conquer it day by day.
I will not sit idle while I destroy
My own self-respect,
While I let the world &
Ignorance & inclinations break me.
I will raise my eyes to the sun
& they will be wide open to its brilliance.

---Deborah Macaiodh [/B][/QUOTE]

[color=crimson][b][size=1]Very nice poem[/color][/b][/size]
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[SIZE=1]I don't know guys... I used to write this really scary depressing stuff.... I finally cleaned up my life, and haven't written a single poem since.

So anything I submit now will either be old and depressing or brand-new and unpolished.[/SIZE] :cross:
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[SIZE=1]Ken! That doesn't mean you have to, I was just commenting on how I don't mind and that stardust moans... anyway, thanks. :D[/SIZE]

[SIZE=1]Is my poem kinda your, "thing" Ken? PS.Do you want to be on my Shadow list![/SIZE]
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[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by ShadowGohan [/i]
[B][SIZE=1]Ken! That doesn't mean you have to, I was just commenting on how I don't mind and that stardust moans... anyway, thanks. :D[/SIZE]

[SIZE=1]Is my poem kinda your, "thing" Ken? PS.Do you want to be on my Shadow list![/SIZE] [/B][/QUOTE]

[color=crimson][b][size=1]I like things that are kind of... dark.... and evil... bwahahahahahaha erm...:drunk::therock: heh....

Sure... i'll be on the shadow list....[/color][/b][/size]
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[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by DeathKnight [/i]
[B]

[color=crimson][b][size=1]I like things that are kind of... dark.... and evil... bwahahahahahaha erm...:drunk::therock: heh....

Sure... i'll be on the shadow list....[/color][/b][/size] [/B][/QUOTE]

[SIZE=1]I can write you a story. Bwahahahahaha... ermm...[/SIZE]
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