Writing Night's Moon - Sonnet (poem)

[inti]

Here's a sonnet (14-line ABAB-rhyming shakespearian poem) I wrote for homework the other day. I call it Night's Moon. I hope it's never been written before and I haven't just read it, forgot it, and sub-consciously summoned it to do my will in this assessment piece.
Well, here goes:


[COLOR=DarkSlateBlue]~ Night?s Moon ~

Her all-seeing eye, stares down upon earth,
The Moon?s grace and elegance, shining luminous light,
She watches down on me, sleeping by the hearth,
In the darkness of the night.
Tiny magic diamonds, speck the star-filled sky,
But none compares to my brilliant Moon,
Soaring far up, way up, high.
And I know that when she leaves she?ll be back quite soon.
And at her full perfection, she fills me with glee,
My Moon lights up the night skies,
I look upon her and she on me,
And we hear each other?s grateful sighs.
I see my Moon, so near, yet so very far,
Always guiding, everlasting, planet, face and star.[/COLOR]


And there it is. Any comments?
If you don't quite get the rhyming system, I suggest you read "Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?" by William Shakespeare.

[Guest MangaFreak]

Very creative and intriguing. I loved it. Some what not original because I've heard so manny poems about the moon but what is any more? Every kind of poem imagined and every topic has been used. But I believe it was very... thought provoking. You have the skill of a true poet. You can make it so even if I have just seen the moon, after hearing your poem I want to take a second glance and see the beauty that it holds that my frist look skimmed over. I think you have a real talent. How old are you and how long have you been writing poetry? I think your poem was nicely written and very descriptive. And even if people dont get the riming, poems don't have to rime to still be poems. If you have more I would be glad to hear it(read it).

[White Akita]

Very intriqing indeed asMangafreak said. I like the way you pertray the moon in it. It does make you take a second glance at something so ordinary, yet captivatingly beautiful. I think I would agree with Manga freak on everything they said! I write too, but I don't think I have somethinglike that! Then again no one bothers reading mine. Anyway.....You should continue writing like this.

[inti]

Thanks for your comments guys.
In answer to MangaFreak's questions, I'm 15 and I've only ever written one or two other poems, and they were also for school. The other poems are somewhat grammar-less, as I probably wrote them about 4 years ago when I was required to write poetry.
I wrote this poem in a state of half-consciousness (it was 12:30am), and I'm amazed at the result. I wouldn't recommend that anyone purposefully make themselves barely conscious just to write a poem (most people wouldn't do it anyway, but then there are immitators, and then there's also people like me who do their work at the last minute).
You really think I have the skill of a true poet? I wouldn't say that, I just called it a fluke.
What would you guys say the genre of "Night's Moon" is? I was going to say 'moon', until I realised that 'moon' isn't a genre. If I were to place my sonnet into any particular genre, I'd have to say love/romance.
Since I only wrote it the other day, I can still clearly remember that I was going to write about the girl I like, but decided to put it in code.
Well, I've exhausted any ideas I had on what to type, so I'm going to hide back in the Adventure Arena until someone else posts here.
If I write anything else in the way of poetry, I'll change the topic name and add my poems here.