Writing My Little attempt at original work...

[Minako]

Hello!

Here's a little story/manga concept I'm working on. It's about a 24 year old woman, Wren, and a 25 year old guy, Jamie. I know what you're thinking, [I]"EWW! A romance story!"[/I] But Hark! It isn't.

All I would like you to do is to just read it and tell me what you think, good, or bad.

Thanks!

*The phone number in here is fake. Do not call it.

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It was 2 pm on a drowzy Saturday. The sky was gray, pregnant with rain. Wren was walking around downtown Johannestown, thinking to herself.

[I] I GOTTA find a place to stay..and soon...[/I] she thought until something caught her eye. It was a flyer, and it said:

"ROOMMATE WANTED!
Cheap rent, nice apartment.
See Jamie in 122 or call:
222-2222"

Wren looked up at the building it was attached to. It looked to be roughly 5 stories tall and very old. It sort of looked to be in the style of New England-type buildings.

[I]Meh...Cheap rent, nice apartment, maybe I'll go and see this 'Jamie.'[/I] She thought as she walked up to the doorman.

"Why hello young lady," the doorman said, "What can I do for you?"
"I need to talk to the man in 122. Can you tell me what floor it's on?" Wren asked, seriously.
"Are you here for his flyer?"
She nodded.
"It's on the second floor, third to the left. Hope you get to be his roomate, because you seem to be a nice girl! Take care now."

Wren thanked the man and headed for the stairs.

[I]'A nice girl'...if he knew about some of the things I've done, he wouldn't think I'm so nice...Ah, here it is, 122.[/I]

Wren then knocked on the door loudly, three times. When there was on answer, she did it again. She kept repeating her pattern of three knocks, silence, for what seemed to be an eternity when she heard a groggy voice inside.

"Yeah, Yeah, I'm coming...Jeesh, can't a guy get some peace and quiet for a nap??"

Wren immediately envisioned a fat, sweaty, bald man in a stained muscle-shirt with tacky jewelry. [I]Oh great.[/I]

When the door opened Wren was surprised to find a quite handsome young man, roughly the same age as she. He had blonde hair and blue eyes. Wren was also kind of glad that he just so happened to be shirtless. It was noticeable that he worked out.

"Can I help you?" He said but was awestruck at the sight of Wren. She always seemed to be tough. A "don't mess with me or die" attitude. She had long dark brown hair that went almost to her hips, tied at the end with a black leather string, matching her long leather jacket. She had a maroon shirt underneath, as well as some blue jeans. What really captured Jamie was her eyes, they were ice blue. He had never seen such eyes, and he almost got lost in them until he heard...
"Are you Jamie? The same one in the flyer?" Wren asked.
"Yeah, who wants to know?"
"I would like to be your roommate."
"Oh! Ok, come in, and what's your name?"
"My name's Wren," she replied walking into the apartment.

[I]The ad was right, this is nice.[/I]Wren thought, walking into the first room of the apartment, the living room.

The living room was decorated in a contemporary way, but not so contemporary one wouldn't know where to sit. It had modern-colored furniture and a fully-stocked kitchen, separated by an island. The kitchen had white linoleum floors and light woodwork. The marble countertops where a light gray, and the appliances were steel.

"Wow," Wren said softly.
"Yeah. I get that a lot...SO, why do you want to be MY roommate?" Jamie asked cheerfully.
"Well, I need a place to stay for a while. How much is rent?"
"It's $300 a month."
"Where's my room?"
"Whoah! Wait a minute! 'Where's my room??' How do I know that you're not some psycho-ax murderer that will kill me in my sleep?"
Wren just stared at him.
"Do I REALLY look like an 'ax-murderer'?? Fine, I'll tell you a bit about myself. M name's Wren. I'm 26, and I assure you I will pay my rent on the given date. I don't drink, I don't smoke, but I do like coffee. Strong coffee. Don't ask me where I'm from or anything about my past. And don't even try to pull anything on me because I will gladly break your arm."
Jamie was blank.
"Where's my room?"
Jamie blushed and said, "It's third on the right..."
"Thanks."

Then Wren walked into her fully furnished room.

[I]Whoah[/I]Jamie thought [I]She's definately different.[/I]

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That's it for this "chapter." If anyone wants me to continue, I will.

Please tell me how I can improve!

~Minako