Talon Posted August 5, 2004 Share Posted August 5, 2004 [color=crimson][font=microsoft sans serif]All I have to call my own Are these fallen bloody tears, This pain that won't let me alone, And memories of these evil years. A requiem for deadly dances, A song of long-lost loves and fears, And shed tears of forgotten chances. All I have are these bloody tears. The night air's nocturne of agony, The whisper of promises long past, Lost in a sea of dark ebony. These crimson tears are sure to last. A low dirge sung by midnight crows, The organ preludes the coming plight. Sad wind through the cemetery blows, As ruby drops fall into my sight. All I have to call my own Are these echoing garnet fears. The abyss of being all alone Has torn from me my bloody tears.[/color][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pawn114 Posted August 5, 2004 Share Posted August 5, 2004 Wow... I really like this poem. You managed to revisit the main topic of bloody tears a few times, without making it seem to much, as i have seen before. The use of words not commonly found in the average poem that I have seen enhances it. I loved the way the overall poem flowed, and I actually cant find any problems right now. Very spiffy poem indeed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezekiel Posted August 5, 2004 Share Posted August 5, 2004 [COLOR=SlateGray]Wow, that peom really is great. Like I said, I can't write stuff like that but it really was amazing. Very emotional and it seemed to just flow perfectly. Very well done.[/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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