Discuss Guilty Gear: Rebirth Of Ourtrage- too long?

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This is all of the need to know info, along with the story:

[COLOR=Darkred][size=1][i]'When science goes to far, and the wolrd teeters on the edge of distruction, who do we blame? We can only blame ourselves.'[/i]


[b] [Center]Guilty Gear: Rebirth of Outrage[/center][/b]


[b][u]Magical Science[/b][/u]

In the early part of the 21st century, scientists discovered a new source of power, which promised unlimited, pollution-free energy for all. It was labeled ‘magic.’ There were four types of this magic, based off of the primal elements of nature: Fire, Lightning, Wind, and Water. These were the elements officially recognized as being part of Magical Science. However, there was a fifth element, the element ‘Ki.’ Very few people had the ability to use it, most of who were of Asian descent. The abilities and powers of Ki cannot be duplicated or harnessed by machine; so while Ki is one of the types of magic, it is technically not part of Magical Science.

In the years after its discovery, Magical Science quickly proliferated, becoming the ultimate technology. The old technology—the crude machines that raped the earth and threatened to turn humans into nothing more than fleshy cogs in a giant machine—was banned by most of the world, labeled as ‘Blacktech.’ However, Magical Science would end up unleashing a horror upon the world that eclipsed anything ‘Blacktech’ had done.

[b][u] Gear Project[/b][/u]

The original purpose of the Gear Project is unknown, lost in the fog of war and the shadows of time. These Gears were supposed to be a means to further evolution—in that they are not themselves a separate species, but an altered one. An existing being can be transformed into a Gear by binding Magic to its DNA, or those Gears can be created from scratch. Gears can be created from any animals, be they lions, whales, dogs... or humans.

In 2016, the first true Gear was created. A scientist by the name of Dr. Frederick Angheiz, an American, was turned into the prototype Gear. Afterwards, the Gear Project mysteriously shut down, its researchers and facilities vanishing overnight. The now-Gear Frederick disappeared, and his exact fate is unknown (at least as far as official records go). The Gear modifications imbued Frederick with enormous, seemingly infinite power, as well as stopping his aging process.

However, shortly after Frederick’s disappearance, stories began to circulate about an extremely powerful and skilled bounty hunter who seemed to appear from nowhere, as suddenly as Frederick had vanished. And all thoughts of Gears were dispersed in the silence following the Project.

[b][u] Outrage[/b][/u]

Among the head scientists on the Gear Project was a man known only by the name “That Man.” In 2073, Frederick received word that the United States of America was restarting the Gear Project, in secret, headed by “That Man.”

When Frederick learned of the reborn Gear Project, he began work on a massive Anti-Gear weapon: the Outrage. The only person who knows what the Outrage is truly capable of, however, is Frederick himself; its creator has been the one person to see it in its true form. The Outrage was created in eight separate parts, the Jinki. Each of these Jinki, or tools, was designed to amplify the magical powers the user possessed.

The eight Jinki are:

Fuuraiken (Thunderseal Sword—Thunder Element) [Sword]
Fuuenken (Fireseal Sword—Fire Element) [Sword]
Zessen (Stopping Fans—Wind Element) [Fans]
Senga (Flashing Tooth—Water Element) [Sword]
Ekitoku (Increasing Fervor—Fire Element) [Battleaxe]
Kojouhaku (White on the Lake—Water Element) [Trident]
Senhoshiken (Thousand-Star Sword—Wind Element) [Sword]
Getsu no Kuroi (Black of Moon—Thunder Element) [Whip]

However, the Outrage’s true potential is unknown, as it has never been used in its ultimate form, save once...

[b][u] Justice[/b][/u]

The purpose of the new Gear Project was different than that of the original. This time, the purpose of Gears was not to provide a means of furthering evolution—but to act as bioweapons. In order to ensure that the Gears would follow orders, they were designed to have no free will, to run on instinct, to be completely obedient.

The production model Gears—those that were mass-produced under the program—were successes in this regard. They would obey without question, not caring about themselves or about any aspect of life other than fighting. However, they were just production models, all the same, all inferior to the Perfect Gear that had come before them.

This Gear was named Justice. As the first True Gear, Justice possessed more power than practically all the rest of the mass-produced models combined. The power of Type 01, as she was code-named, was absolute. Yet Justice was different from the mindless puppets that came after in more ways than sheer power. Whether this was intentional on the part of “That Man” who created her, or whether it evolved within her naturally is unknown, but it is a fact that Justice came to possess free will.

She was the first Commander Gear, the most powerful. The Command-Type Gears would be able to give the lesser Gears around them some semblance of free will, to direct their power towards certain ends. Through her power, Justice transformed some of the more powerful non-production models into Sub-commanders. They too had a form of free will and could control the many lesser models, yet they were but relays in a chain. Justice had the power to create them all, and she had the power to control and override them all. Without the Sub-commander Gears, normal Gears would relapse into their obedient state; without Justice, the entire chain would collapse.

Whether Frederick knew of Justice—more specifically what she was capable of—or not is also unknown. It is clear that Frederick, wielding the Outrage, attacked the research facility in an attempt to kill “That Man.” The Outrage’s one and only use was here, where it delivered a powerful, near-fatal wound to the newly born Justice.

The attack failed, and the Outrage was split into the eight Jinki once more, which came under the custody of the United Nations. Yet Justice did not escape unscathed. The immensely powerful attack weakened her so badly that she only survived through the aid of a powerful, mechanical battle-suit, which she wore from that point on.

That battle-suit would become a feared and hated image in the mind of humanity from then on. Justice rallied all the Gears that had been created, and led them in rebellion against humanity. And thus began one of the darkest periods in human history—the Crusades.

[b][u]Crusade[/b][/u]

In the year 2074, Justice’s forces struck quickly and powerfully, unleashing their might upon an unsuspecting world. Their first act of war was to attack the island nation of Japan. Those few who witnessed the carnage and survived to tell the tale were forever scarred, unable to put those horrible images into words. Japan was all but obliterated. The cities fell to the might of the Gear onslaught, crumbling into burning rubble. The few Japanese survivors were placed in camps, to prevent the extinction of their race—which had been all but wiped out already.

That initial, crushing attack will always be remembered as the most vicious of the Crusades. Humanity was unprepared for the tide of war, and they were overwhelmed. Yet the humans refused to succumb without a fight. Resistance sprang up, eventually forming cohesive groups that warred against the Gears.

By far, the most famous of these groups is the Sacred Order of Holy Knights. It was founded in 2113 by the legendary blademaster Kliff Undersn, who is the only non-Asian to fully master the use of Ki. At a young age, he had been saved from a Gear attack by an amazingly skilled anti-Gear bounty hunter. Kliff resolved that he would one day save people in need like the mysterious bounty hunter had done for him. So he created the Sacred Order to fight the Gears. And the Crusade continued, a cycle of destruction.

No one was left untouched by the sorrow of the great war. Kliff Undersn’s stepson, the Holy Knight Tesu Undersn, was captured during a raid... he was never heard from again. Yet the now-aged swordsman refused to let the despair overwhelm him. The war raged on...

It was the year 2174. If there was good news for the human side, it was the presence of two new powerful warriors in the Sacred Order. One was the young yet brilliant swordsman Ky Kiske, the Frenchman who even at the young age of 14 was appointed as Kliff’s second-in-command. The other was the enigmatic, taciturn former bounty hunter who went by the name Sol Badguy.

[b][u]Ky and Sol[/b][/u]

If there was one thing that the young Frenchman despised about Sol Badguy, it was his nonchalance. Ky himself trained and studied the use of magic for hours upon end each day; it was through these rigorous exercises and his own considerable talent that he managed to attain his impressive power in battle. The blond teenager was highly charismatic and intelligent, a master strategist—those qualities, along with his loyalty and morality, were what caused Kliff to select him as his successor.

While Sol was no less intelligent than Ky, he simply didn’t seem to give a damn. The bounty hunter frequently bordered on insubordination, rarely following orders. He never trained, never sought to increase his power. But what infuriated Ky Kiske more than anything else—even though Sol never studied nor trained, even though Ky worked daily to become a better fighter... Sol was always more powerful. Whenever the two fought, Sol would inevitably end up walking away, leaving a defeated Ky on the ground. Sol never took him seriously, which caused Ky’s rage to build.

Since it was the most official faction representing humanity in the Crusades, the United Nations gave the Sacred Order two of the treasured Jinki—the Fuuenken and the Fuuraiken. Kliff Undersn wielded the Thunderseal until his retirement as the head of the Holy Knights. The ancient swordsman received the massive Dragonslayer blade, and passed the Fuuraiken as well as the leadership of the Sacred Order to the then-16-year-old Ky Kiske.

Shortly after the leadership passed to Ky, a fight between Sol and the Frenchman escalated past what was considered normal for a training duel. That night, Sol Badguy left the Sacred Order, taking the treasured Fuuenken with him.

Sol Badguy

The theft was not a theft per se, however. Sol Badguy was merely stealing back what was rightfully his property in the first place. Shortly after his initial transformation into a Gear, the scientist Frederick took to wearing a band on his head. This band contained a device known as a Gear Cell, which suppressed Frederick’s Gear form, allowing him to remain in a human state. It also sealed away the vast majority of his power, yet he was still far beyond any other, even in his sealed state.

Sometime after the beginning of the Crusades, Frederick took on the name Sol Badguy, and devoted his life to the hunting down and killing of all Gears. It was he who had saved the young Kliff Undersn, and it was he who had been recruited by the same Kliff Undersn into the Sacred Order. With the Fireseal Blade, which he himself had created in the first place, Sol Badguy left the Holy Knights.

[b][u] The Fall of Cliff: Testament[/b][/u]

One of the problems with the Gear forces, as Justice saw, was that they lacked true free will. The Gears took orders from the Sub-Commanders, who in turn took their orders from Justice herself. If any major change were to take place in a battle plan, it would have to come directly from Type 01. While the Gears had the advantage in terms of sheer battle power, this lack of versatility was one of their biggest weaknesses—one that led to several defeats.

To remedy this, Justice decided to create a new class of Sub-Commander Gear. These Gears were either created from humans who had been captured, or were created using genetic data gathered from corpses of fallen warriors. These Gear/human hybrids had power far greater than that of the normal Sub-Commanders, as well as possessing greater free will than any other Gear save Justice herself.

If there were a flaw in this plan, it became readily evident. Several of the new hybrids rebelled, breaking off from Justice’s forces and forming their own faction. The ultimate goal of these rogue Gears was the destruction of Justice, yet they were not averse to attacking humans—and humanity rarely held back, even against the Gears not allied with Justice.

While the presence of this new faction troubled Justice slightly, the Queen of Gears still had many of this new breed of Sub-Commander Gear on her side. One of which, her right-hand man, had been created from the captured Holy Knight Tesu Undersn—Kliff’s son. This new Gear, who went by the name of Testament, became almost as feared as Justice herself.

When rumors of Testament reached the ear of the ancient blademaster, Kliff knew that he had to stop what had become of his beloved adopted son. Ky Kiske found out about what Kliff was planning to do, and set off to assist his former master in any way possible. Although he was utterly unconcerned with either Ky, Kliff, or Testament, Sol Badguy realized that this was the best time to strike at Type 01. And so, the five warriors—Ky Kiske, Kliff Undersn, Testament, Sol Badguy, and Justice—converged on an ancient battlefield.

[b][u] The Fall of Cliff: Grave [/b][/u]

What purpose the monument served in the days when Japan was a living country is now unknown. After Justice’s forces swept through the city of Kyoto in that initial onslaught, however, its purpose changed. It became a tomb. The endless stairs that climbed up to the scorched sky were still stained with blood, were still scarred from the battles that had taken place there. Nothing lived in that godforsaken path to hell, which made it a fitting place to die.

It was there that Kliff Undersn, the strongest warrior humanity has ever known, met his adopted son in combat. Testament was Justice’s second-in-command, and had every ounce of the power that would be expected as such. The battle was fierce, forcing both parties to call upon every ounce of their courage and strength.

Forces that cannot be explained with mere words shook the sepulcher. The battle raged for the better part of a day, with neither of the two gaining the upper hand. However, in the end, even the might of Testament succumbed to the power that Kliff held within. The powerful Gear fell before the man who had been his father... and yet, Kliff spared his life.

The aged warrior had not seen the desire for humanity’s destruction on Testament’s face. A burning pain lurked within the young Gear, the power of Justice’s command. Rather than kill his adopted son, Kliff turned his sights on Type 01 herself, who had been watching the entire battle from the top of those battle-scarred stairs.

Kliff and Justice had fought sixteen times over the course of the Crusades. They were equally matched in power. However, the master swordsman was weakened from his fight against Testament...

There, upon the tomb that led to the scorched skies of heaven, among the ruins that were once a city of hundreds of thousands... Kliff Undersn fell.

[b][u]Meet Again[/b][/u]

Maddened with grief over the loss of his mentor, the young Ky Kiske charged Justice, yet even the brilliantly skilled swordsman was no match for the Queen of Gears. Ky’s final, desperate, Ride the Lightning was interrupted by a powerful energy blast from Type 01, and the young knight was downed. Yet the current that young Kiske had channeled had shorted out the battle suit that Justice had worn—and the control along with it.

Before Justice could kill the unconscious human, though, she was stopped by a figure from the past: Sol Badguy. Then, she shed the armor in which she had been trapped in for a century, and the Angel of Death spread her wings. The full-power Justice was easily able to defeat the Corrupted Flame, however, as the bounty hunter knelt at her feet, Type 01 realized that his power, too, was sealed. With a swift blast of electricity, Justice broke the Gear Cell on Sol Badguy’s forehead, releasing the Perfect Flame once more…

Type 01 met her prototype on the battlefield. After an eternity of combat, the Angel of Death was victorious over her demonic counterpart. Yet before she could finish the job and kill Sol, she was interrupted by a stranger, an elegantly dressed man smoking a pipe. The man, calling himself “nightwalker,” halted all of Justice’s attempts to wound him, yet did not retaliate. He informed Justice that this was not the final battlefield, and it was not the final confrontation between Alpha and Omega yet. Justice retreated from the Grave.

Likewise, Sol staggered to his feet, intending to kill the “nightwalker.” However, the old man retreated, leaving Sol with a simple haiku.

The next to awake was the knight Ky Kiske, who had watched the entire fight from a semi-conscious haze… realizing that Sol was a Gear, he climbed to his feet, lurching at the wounded Sol, intending to kill him. Even in his weak state, Sol was able to defend himself from the wounded Ky. Sol left the young boy with the message that he alone was the hope of humanity. He alone was the hope of the world… and then Sol left, and Ky promptly passed out.

[b][u]Aftermath: Dizzy[/b][/u]

When Ky Kiske awoke, there was no one around him. There was nothing living around him, and there was nothing dead around him. Even the body of Kliff Undersn had mysteriously vanished. Despairing, Ky managed to stagger back to the world of the living...

Justice, under the cover of the fog of war, had retrieved the unconscious body of Testament, as well as the corpse of humanity’s greatest warrior. She returned to her hidden sanctuary, where she proceeded to nurse her own wounds as well as those of her second-in-command. Justice constructed a new armor based upon the one she had previously shedded, except without incorporating the Gear Cell into the design.

She harvested genetic material from the body of Kliff Undersn, and used that material—combined with some of her own DNA—to create another Sub-Commander Gear. This one, unlike all the others, contained some of Justice herself. So as one might expect, the new Gear was impossibly more powerful than any other—save Justice herself. This, Justice’s ‘daughter,’ also had true free will. She was not merely a Sub-Commander, she was, like Justice, a true Command-Type Gear.

Justice named this new creation Dizzy. Dizzy’s first act was an attack on the most heavily defended structure in the world—the United Nations. The sight of the winged Gear shrugging off attacks that would have killed practically anything alive will forever be burned into the minds of those who survived.

In that attack, the six Jinki still in the possession of the United Nations were lost. They were scattered across the globe. Thankfully, none of them fell into the hands of the Gear forces... Ky Kiske returned with the Fuuraiken and the Fuuenken that Sol Badguy had left behind. They are absolutely necessary to ensure the survival of mankind.

[b][u]Rebirth of Outrage[/b][/u]
Ky and Dizzy stood face to face, their glares swords of Justice and Hope. They bowed their heads in battle, and they fought. Lightning flashed in the abandoned amusment park, and that night, Dizzy fell. She revealed her past, how she figured her own free will out, and escaped her 'mother' Justice. He had hid from humanity and Gears alike, a half blood. Ky forgave Dizzy, and they traveled back together.

Now, Justice wants Outrage for her self, so she must find Fuurakien an Fuuenken and once again, recreate Outrage to end humans.[/COLOR][/size][color=royalblue][size=1]

Jeez, still here? This is why I haven't been posting much lately, so sorry. But, now for the sign ups.

Name:
Age:
Gender:
Nationality:
Human or Gear:
Faction:
Personality:
Physical Description: pic or good discription
Weapon of Choice: Any weapon but projectiles
Innate Magical Element (Fire, Water, Wind, Lightning):
Preferred Jinki (Human only): One of the ones listed
Bio: Explan in detal what happened to your character.

Ok, PM me if you wish to be a premade character. I hope many people join! I'll post my sign up somtime later.

EDIT: O_O I forgot to list the Factions...

Zepp

There are some who believed that Blacktech was not innately harmful. With the outlawing of that technology, those people founded the floating continent of Zepp, the one place in the world where Blacktech is still used. They maintain a mostly friendly relationship with the planet below, yet are not averse to looking out for their own interests.

The leaders of Zepp are President Gabriel and his student, the massive warrior Potemkin. Formerly a slave soldier, Potemkin’s incredible strength was instrumental in allowing the group led by Gabriel to overthrow the previous dictatorship of Zepp.

Standing with Justice: Potemkin has left, so they need not worry about joining Justice. Currently sided with Jusice.

The Jellyfish Pirates

When his father was killed by a Gear when Johnny was a young boy, the child swore that he would take care of any orphans, he would ease the pain of those who suffered. As an adult, Johnny founded the Jellyfish Air Pirates, a rather infamous criminal organization. Yet the label of ‘criminal’ is far too harsh—as Johnny and his crew have rarely been known to kill, and even then only when necessary. Johnny takes care of any female orphans the war has produced...

The leader of the Jellyfish is a man who simply goes by the name Johnny. One of the last few masters of Iaijitsu swordfighting, Johnny sees himself as a chivalrous pirate. It has been said that he is a womanizer, yet his loyalty to his crew is unsurpassed.

Standing with Justice: Currently trying to kill Justice
The Assassins' Syndicate

As the name indicates, it is a syndicate of assassins. It was founded by Slayer centuries ago, and continues to this day. Its current leaders are Zato-1, and Venom. Zato-1 is a man who traded his sight for the power to control shadows—one of the Forbidden Magics. However, the shadowbeast—named Eddie—threatens to overwhelm his body and to take it for its own. Zato’s right-hand-man is a British assassin by the name of Venom. After Zato disappeared, Venom took over, intending to hold the Syndicate together in Zato’s name no matter what.

Standing with Justice: They are supporting and helping Justice

The Sacred Order of Holy Knights

The most famous of all the factions, they have been the ones on the front line against the Gears since the beginning of the Crusades. The warriors of the Sacred Order have few equals among the ranks of humanity. They are currently led by the French swordsman Ky Kiske. After the fight against Justice, Ky’s injuries should prevent him from fighting himself… but he fights anyway. He is a brilliant commander, charismatic and well-liked. He normally wields the Fuuraiken, but in his current state, he is looking to relinquish it to anyone who he feels is skilled enough to wield it.

Standing with Justice: Currently trying to kill Justice

Renegade Gears

Composed of the Sub-Commanders who went rogue and betrayed Justice (as well as any other Gears that joined them) this group has no affiliation either with humanity or with the forces of Justice. They approached Sol Badguy after the fight with Justice, offering him a chance to join them. Sol reluctantly joined, realizing that they would be able to get him closer to Justice than any of the human factions would. He is their current leader...

Standing with Justice: Currently trying to kill Justice.
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Is it too long that no one else will join? I've had one person sign up, but I just think it's too long. I don't know if I could shorten it either... help please?

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[DeadSeraphim]

[COLOR=Indigo][FONT=Arial][SIZE=1]Yes. It's too long. There's not much more that can be said. Try trimming off superfluous information if/when you decide to post it again. I mean, I'm not usually lazy when it comes to reading tuff, but the sheer wealth of information in that one post alone made me balk.

So yeah. Trim it. If you want signups, that is.[/SIZE][/FONT][/COLOR]