naota Posted August 16, 2004 Share Posted August 16, 2004 Manga Title:Soul Crystal (also give me a break this is the first manga I am trying to think up.) How it will start: The Story:In the year 3011 where monsters roam a planet called kaizen. A crystal with great power was made so the person who weilds it can protect civilians from these monsters such as zombie warriors etc.But it also has the power to give the weilder great abilities and strength so if it falls into the wrong hands the world can be destroyed.This crystal was protected by a sorcerer named Sheila.Untill a team of villians named "Dark Watch" ganged up on her so she used her magic to turn the crystals into little orbs.Seven of them to be excact.She survived from the dark watch and she goes to her kingdom.Her king see's her bruised from battle.The king quickly gets her medical attention.Then she tells the king what happened.The king say's we must destroy the dark watch!Then the sorcerer sends a "awakening crystal" that she has stored in her mind (awakening crystal=has the power to awaken the power within.) to someone pure hearted but it will take time. 5 years later --In Leivor city-- A man named Lionel was in his daily Training. Lionel:*mumbling* Come on training is almost over is almost over..... Training finished and Lionel flew out of the "kaitesu training room". Lionel:Finally,I am tired. Narrarator:But what he didn't know was that awakening crystal was coming after him. Lionel:I can't wait to go.... Once he gets onto the sidewalk.The awakening crystal hits him and gets he get knocked on the floor landing on his head.The crystal then dissolves inside him. Civilians:"ohh.......someone call a ambulance........what happened to him?" Then he gets to the hospital and gets glue stich (just like stitches you just squirt it over the cut and it will work like stiches.) He wakes up. Lionel:What happened? Doctor:You just got knocked out!Your lucky to be alive! Lionel:Ohh yeah I got hit by that thingiemagig..... Doctor:yeah pretty much... Doctor & Lionel:Ok bye. Narrarator:The dark watch were stalking him.Now they are going to make a increase in monsters to find him dead! Lionel walks out of the hospital.And see's atleast 20 monsters named "neo nakugiki" waiting to strike him. Lionel:What the hell!? He hears a mysterious voice Unknown voice:You now have great power.Put all your might into you hand then point it to the middle of the mob. Lionel:Why should I? unknown voice:Just do it or just get killed A explosion of dark energy killed atleast half of them.(came from Lionel) unknown voice:Try to figure out the rest of your skills yourself. Then with a quick motion of his hands he destroyed the other half of the mob. Lionel:I can get used to this. unknown voice:Sure yeah whatever.Just remember to keep practicing those attacks so they will get stronger so the new monsters won't be a problem! Lionel:Sure,sure.....How did I get these orbs in my hands though.Did that happen when I got hit and knocked out? Lionel:HELLO,ANSWER ME!!!! Lionel:Ohh well,time to go home and get some rest like I was going to do before I got knocked out. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ::Stuff To Know:: -Kaitesu is a new style of fighting.The word I just thought up off the top of my head. -neo nakugiki a name I just thought up randomly.It is supposed to be a monster. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- So anything you have to say,say it!Because I really need suggestions.I wanna get better at this.I am good at drawing but not this so I wanna improve.This is probably bad though.I have a bad imagination.Also sorry for any spelling mistakes I tried to do this very quickly! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest tzen Posted August 17, 2004 Share Posted August 17, 2004 hey it sounds like youve got it all figured out... yet.... not to be mean.. but that storry really fitts in to a game more than a manga :( yet sure it could turn out great? but i think that things around him like when he gets the orb and all that.. its TO fast ! you need to go slower... so it takes a wile for him to get it.. and make it so that the dark watch dosent know that its him that has got it... and let him figure out by misstake that he got the power, like he points at something and it goes kaboom! :rolleyes: and let the dark watch only know what city the orb is in.. so they have tosend in lots of monsters in the city so they can capture it and find out who has the orb, and when the kid tries to escape the city maybe with some friends? and the dark watch catches one of his friends and he gets so angry couse they beat the friend up.. that he just explode them to smitherines.... and when they get out of the city .. let him hear the mysterius voice in a dream ( to make it more mystical) but the voice wont tell him much .. just that he has to go to a place to find out mor... like a old ruin were the orbs were firstly made?? some stuff like that ok??? if it sounds good to u? :eek: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
naota Posted August 17, 2004 Author Share Posted August 17, 2004 That sounds great man!And it fits a game more than a manga probably because its my first attemp and I have little imagination :laugh: Anyway what you said was great.And instead of beating up I think the friend being dead will make him much more angrier.Thanks for the advice.Its too bad my scanner doesn't work :mad: or I would be posting character images Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest tzen Posted August 18, 2004 Share Posted August 18, 2004 [quote name='Deimos']That sounds great man!And it fits a game more than a manga probably because its my first attemp and I have little imagination :laugh: Anyway what you said was great.And instead of beating up I think the friend being dead will make him much more angrier.Thanks for the advice.Its too bad my scanner doesn't work :mad: or I would be posting character images[/quote] hehe .... well it sound great.. i also draw.. just that the drawing suck and the ideas are good :rotflmao: well if its just anything els ill gladly help .... ( who nows if the manga becoms famous the game develepors will be extatic for the storry :tasty: ) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
naota Posted August 18, 2004 Author Share Posted August 18, 2004 Lol,imagine if it did become famous. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest tzen Posted August 18, 2004 Share Posted August 18, 2004 [quote name='Deimos']Lol,imagine if it did become famous.[/quote] hehe .... well then i expect my name in the thank you speech :rotflmao: hehe ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
naota Posted August 18, 2004 Author Share Posted August 18, 2004 I would probably thank me,myself, and my clone.[I][SIZE=1]if your lucky I might say you[/SIZE][/I] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
naota Posted August 18, 2004 Author Share Posted August 18, 2004 Also isn't someone supposed to lock this topic? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest tzen Posted August 18, 2004 Share Posted August 18, 2004 [quote name='Deimos]I would probably thank me,myself, and my clone.[I][SIZE=1]if your lucky I might say you[/SIZE'][/I][/quote] !!! YOU WILL THANK ME PITYFULL HUMAN! :devil: :flaming: :demon: :rolleyes: hehe why is some one supposed to lock this??? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
naota Posted August 18, 2004 Author Share Posted August 18, 2004 Because this topid is pretty much done.I got the answer I wanted.So there is no use for this topic anymore. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest tzen Posted August 18, 2004 Share Posted August 18, 2004 [quote name='Deimos']Because this topid is pretty much done.I got the answer I wanted.So there is no use for this topic anymore.[/quote] course it should still be here.. i mean... u might need more help soon? or stuff like that ?? :eek: hehehe...... and its a god topic to talk about nothing like this somtimes.... :tasty: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HitokiriBanzai Posted August 19, 2004 Share Posted August 19, 2004 Ahh, dude, not to be rude but what's up w/ the planet named "shounen"? Is it a planet only for guys? Except for that, sounds kinda interesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
naota Posted August 19, 2004 Author Share Posted August 19, 2004 Man I don't even know what a shounen is I just got it from shonen jump.Tell me what is a shounen? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest tzen Posted August 19, 2004 Share Posted August 19, 2004 [quote name='Deimos']Man I don't even know what a shounen is I just got it from shonen jump.Tell me what is a shounen?[/quote] its manga for boys =p Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
naota Posted August 19, 2004 Author Share Posted August 19, 2004 Yeah I definently am going to change the name then. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kei Posted August 19, 2004 Share Posted August 19, 2004 [color=darkblue]... Honestly, people. It is [i]not[/i] that hard to at least try and put a decent amount of effort into your posting. This thread is complete spam. Only one or two posts in this [i]entire thing[/i] are worth keeping. And I haven't even started on the other rule violations (i.e. double posting, Deimos). I may come off as being a [enter your choice of word here], but you lot don't even seem to be trying. We [i]do[/i] have a set of standards here at OB, and it would be wise of you all to at least try to reach them if you want to stick around. I humbly refer you to the Rules and Regulations page located in the left hand navigation bar. Thread Closed[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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