Discuss Quest of Souls

[Box Hoy]

For the past couple of months I haven't been able to come up with some really genuine idea's for new RPG's. But today I decided to brainstorm a bit and I came up with an idea I think might get the attention of people in the Arena.

Here's my brainstorm:
-Unique demons. Graphic and horrific looking
-Floating chain of island hovering over ocean
-Ocean sprouts enormous trees that are also populated like floating islands
-Demons ravage the world of trees in search of Aaj spheres
- Aaj changes soul attributes and makes beings better in many area’s.
- Aaj is also capable of being taken from others souls when they die
- When someone collects all the Aaj they are unstoppable
- Aaj is created when a being becomes one year old.
- Hero’s name is Shea
- Shea’s family and town is destroyed by the demons and they make of with powerful Aaj
- Shea sets off after them but not before he meets a traveling order of warriors who all have some connection to the demons.
- The Order’s name is Hadan named after the founder who died fighting a dark and mysterious demon.
- World is called Mewn
- Title is called "Quest of Souls"

So here's my questions:
1: Anything needing to be changed?
2: Anything that can be added?
3: Anything that needs to be disposed of?

Ciao

[DeadSeraphim]

[COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial]It seems completely centred around one guy at this point... there is no mention of what part the Hadan will play in the RP, or if he meets other people beside the Hadan or anything. Just another revenge plot, with a twist, heh.

Also... You say Aaj is created by one year olds... then you say to become all powerful one must collect all the Aaj. BUT Aaj can only be taken from the dead. Therefore, for someone to become rule of Mewn, they have to kill everyone, or at least everyone a year old or older. Lord of nothing or lord of the babies. Hardly makes it seem worth it.[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR]

[Box Hoy]

Yeah. It was really really late when I came up with this Aaj idea. Anyway. The Hadan consists of people who want to protect the people of Mewn and seek revenge upon the demons for something they've done to their life.
Anyhoo. I'll think up someway for the Aaj to be changed so that whoever possesses an Aaj sphere can give it to another. I think I'll dump the idea of the 1 year old thing totally. That way Aaj is a limited "resource" and you have to collect all the existing spheres to be unbeatable.
Doing this means you don't have to kill anyone (including babies)
If anyone has an idea for the Hadan so it's more detailed, please tell your idea's.