Writing Rap lyrics: My song - Tribute To A Girl [E]

[Kayin Cloud]

I wrote this a while back...the chorus is singing the rest is rap...give me some comments

V1
I remember the first time that I saw your face
I knew no one in this world could ever take your place
Girl you got such a beautiful smile
You have a smile that can be seen for miles
I don't think I could live without you
But I just wouldn't wanna you know that's true
This what I'd say about that girl
That I'd want to stay in my world

I can't say this to you even if I try
If you can't tell, well I'm a shy guy
Could you just help me spit it out
About what you say girl I have some doubts
How long do you think it'll last
Should we start off slow before we move fast
I love you ever so deeply in my heart
I'd ask you out but don't know where to start
(C1 rptx2)

C1
Girl you can call me at anytime
I can listen to you talk or I can speak rhyme
Baby just tell what's on your mind
The more that we talk the more we spend time

V2
This could take while for me to get to you
The only thing I want now is to be witchu
You're the main goal that I must achieve
I only love you that's what you can't believe
I may not look the best or be the best dressed
But that's all you think about and it's gettin me stressed
What can I do to get through to you
That you're the one I need and I'm the one for you

I'm in so much pain and you can't see that
When I see you at school girl where's the love at
Your hair so beautiful your eyes like pools
But that isn't the reason that I love you
There's more to you than looks alone
Like the sound of your when we talk on the phone
There has never been a doubt in my mind
I wanna be together witchu for all time
(C1 rptx2)

I've got so much more I have to say
I'm only tryin to tell you in the best way
I go insane when I think about you
It's so hard to go on a day without you
You make me feel ways no one's made me feel before
It's hard to tell when I come or go anymore
I'd like to be witchu but outside of class
Every other man's eyes just locked onto your....

Baby girl I think you know what I mean
I don't like to be rude cause that ain't the scheme
I want you to love me even if you ain't wit me
As long as I love you you'll always be my queen
You might think that I'm just so nervous
But no one else on this world's surface is-
as beautiful as you are or than you'll ever be
I love you girl, that's what I want you to see
(C1)

C2
Girl you know I that I love you so
And that I'll never ever let you go
I love you my baby more than you'll never know
If we love each other then that love will grow


This wasn't written for any girl in particular either...I've never been in a relationship irl