Manga Manga idea

[Albel the Wicked]

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I'm a new member. I just barely registered like, five minutes ago. But I have an idea for a manga series and when I told it to my friend, he thought that it was pretty cool. The name of the manga is called, Double Edge. It's about a boy named Miroshi, who lives in the modern day world, but his city gets attacked by a demon named Misenki.(hence my name) Now he's in a new dimension where there's just swords, magic, and demons. A little after he arrives his soul gets shattered into pieces and are scattered throughout the land. Since he has no soul he can't feel any emotion, but for every little bit of his soul that he gets back, he can feel a new emotion. His soul is very important, which is why Misneki is collecting pieces of Miroshi's soul too. Miroshi is the decendent of a great warrior who forged the great blade known as the Double Edge. Only a decendent with pure and good intentions can recieve the blade. BUT, once it is in the real world, anyone is free to use it. Along the way Miroshi gets some traveling companions. Hashuma, the old Otagian guard, who was decieved by his master. Mara, the swordsman who eventually falls in love with Miroshi. Yutarin, the young mage with the horrible dragons curse. Kikida, the young girl monk that tries to do her best to help her friends. Well like I was saying, Yutarin has the horrible Dragon's curse with each time that it is set off, he becomes a more powerful creature and loses more control he has over it. Luckily, he has a band that can control it at a certain stage. At least until halfway through season on when Misneki activates it to it's full potential.

Whew, that's about enough. That is just a brief explanation of season one.

[naota]

Hmmm...........sounds interesting.How does Miroshi's soul get shattered into peices?
Lol, this also reminds me of inuyasha for some reason.Not to much but it kind of reminds me of it.Yutarin is like Miroku and stuff............So back to the idea,is there some special way the demon came to the modern day world.Also why did he attack Miroshi is Miroshi special for some reason?

::Edit::
-You know I actually find this intresting! :eek: If you change the dragon curse thing into a different curse you can think of it would be better,because then they would think it is less like Inuyasha.Then just put some more detail into the story and this can actually be great!

[Guest tzen]

[QUOTE=Deimos]Hmmm...........sounds interesting.How does Miroshi's soul get shattered into peices?
Lol, this also reminds me of inuyasha for some reason.Not to much but it kind of reminds me of it.Yutarin is like Miroku and stuff............So back to the idea,is there some special way the demon came to the modern day world.Also why did he attack Miroshi is Miroshi special for some reason?[/QUOTE]


hehe hia deimos! youre right some way it reminds me to about inuyasha... but whatever.. hey u got some pictures to show of youre manga idea?? how is the demon gonna look like?? how will miroshi find his soul?? what will it look like... if u think about it it might be some glitches in the storry line.. but i sounds good... but as said above why did the demon attack miroshi? under his journey will he find some more friends with strong backrounds?? i just thought if u want me.. i could help out with the storry? im kinda good at storries... but not at drawing =) hehe

[AzureWolf]

[QUOTE=Deimos]Hmmm...........sounds interesting.How does Miroshi's soul get shattered into peices?
Lol, this also reminds me of inuyasha for some reason.Not to much but it kind of reminds me of it.Yutarin is like Miroku and stuff............So back to the idea,is there some special way the demon came to the modern day world.Also why did he attack Miroshi is Miroshi special for some reason?[/QUOTE] [FONT=Book Antiqua][SIZE=2][COLOR=Blue]I too find the entire concept interesting, with a few nuisances. In fact, why does the thing have to start in modern day at all? It would be less "Inuyasha-ish" if you just started from the other dimension and, in some special, rare way, his soul is shattered. In fact, the whole modern day aspect seems a little too underdeveloped and trivial: what's the point of the sword losing it's uniqueness in the modern world? I don't get that part.

I think you just need a little more work on the basics. That is, you have to create a solid universe, and make sure everything sticks with the reality you have created. Doing one universe is tough enough, so don't get overzealous and add another one just for the sake of it.[/COLOR][/SIZE][/FONT]

[Guest tzen]

[QUOTE=AzureWolf][FONT=Book Antiqua][SIZE=2][COLOR=Blue]I too find the entire concept interesting, with a few nuisances. In fact, why does the thing have to start in modern day at all? It would be less "Inuyasha-ish" if you just started from the other dimension and, in some special, rare way, his soul is shattered. In fact, the whole modern day aspect seems a little too underdeveloped and trivial: what's the point of the sword losing it's uniqueness in the modern world? I don't get that part.

I think you just need a little more work on the basics. That is, you have to create a solid universe, and make sure everything sticks with the reality you have created. Doing one universe is tough enough, so don't get overzealous and add another one just for the sake of it.[/COLOR][/SIZE][/FONT][/QUOTE]

hey i think it should start in a medevil world.... and when a demon attacks he is thrown in to a world exactly like his just that there is monsters and magick? and maybe the demon is some kind of emperor there and when the kids soul is shattered the demon might feel it couse... the kids ancestor that weilded the double edge might have been the one that killed the deamon in his past life and sent him to a life of demonic existance? and yet when the sword is in the "fantasy" world it is very strong but might not be able to kill the demon.... so he has to get to the real world couse the demon cant use his full power there and couse the sword is so magical it gets even more power full in the real world they might have a chanse to beat the demon there...( and for the other thing it might be some funny consepts when his friends come to the real world and see that there is no magic creatures and stuff =p )

[Okita]

This concept of your manga is your standard and typically cliche adventure story base, which is to say: it has a good chance of becoming a popular shounen series if it ever gets commercialised and promoted, the party theme and characteristic background of the story's protagonist (ie: the legendary warrior's great great great somesuch descendent -add or remove generation as applicable-) as well as the typical romantic entanglement are genre staples and you really can't go wrong. However as anime goes, it's not very original or inspiring.

Now if this were to ever be made into a game, THEN it would have potential to rival the likes of FF and Dragon Quest, the cliche setting are stock genre standard that have huge potential to be magnified by graphical delight, and the storyline typically tends to have an episodic nature by default, making the adventure set scenario the best suited to compliment game narrative. The world would be fantasy base, and since the protagnoist comes from the 'real' world has the potential to cross into techno-wizardry (technology vs magic is on!) and your genre-fied character are REQUIRED to filled standard role in the game's adventure set. Make some decent background story for each side character, make the world more immersive by adding history, tradition and unique culture, and you have a stockstandard FF sellout that will have millions of fans around the world (myself included) drooling in happiness and suffering from sleep depredation.

Copyright your story concept and see if you can sell it to squaresoft or namco et al, and when you've made your first million, remeber poor lil ol me and shout me a round at a pub ~_^

[Kei]

[color=darkblue]I, along with everyone else who has replied to this, also have great interest in this concept.

Although, as said [i]many[/i] times before, it does seem to emulate Inu-Yasha in some aspects, with a little fine tuning, it may indeed turn out to be a somewhat great manga idea.

Okita also has firm footing in believing that it could become a very nice video game after being worked on a little. I would definately put it in the back of my mind, at least.

As for things that could help the story...

If you want to keep the modern day dimension, perhaps you could have it as to the sword exists in the past. Miroshi's great, blah, blah grandfather was some sort of mage and put his spirit into the sword to help the hero that used it to defeat (enter great evil here) many years before. Someone else used the sword in Misenki's time, but it was broken somehow (forgive me for not going into detail, I'm making this up off the top of my head), destroying the grandfather's spirit. Miroshi and his grandfather's line of fate (remember, making this up) run together (as in, they are tied together, even though grandpa is long dead) and therefore, his spirit is shattered as well.

You would still have to come up with a way Miroshi is able to come to the past (I'm thinking the guardian angel of the family uses his/her/it's powers to send him back or whatever). If you choose to go that path, Misenki would have to be an Inu-Yasha clone, in that he's intent on getting the Double Edge fragments for his own purposes and only drags Miroshi along for his ability to detect them of whatever.

Just an idea, though. (And not saying it's a good one either.)[/color]

[Albel the Wicked]

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I'm a new member. I just barely registered like, five minutes ago. But I have an idea for a manga series and when I told it to my friend, he thought that it was pretty cool. The name of the manga is called, Double Edge. It's about a boy named Miroshi, who lives in the modern day world, but his city gets attacked by a demon named Misenki.(hence my name) Now he's in a new dimension where there's just swords, magic, and demons. A little after he arrives his soul gets shattered into pieces and are scattered throughout the land. Since he has no soul he can't feel any emotion, but for every little bit of his soul that he gets back, he can feel a new emotion. His soul is very important, which is why Misneki is collecting pieces of Miroshi's soul too. Miroshi is the decendent of a great warrior who forged the great blade known as the Double Edge. Only a decendent with pure and good intentions can recieve the blade. BUT, once it is in the real world, anyone is free to use it. Along the way Miroshi gets some traveling companions. Hashuma, the old Otagian guard, who was decieved by his master. Mara, the swordsman who eventually falls in love with Miroshi. Yutarin, the young mage with the horrible dragons curse. Kikida, the young girl monk that tries to do her best to help her friends. Well like I was saying, Yutarin has the horrible Dragon's curse with each time that it is set off, he becomes a more powerful creature and loses more control he has over it. Luckily, he has a band that can control it at a certain stage. At least until halfway through season on when Misneki activates it to it's full potential.

Whew, that's about enough. That is just a brief explanation of season one.[/QUOTE]






I get it! I didn't tell you the whole thing though did I!! Since you brought up these questions, I shall answer them. Misneki is very powerful, I mean VERY powerful. It powerful enough that if he didn't find a opposite force to resist is, his own power could destroy him, which is actually how he dies at the end of the first season. He steals souls so that their quantinence will balance out his power. Anyway, Misneki was powerful enough to make a rip into the void of the future and the reason that he choses Miroshi, is that he was believed to be his great, great, great, great, great, great, grandfather's weakest decendent, which he is. When he goes through time the people of the village that he is in, relize that he is a decendent of the dude that forged Double Edge. When Misenki comes back to get try to get his soul, once again. When the soul is out of Miroshi's body and at the point where it's out in the open, some strange blast comes from nowhere and hits Miroshi's soul which is why it shatters. Luckily a very small piece was sent back into Miroshi's body. The Double Edge is so improtant, because it's the only thing that even damage Misenki a little bit. Only a decendent of the one who forged the blade can summon it. I'm just going to leave it at that, I'm just telling the parts in season 1. Well, I don't see why Yutarin sounds like Miroku. Miroku's curse doesn't transform him into a hidious beast of darkness. When I ment that each time that it is activated that he loses control, I meant that each time he transforms he won't know who his friends are nor he won't know who he is. It's called the Dragon's Curse, because in his final stage, he becomes a Black Fire Dragon. This dragon is made up of Black Fire, hence the name. Also the dragon has a portal at his feet that will send people who are in it, into Oblivion. Well, that answers the questions that I remember. If you want I've posted chapters 1,2, and 3 of Issue 1 on MyOtaku site. I also have some drawings of some characters, but they're not very good. If you want to go and check it out, my Otaku user name is Miroshi.

[SilverCyclone]

[quote name='Misenki'] ...which is actually how he dies at the end of the first season...[/quote]

I really wish you hadnt told that. Kinda ruins the ending. But I really do like this idea. I know youve heard this many times, but it does resemble Inuyasha. I really look forward to reading it though. Should be fun! :cool:

[Beorhun]

Yeah, I do kind of have to agree with that. I had a problem from day 1 with the whole thing beginning in Modern Day. It kind of emulates a whole lot of other anime, which makes it seem a little ripped off. That's a bad thing, because you have a really cool and unique idea, it just needs some nuances hammered out. Why didn't you keep it like you origianlly had it, with the whole thing starting in a feudal Japanese farm town. Also ,why did you have to go into all of that revealing of the plot? You don't have to tell us everything. Keep some of this quiet. Keep us on edge. You should have told us the characters and not the whole entire story. Like Silver Cyclone said, it kind of ruins everything. Other than that, keep working! You have a pretty cool story on your hands, actually.

[Okita]

You should also talk to someone that can do art (if you haven't already) I know a good pair of girls who created a nice web comic, one does the plot while the other create the art, this would be a nice compliment if you can someone that works well with you. (They they kinda lived in the same city so it makes co-oping easier). If you really want to go ahead, that's the next step you should do... who knows? you could be the next mega tokyo....

[Beorhun]

[QUOTE=AzureWolf][FONT=Book Antiqua][SIZE=2][COLOR=Blue]I too find the entire concept interesting, with a few nuisances. In fact, the whole modern day aspect seems a little too underdeveloped and trivial: what's the point of the sword losing it's uniqueness in the modern world? I don't get that part.

I think you just need a little more work on the basics. That is, you have to create a solid universe, and make sure everything sticks with the reality you have created. Doing one universe is tough enough, so don't get overzealous and add another one just for the sake of it.[/COLOR][/SIZE][/FONT][/QUOTE]

Well, as I said, this is a very cool idea. Don't start underestimating your story and start throwing in stuff that doesn't need to be there. Don't get rebellious and think the storie's perfect as is, and whatever you do, DON'T GET DISCOURAGED! You really do have something with this, but the idea needs a little work. Keep working on this, Double Edge could end up being legendary, for all we know.

[sakura18]

I WAS going to do a manga almost like that. I don't wanna talk about anymore cuz it was a complete failure. Anywayz......sounds like a good idea.....are you a good manga artist? Anywayz...good luck with your manga and maybe i can join your manga team if you suceed someday. I'm a very wonderful artist.

[recca2024]

[QUOTE=Misenki][COLOR=DeepSkyBlue]undefined[/COLOR]\

I'm a new member. I just barely registered like, five minutes ago. But I have an idea for a manga series and when I told it to my friend, he thought that it was pretty cool. The name of the manga is called, Double Edge. It's about a boy named Miroshi, who lives in the modern day world, but his city gets attacked by a demon named Misenki.(hence my name) Now he's in a new dimension where there's just swords, magic, and demons. A little after he arrives his soul gets shattered into pieces and are scattered throughout the land. Since he has no soul he can't feel any emotion, but for every little bit of his soul that he gets back, he can feel a new emotion. His soul is very important, which is why Misneki is collecting pieces of Miroshi's soul too. Miroshi is the decendent of a great warrior who forged the great blade known as the Double Edge. Only a decendent with pure and good intentions can recieve the blade. BUT, once it is in the real world, anyone is free to use it. Along the way Miroshi gets some traveling companions. Hashuma, the old Otagian guard, who was decieved by his master. Mara, the swordsman who eventually falls in love with Miroshi. Yutarin, the young mage with the horrible dragons curse. Kikida, the young girl monk that tries to do her best to help her friends. Well like I was saying, Yutarin has the horrible Dragon's curse with each time that it is set off, he becomes a more powerful creature and loses more control he has over it. Luckily, he has a band that can control it at a certain stage. At least until halfway through season on when Misneki activates it to it's full potential.

Whew, that's about enough. That is just a brief explanation of season one.[/QUOTE]

sounds like a good idea but a little to much like inuyasha

[Albel the Wicked]

[quote name='recca2024']sounds like a good idea but a little to much like inuyasha[/quote]


You know, I'm really starting to get tired of people saying that! HOW is it like Inuyasha people? I don't really see. Please tell me, because all I'm hearing, is that it's too much like Inuyasha, but I don't hear why. I really would like to know why.

[naota]

[COLOR=DarkRed][SIZE=1]Here is how it is alot like Inuyasha. Yutarin is very much alike Miroku because of the curse and some object to conceal it.I think the way kagome got in the other world or dimension was by getting attacked by the demon just like Miroshi.The soul getting shattered is like getting the jewel shattered and the dimension they are in is like Inuyasha's dimension.

Thats how I think it is very much alike Inuyasha.

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[SilverCyclone]

Agreeing with Deimos here. It is very similar to Inuyasha, but I am sure that with a few tweaks it'll become a great manga. If you get to drawing some of the characters, I would like to see them myself. I have been told many times by those far wiser then me (ok, a ferret is wiser then me...) that all it takes to make a great manga sometimes is great artwork. Dont give up just because its similar to Inuyasha. Keep at it! :D

[Beorhun]

Yeah, Sorry to post when there isn't much else to say, but I need to post on stuff like this if I EVER hope to become anything more than a useless newbie. Sorry to the moderators, too, for that last sentence.

To elaborate, it seemed to me that the whole thing of it starting in modern day was redundant and sort of tacked on. I have not seen much anime that has started in the feudal age. Also, why does it have to be in Tokyo? Or even feudal japan? Couldn't it be in some fantasy world? This may just be my stupid little preference, but why does the vast majority of fantasy anime start in Tokyo, or take place in Tokyo? I get that it's one of the largest cities in the world, and that Japan has a really rich past, but it's getting a little tired to me. As I probably ended up saying in past posts, you made some unnecessary changes to the story, I didn't mind the Yuantarin thing, he doesn't seem too much like Miroku, except the whole 'eventually it will destroy him' thing. However, I'm completely spent on anything else for this, I'm working on something that I need to focus on, but that's a story for another thread...

[naota]

[COLOR=DarkSlateBlue][SIZE=1]I actually agree with Eliwood,to me there is to much cartoons that start out in Tokyo and it is starting to get alittle boring. You should try and make up a fantasy world and make up your characters completely from scratch to math that fantasy world. That way it might be better instead of starting in Tokyo like alot of other anime which is kinda starting to get boring. But why am I saying this you don't even post here anymore do you Misenki lol. I think I am going to try and make a manga idea now.[/SIZE][/COLOR]

[Albel the Wicked]

I really appreciate the constuctive criticism but, I don't really care about this idea anymore. I'm probably going to have this be a game instead of having it be a manga or anime. Although the fact that no matter what happens, I'm going to visit, but probably move to Tokyo and become a video game designer. Yeah, I got that pretty much planned. I might go and tell a Japanese anime company about the idea and they might turn it into an anime. I don't know for sure though. I know that I WILL make it a video game and try to get it as an anime. Though I won't make it sell out like Pokemon and Yu-Gi-Oh, by creating a major franchise of trading cards, underwear, toys, shirts. Yeah, but it will be a game, in fact, it will be the best game ever and you will all buy it, because it will have cool graphics and won't be the regular mash A or X RPG game. MUAHAHAHAHA

[naota]

[COLOR=DarkSlateBlue][SIZE=1]Welll it depends what system you would make it for, if its for ps2 you have a few choices like you are supposed to focus on one thing more that the other. If you focus on the action to much then the backround might not be too good if you focus on the backround and settings it might not be to good.You gotta make it just right and if your going to test out the game then your going to have alot of work to do.

But if you do it with X-box to me you won't have much problems because of the amount of space it has on it.[/SIZE][/COLOR]

[Beorhun]

[COLOR=Blue]Hmm... how about a combat system like the one in Knights of the Old Republic, where you pause and choose the next four attacks each member will make seperately, and then unpause and let the battle happen. I'll reference KOTOR often, because it is one of the most innovative RPGs I've ever played, and well, I love star wars (nerd alarm) But that combat system is very strategic and easy to pick up on. You could do something like that, and I think it would be pretty cool. Anydangway, where does this thread go now that you're talking about a video game plot? Does it go here, or in Play It? Moderators, help this thread out! :laugh: [/COLOR]

[mangakiwi]

Aside from time travel nothing in this manga sounds anything like inuyasha! Lets just forget Inuyasha! Besides it's not even really time travel, its more of a demesional switch or something. I really like it and I hope you turn it into something cool Jack!

P.S.
I didn't really like the KOTOR battle system much... Now Tales of Symphonia, now that was a great system! (aside from all of the summoning glitches and stuff)

[Albel the Wicked]

I was thinking more about like a Kingdom Hearts kind of battle system, to make it have pretty good freedom. Well, I think that I might start this as an RPG in the Adventure Inn.

PS: He's from the modern day, so that he actually IS weaker then all of his decendents. Living in the modern day is going to make him like the weakest thing there. So, that's why he is going to be from the modern day.

[EternalxDusk]

This really does remind me a lot of Inuyasha. Which isn't a good thing.

The whole collect the pieces, have a pure heart so you can have the sword, fight the demons thing is very generic.

It actually sounds more like you took many different popular themes of many different anime, added them all together, and called it original.

I'm not trying to sound as offensive as I know I do, I'm just stating my opinion on this.