Writing Unfolding Story [PG]

[Justin]

I'm currently brainstorming a little. I'm working on a story that, if finished, I'll probably use in some form for my AP English class. It's set in a fictional society, on an abstract Earth, with their own pantheon of dieties which do exist. The mythos at first glance probably seem decidedly Greek-esque, however, upon closer examination, you should find other inspirations as well. I'll begin with the creation story, move thorugh the pantheon, and onto whatever else. I'll appreciate suggestions/offers to help/whatever, but I'll work as though I'm on Word brainstorming.

[COLOR=Magenta]Celcyonae[/COLOR]
[COLOR=Blue]Gods[/COLOR]
[COLOR=DeepSkyBlue]Demi-gods[/COLOR]
[COLOR=Red]Mortals[/COLOR]
[COLOR=YellowGreen]Other Creatures[/COLOR]


Creation Myth-

Before the time of man, of heroes, and of legend, the earth was devoid of life. All life in the Cosmos resided in Celcyon--the Heavenly Forest from which all things came to be. Then, the eldest of the Celcyonis trees split asunder; transforming into the giant [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR]--the Father of the Gods. From Celcyon, [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] descended down the great Taproot to the barren earth. Once there, he cut his own wrists, and his blood(which was pure sap of the Celcyonae) made the earth fertile, and made it flow with life.

After centuries of wandering between Celcyon and Earth, [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] became lonely. So he found the most beautiful tree in Celcyon, and with his sword, he cut it open. From it emerged [COLOR=Magenta]Myranea[/COLOR]--the mother of the gods. The two descended to Earth, and there built a great palace on the highest mountain(Gargincus), and from that mountain, they ruled the earth and all the creatures on it.

It so happened that in the womb of [COLOR=Magenta]Myranea[/COLOR] there rested four Celcyon seeds, and one day she went into great pains as though giving birth. The seeds emerged. [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] took the seeds, and planted each in its own garden.

From the first seed, two seedlings sprang the next day. [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] pulled them up, and cast them aside. From one, the first man came. From the other, the first woman.
From the second seed, a mighty Celcyonic sapling grew within a week. [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] split it in half, and in its was the first child of [COLOR=Magenta]Myranea[/COLOR], the Celcyoness [COLOR=Magenta]Urh[/COLOR]. She was neither giant in size, nor eloquent in speech or manner, but she was powerful and beautiful.
From the third, a great vine grew quickly. [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] hacked it, and cast it into a pit. From it, a great dragon named [COLOR=YellowGreen]Myrdynos[/COLOR] was born.
And from the fourth, a great tree grew within a day. [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] split it, but there was nothing inside. So he wittled and carved it into a throne for himself.

So time passed, men and women grew larger in number, and [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos's[/COLOR] heart grew with anger towards them. They were as smart, beautiful, and cunning as he. He hated them fiercely. He hated [COLOR=Magenta]Urh[/COLOR] for looking very much like them, and he cast her away. And he began slaughtering them.

Eventually, [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] and [COLOR=Magenta]Myranea[/COLOR] had their first child by conception, [COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon[/COLOR]. But he was not like them. He could change form at will, but had all their power. He was arrogant, and strongwilled. Their second was a daughter, [COLOR=Blue]Pyra[/COLOR], with the same arrogance as her brother. Their third was a son, [COLOR=Blue]Estus[/COLOR], who also was strong and arrogant. All three favored their half-sister, the Celcyoness [COLOR=Magenta]Urh[/COLOR], for she was sweet in spirit, but powerful as they were. She loved men and women, for she suffered with them.

One day, [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] struck [COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon[/COLOR] for lashing out against him. [COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon[/COLOR] went into a rage, and threw his father down Gargincus. For seven days, he wrestled his father. The sun blacked out, the skies and sea raged, the earth quaked; but there was no victor. Hearing the battle, [COLOR=Blue]Estus[/COLOR] came quickly to his brother's aid, and together they defeated [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR], and cast his off of the earth; down, down, down to the realm below--Niggisus: The barren land to which the base of the earth was attatched.

[COLOR=Magenta]Myranea[/COLOR] fled Gargincus, and gathered to herself an army of fearful soldiers to take it back, and send [COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon[/COLOR] and [COLOR=Blue]Estus[/COLOR] to the same fate as her husband. But [COLOR=Blue]Pyra[/COLOR] interviened: She called a great inferno up from a crag in the earth, and incinerated [COLOR=Magenta]Myranea's[/COLOR] army. [COLOR=Magenta]Myranea[/COLOR] wrestled with [COLOR=Blue]Pyra[/COLOR] for a day, when [COLOR=Blue]Pyra[/COLOR] suddenly opened another crag in the earth...[COLOR=Magenta]Myranea[/COLOR] fell in, and [COLOR=Blue]Pyra[/COLOR] sealed it back with fire and magma.

For two weeks, all seemed peaceful; but suddenly there was great shaking of the earth. Nothing could stop it. Not all the of the gods combined to end the quaking. [COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon[/COLOR] knew that it must be [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR]. On a great chariot, pulled by two mighty eagles, [COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon[/COLOR] flew down to Niggisus to face [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] alone. He found the Celcyon chopping at the base of the earth with his sword. They fought fiercely for ten days, and finally [COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon[/COLOR] lashed a great immortal chain all about [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos's[/COLOR] body. With one hand, [COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon[/COLOR] broke the remainding base of the earth, and hoisted it up. With the other, he pushed [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] down in a fetal position into the place where the earth rested. He lashed [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos[/COLOR] to the base of the earth, and rested the earth firmly on [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos's[/COLOR] back.

From then on, the sky has been ruled by [COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon[/COLOR]. The seas have been ruled by [COLOR=Blue]Estus[/COLOR]. The earth has been ruled by [COLOR=Blue]Pyra[/COLOR]. [COLOR=Magenta]Urh[/COLOR] was made the advisor of the three.



Pantheon-

Excelcyon- Supreme god of the sky, sun, and weather.
Pyra- Fire and earth
Estus- Sea and wind
Diapero- redemption, heroes, and flying creatures. He the also the mightiest of the three gods of war.
Realus- God of fear and horses.
Gossus- God of workmanship.
Chyro- God of volcanoes and earthquakes.
Tigros- Rivers and wild animals
Rae- Hurricanes and lakes
Hazium- The underworld, deception, and war.
Haphestae- Beauty, love, prostitues and jealousy
Dorminae- Sleep and dreams
Aros- Night, nightmares, and shadow
Menamort- Death, disease and war
Thyra- Conquerors, kings, and sports
Rasis- Wisdom and insight
Syskaphra- Drunkedness and greed


Lineage of Gods and some other major figures-

[COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon, Pyra [/COLOR] and [COLOR=SlateGray]Estus[/COLOR] all were born of [COLOR=Magenta]Kalos and Myranea[/COLOR]. [COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon married Pyra[/COLOR], but produced only one son--[COLOR=Blue]Diapero[/COLOR]. [COLOR=Blue]Estus [/COLOR] married [COLOR=Magenta]Urh[/COLOR](the Celcyoness who favored the gods), and produced [COLOR=Blue]Tigros and Rae[/COLOR].

[COLOR=Blue]Tigros[/COLOR] loved the mortal [COLOR=Red]Penalae [/COLOR] and they concieved [COLOR=Red]Garaet[/COLOR]--the first mortal hero. [COLOR=Red]Garaet[/COLOR] first loved [COLOR=blue]Haphestae[/COLOR], and they produced [COLOR=DeepSkyBlue]Xius, Tyra and Hoen[/COLOR]--all immortal. [COLOR=Red]Garaet [/COLOR] later loved [COLOR=Red]Thyra[/COLOR] and they made the immortal hero [COLOR=DeepSkyBlue]Dyodus[/COLOR]. [COLOR=DeepSkyBlue]Dyodus[/COLOR] loved [COLOR=Red]Liae[/COLOR] and they made [COLOR=Red]Hyron and Paltroles[/COLOR]. [COLOR=Red]Hyron[/COLOR](who was the first King of Jaga) married [COLOR=Red]Glasia[/COLOR] and they produced [COLOR=Red]Cebrus and Kantos[/COLOR]. [COLOR=Red]Paltroles[/COLOR](who was the greatest mortal warrior ever born) married [COLOR=Red]Nice[/COLOR] and they produced [COLOR=Red]Inoclus and Carta[/COLOR]. [COLOR=Red]Inoclus married Mya[/COLOR], and they made [COLOR=Red]Kalaus and Hebron[/COLOR]. [COLOR=Red]Carta married Gregus[/COLOR], and produced [COLOR=Red]Crystina and Devon[/COLOR].

[COLOR=Blue]Rae(Estus' [/COLOR] other son) loved [COLOR=Blue]Pyra[/COLOR] and they produced [COLOR=Blue]Hazium and Haphestae[/COLOR]. [COLOR=Blue]Hazium and Haphestae[/COLOR] came together to produce [COLOR=Blue]Dorminae and Aros[/COLOR]. [COLOR=Blue]Aros[/COLOR] slept with the mortal [COLOR=red]Amanra[/COLOR] and [COLOR=Red]Grykus[/COLOR] was born.

[COLOR=Blue]Excelcyon's[/COLOR] concubine was [COLOR=Blue]Haphestae[/COLOR] and they made [COLOR=Blue]Realus, Gossus and Chyro[/COLOR]. [COLOR=Blue]Realus married Dorminae [/COLOR] and made [COLOR=Blue]Rasis and Syskaphra[/COLOR]. [COLOR=Blue]Syskaphra[/COLOR] slept with [COLOR=Red]Grykus[/COLOR] and made [COLOR=Red]Nice[/COLOR].

[COLOR=Magenta]Urh[/COLOR] was only once ever unfaithful to [COLOR=Blue]Estus[/COLOR], and it was with [COLOR=Blue]Chyro[/COLOR]. From them came [COLOR=Blue]Menamort and Thyra[/COLOR].
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My first story in this world will be about the hero Garaet, but I'll have to jump back on that later. Don't get lost in the details. When I actually start writing, that'll be what really matters. All of the above is just background for what it yet to come.

Be back later, God bless
-Justin

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The midday sun cast a bright brilliance across the jungle-mountains of Eastern Jaga. In his near five years of wandering across the lands first fertilized by his ancient grandfather, Kalos, Garaet had never been this far east. But he knew now that he must be getting closer.

Gareat was an excellent hunter, or so he'd been trained to be.

[Gavin]

[SIZE=1]An excellent story I truly enjoyed it, well written and imaginative and you've drawn well from the different mythological sources. There's a lot of Greek influence to it as you've said with the whole Kalos - Excelcyon battle mimicking the Greek version of the Zeus - Cronos battle of the Olympians against the Titans. Gargincus too is a clear reference to Mount Olympus in Greek myths.

Though in syaing that I do sense there is some Norse influence to this story with Niggisus sounds almost akin to the Norse underworld of Nifflehiem, the dragon Myrdynos could be Nidhogg or one of the other hated dragons from Norse legends. The Taproot may be an indirect reference to Ymir the first Rime Giant of Norse mythology, who Odin and his brothers slew to great the world from his body.

Many of the God and Demi-Gods names resemble that or their Greek counterparts though I'll need to have a think before I come back here and say who may be who. [/SIZE]