Dragons_Bait15 Posted August 29, 2004 Share Posted August 29, 2004 Basically I need help, I'm writing a story/Rp and I'm stuck, I need some reason for an outlaw to go to a planet where everything is a desert, no forests or oceans, just lakes and rives an stuff. THe outlaw is trying to inlist the help of a gang on the planet (for the crimnials) and I need some reason why he would do this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the The Boy Posted August 29, 2004 Share Posted August 29, 2004 You could say that there is a great treasure/mint on the planet that the bandit wants to find/rob. When in doubt, use clichés. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragons_Bait15 Posted August 29, 2004 Author Share Posted August 29, 2004 Thank you but it doesn't sound right, I don't think. :confused: :huh: But Thank You Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the The Boy Posted August 29, 2004 Share Posted August 29, 2004 Perhaps if you give a little more info on what the main plot is supposed to be? Sorry but without info the only other thing I can think of is revenge plot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragon Warrior Posted August 29, 2004 Share Posted August 29, 2004 Hmm... he is an outlaw and outlaws tend to be criminals. If he's into making bargains with the wrong crowds, that could be your solution. He could simply make a deal with a space mafia where he ends up not keeping his end of the bargain and this "space mafia" chucks him onto this desolate planet to die a long and miserable death. Yay! I'm not sure what you mean by he's trying to enlist the help of a gang, though. Maybe you could specify your meaning more? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragons_Bait15 Posted August 31, 2004 Author Share Posted August 31, 2004 WEll It starts on this desert Planet, no large bodies of water and the civlization is mostly made up of local creatures, It's kinda a scifi/ Fanticy thing with space travel and dragons and stuff, and the crimanles that are sent from nearby planets to, well it's like a world prison where crimnals have lived and creaed towns and become oddly civilized, they've created laws to their sence of right. THe Outlaw from Earth crashes on the planet and resists arrest by the Desert Wraths, the highway police of the planet, except they patrol the whole planet there's them and regular cops, and their spread out through out sections of the planet like counties, and he is thrown into jail, with one of the main charters and the leader of the gang he tries to get to hep him. By the time he figures out the gang leader's talent, illusions, and to kidnap a Desert Wrath, her friends have broken her out of the jail, they do it a lot. THe gang is a mixed matched groupe of tecnitions, spies, cutthroats, and other low- lifes all atracted to the Viper, the leader, by promises of adventure, gold, and the basics. When Viper learns of ______, I need a good name for the Earth outlaw, "quest" she finds it an excelent plan to thwrt the police and reap rewards. Also Discovering her heritage. Yes it's quiet lame and strange and Trigun11 riped a page of it. * Grumples silently* :flaming: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trigun 11 Posted September 2, 2004 Share Posted September 2, 2004 -Points accusing finger- YOU MADE MEH! Any way..... Question Dragons_Bait, Who was the outlaw that Viper recognizes ? Was he like Kouga or something? Anywyay, DW does have a good point. I like the whole Space Mafia chucking him into that planet... The planet reminds me of the one on Trigun >.< Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragons_Bait15 Posted September 3, 2004 Author Share Posted September 3, 2004 *Points accused finger back* It was your fault and Yes it's cool but it's your fault that I have to write it over I didn't mean it to be like thatI just like the thought of a whole planet being a virtual desert, It's SPIFFY * glares at Trigun11* Oh Ha ha We get to play Football with the guys in PE down here I'm getting pretty good at catching though I suck at throwing, What is it with guys having to hold the balls a certin way??? *miroku thoughtfull look* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest The Pro Posted September 3, 2004 Share Posted September 3, 2004 What about this. MONKEYS HAVE TAKEN OVER HIS HOME TOWN AND HE WANTS IT BACK! (lol jk) Actualy how about this, he goes to reccrute the bandits becouse he has been wronged by the law, accoused by the chief of the local armed forces. He had cought him smuggling drugs and weapons, so the chief said they were his, and had him thrown into jail. He managed to escape from his prison transport, just befor it docked at its final location, a low-grade prison on a small secluded desert planet, were he was to be detained and executed. Then he eluded authoritys, and now he plots his revenge. Im sure you can assume the rest. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragons_Bait15 Posted September 4, 2004 Author Share Posted September 4, 2004 Hmmm.....Trigun you think there's anyway to conect all these together? It may work, THank You the The boy, Dragon Warrior, and The Pro for your comments. Monkeys :D :laugh: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dragons_Bait15 Posted June 5, 2005 Author Share Posted June 5, 2005 *Bows* To all admin, I am deathly sorry for the double post, but I have redone the beginning of the story that might give a few more details about what's going on. *Bows again* Again I am deathly sorry for the double post. It starts on this desert Planet, no large bodies of water and the civilization is mostly made up of local creatures, It's kind of a sci-fi/ Fantasy thing with space travel and dragons and stuff, and the criminals that are sent from nearby planets too, well it's like a world prison where criminals have lived and created towns and become oddly civilized, they've created laws to their sense of right. An Outlaw from Earth crashes on the planet and resists arrest by the Desert Wraths, the highway police of the planet, except they patrol the whole planet there's them and regular cops, and they're spread out through out sections of the planet like counties. The Earth outlaw is thrown into jail, with one of the main charters, the leader of the gang he tries to get to help him. By the time he figures out the gang leader's talent, illusions, and to kidnap a Desert Wrath, her friends have broken her out of the jail. The gang is a mixed matched group of technicians, spies, cutthroats, and other low-life all attracted to the Viper, the leader, by promises of adventure, gold, and the basics. When Viper learns of the Earth outlaw's "quest" she finds it an excellent plan to thwart the police and reap rewards. Three galaxies away from Old Earth the sun sets on the desert lands, these lands are used for the scourge of the galaxies, a virtual prison. The planet holds no bodies of water larger then small lakes. A desert through and through the planet's inhabitants have evolved or adapted to the harsh terrain or died in the scorching sun. Civilizations have been started and have thrived a political governments have fallen and have been resurrected through out thousands of years. Huge winged snakes dubbed Balisks and wild horse like creatures (I have no idea what to call them) coexist with the larger flying lizards reminiscing of Dragons. In a tavern near the edge of Abry, a lone person sits watching the news on a refurbished T.V. "The expected leader of the Sakinah has been captured near Abry at noon today. The leader, Viper, supposedly gave herself up to the Desert Wraiths after desecrating the grave of Mimica the late chief of police who almost killed Viper." The person looks out the door at the setting sun, her hair gleams silver, the reporter drones on about the uncharacteristic Balisk movements in Firstwalk. "Zahra," a large shadow moves across the door bathing her in darkness," Zahra. She?s done it again." "I know Bear." Zahra walks out of the tavern and smiles up at the lumbering Qudamah. "Did you know that the Wraiths have recovered a spacecraft? Supposedly from Old Earth judging by the technology." Zahra looks at the thin wiry boy hunched over a portable processor. "No." Zahra looks at the sky frowning, ?What would Old Earth want with us?" "The pilot..." "Might I intervene?" the voice comes from above, ?Go ahead." A young girl sticks her head over the edge of the building, "Maybe we should go get Viper before she gets closer this time. I mean, we nearly didn't make it last time." Zahra smiles and nods, "I'm going to get her, throw me a package of C4." The girl disappears and seconds later a small package of explosive is thrown out the window. "May your gods be with you High Elf." Bear calls after her and the dark horse like creature. I have no Earthly idea what to do with it or if it would be a good rp, I just though I would get more opinions on it. But it needs work I know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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