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A sweet kiss,
A soft touch,
And passions begin to flare.
Bodies press close,
Kisses deepen,
Hands begin to wander,
Feeling under clothes,
Feeling heated bodies.

Heated moments,
Souls seeking love,
Warm bodies begin to undress,
And then we are naked,
There with everything to see,
Unable to hide anything.
Shallow, waiting, eager breaths,
Cold exitement sending shivers up our bodies.

I push you down,
My needy kisses up and down your body.
While I love every fiber of your being.
Being soft, being gentle,
Not wanting to hurt you.
I keep you waiting,
Feeling your desire,
Feeling your hot hunger.
I keep you waiting,
Wanting to draw this out longer.

I keep you in suspense,
Letting you feel my desire,
My want,
My need,
My passion.
It is all yours to take.
I can feel your heat,
As I kiss your soft lips
As you press against my naked flesh.

I can feel your heat,
It radiates as if from your very core.
I let my hand slip below the waist,
Feeling your manhood,
Feeling your desire.
And suddenly,
My own fears as well.
Hearing your shallow breaths,
I smile, wanting to please you.

Sensing my fear,
Sensing my apprehension,
You tell me it is alright,
Everything is fine.
You tell me we don?t have to do this,
That its okay if I don?t want to.
But, I take a shaky breath,
Smile and reply.
?Its alright,
I?m just a little scared.?

With one last tender kiss,
I move down your body,
Feeling, touching, kissing, loving.
You touch my hair,
Running your fingers though it,
Stroking my head,
Relaxing me.
Loving me.
And all I want is you.

Passion surging,
I lick your skin,
Savoring your taste,
Before drawing you into my mouth.
I love your taste,
I love your scent,
I love your feel.
I?m wanting more,
I?m wanting to please you.

You take sharp breaths,
Enjoying my touch,
Smileing when I look at you.
Cold shivers raceing up your back,
Shivers of arousal and pleasure.

But you make me stop,
And I don?t know why.
You smile,
And beckon me up to your kiss.
You wrap your arms around me,
And confuse me.
?You?re so sweet,
But it?s my turn to please you.
I can?t let you have all the fun.?

You lay me on my back,
With you on top,
And I look back at you,
frightened of what I see.
You just smile,
And give me sweet kisses.
While playing down below.
You finally move,
Down along my body,
And my fear begins to dissipate.
I shyly smile,

?I?ve never done it like this before,? I say,
Suddenly so very shy.
You just chuckle,
Understanding,
And I feel better.
You do as I did,
And it feels so good,
But I think you?re better.
I take a shaky breath,
And almost beg you to stop.

?Please, not now,? I say,
And you look back at me.
?I thought this was what you wanted.? You solemly reply.
?I do,I do! But I don?t want to climax now!?
You move back yo my mouth,
Giving more sweet kisses,
Pressing against me,
Loving me,
As I love you.
You pull away,
And straddle my stomach,
Stroking me as well.

?Do you like anal,? you ask,
A mischeivious smile playing on your lips,
Ideas running through your head,
Shining in your eyes.
You are smileing,
Joking with me.
I suddenly fear your member,
Your manhood.

It?s not that it?s too big,
It?s not that it?s too small,
I only fear the pain that will come,
If you decide to play inside me.
?I?m scared,? I say,
Being honest,
?But I can take you,
?I know it?s what you like.?

I prepare myself,
Tensing up,
My muscles tightening.
I begin to move,
To position myself,
But you only push me down,
Giving me sweet kisses,
And whispering sweet words.
?Just relax, I?ll do all the work.? You say,
A smile on your lips.

You position yourself,
Waiting patiently,
And so I spread my legs.
You position yourself,
Readying me for what?s to come.

So slowly you enter,
Taking your sweet time,
Careful not to hurt me too much,
Careful not to scare me.
I wrap my legs around your waist,
I draw you closer,
Enjoying the sensations that you make.
Slowly, slowly,
Then faster and faster,
Closer and closer I come,
Driven by your passion and your kiss.

You moan into my throat,
While I gasp in breath,
As you pump in and out.
With one hand you play with me,
The other you hug me.
I hold you close,
As I feel you tense.
Together we climax,
Enjoying each other,
In an explosive end.
Together we cry out,
Together we release.

And then I hold you close,
Hold you in my arms,
As you fall asleep,
A smile on your face.

[Solo Tremaine]

[COLOR=#503F86]I'm rather interested to know whether the 'I' in the poem is male or female- it seems it could equally apply to either.

But anyway, this is very well written. There are bits that just come off as tasteless: "Do you like anal?" being one of the bits that really puts me off any kind of sensitivity being read into it, but the rest is nicely done. I've always thought that less is more when it comes to sex scenes/poems, so it's nice that this is graphic more in its implications than its actual text.

Reading back over it again I guess I have mixed feelings about it, although I am actually impressed overall. I like the more cryptic bits of it where the emotions and inner processes are described more than the more graphic 'positioning' lines. But that in itself is quite indicative of sex, though- it has the sensitive, loving side to it, and it has a rather more brutal, almost disgusting edge too.

It's very effective, but there's the odd phrase or two that stops it from being erotic, in my mind. I'm a prude, though.[/COLOR]

[Hevn]

[COLOR=RoyalBlue][SIZE=1][B]Solo, after carefully reading this poem, I have a feeling that the 'I' is male.

[COLOR=Purple]"I let my hand slip below the waist,
Feeling your manhood,
Feeling your desire. "[/COLOR]

This tells us that the other person is male.

[COLOR=Purple]"You do as I did,
And it feels so good,
But I think you?re better."[/COLOR]

This obviously proves that 'I' is male too. If not, then blame me for reading too much yaoi, lol.

This is a very intriguing poem and I agree a lot with what Solo said. I, too, have mixed feelings about it. I would've liked it more if it was simply sensual. But from the looks of it, and with words like anal, climax, straddle, faster, and pump, it's like a lemon scene turned into poem.

[COLOR=Purple]"It?s not that it?s too big,
It?s not that it?s too small,"[/COLOR]

See what I mean?

[COLOR=Purple]"You position yourself,
Waiting patiently,
And so I spread my legs.
You position yourself,
Readying me for what?s to come. "[/COLOR]

...and other redundant lines.

I think you should've stayed with more metaphors or something like that... just to get away from literally stating every movement or action that's taking place. Yeah, Solo said pretty much what I wanted to say. ^_^;

But it's a good start and don't let my words stop you from anything. ^_~[/B][/SIZE][/COLOR]

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thank you very much, and yes, both of my characters are male.