Writing No Named Story [M-VLS]

[Venge]

I have this idea in my head and its been forming for the past 4 days or so. I tinkered with it and debugged the bugs that I can see and so far, the story idea is pretty good. Here is the plot (for those who have played Shadow Hearts, I did NOT get this idea from the game. I havent even played it!): God, seeing all of the evil apon the world, wants to cleanse it, thus destroying all life on it. He promised not to flood the world, and fire was one of the symbols of Hell. And he didnt want to kill all life using something that resembled Hell. So, he sends down an angel named Adrienn to do what he wanted. She hires two people, Deverca Draconis and Rex Selestrial. By the end of the story, Adrienn is 'dead', Deverca has joined the good guys side, and Rex has become more powerful than imagined and wants to rule the world.

That is a rough draft of the summary. I'll post something more thorough next time. If you can, please post title ideas. Oh, content: Strong Language, Graphic Violence, Heavy Drug and Alcohol Usage, and Strong Sexual Content.

-Matt Duffey

[Lady Asphyxia]

[font=Verdana][size=1]Considering what you're describing as content, I rated it as that so you could post the story when you start writing it. [/size][/font]
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[font=Verdana][size=1]Not a bad idea. I don't have any ideas on what to name it, sorry. Just to clarify; you say that Deverca has joined the good side; which is the good side? The side of God or of the people? [/size][/font]
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[font=Verdana][size=1]How are you planning to get them to that point in life? How will she [?] die? Why does Deverca go to the good side? Why does Rex get more power? It'd be good to expand it and stuff. I can't wait to see what you've written.[/size][/font]

[Sir Gawain]

Neat story.

Sounds like it should have a title like 'God's Wrath' or 'Angelic Doom'. That's only what I've got. My story, Fallen Angel, is sorta like that. Except the name doesn't refer to the main character. In fact, the main character doesn't even have a name, he's just called 'he' and 'him' and 'his' because he lost his identity when he died.

Fallen Angel is the name of his sword. Every time it kills a new type of demon, it aquires new powers and forms, like the second level, Blood Angel. In this form, the hilt is crimson, his armor is black, and his wings are made of blood! This enables him to do things like create a swirling bloody tornado around his body.

Sorry for getting off topic. It is a very good Heaven versus Earth story. Let me just put in a guess, there's gonna be some human who turns the angel good? I like it, and will be willing to read more about it. Here's an idea though, don't describe God. NEVER do that in a story. Only the Bible can. And it kinda ruins people's positive view of Him.

I hope this helps and not hurts!

[Venge]

Thanks for the help so far, you two. Those title ideas are pretty good Kid Anime. And thanks for changing the thread title Lady Asphyxia ^-^.

From Lady Asphyxia:
[QUOTE]Not a bad idea. I don't have any ideas on what to name it, sorry. Just to clarify; you say that Deverca has joined the good side; which is the good side? The side of God or of the people? How are you planning to get them to that point in life? How will she [?] die? Why does Deverca go to the good side? Why does Rex get more power? It'd be good to expand it and stuff. I can't wait to see what you've written.
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To clarify what you asked, the 'good' side is the side of the people. Rexs' mother is a soul eater/taker. And he has that power. Whosever soul he takes, he gains more power and can use the powers of the people he has tooken. He takes Adrienns soul, but it still lives in him, making Adrienns body just a living shell, but having no soul to occupy it. The only reason why Rex is keeping her body....well, you'll see and/or read in the story.

On another note, here is the list of characters in the story, with the race in () and the owner in []:

Venge (1/2 Human, 1/2 Lightning/Shadow Demon) [Mine]
Kay Sutonis (Neko) [Mine]
Apriella Herroe (1/2 Elf, 1/2 Vampire) [April Nance]
Deverca Draconis (Yurkerian) [Cory Coll]
Bob the Goblin (Goblin) [Cory Coll]
Adrienn (Angel) [Mine]
Soulless Selestrial (1/3 Human, 1/3 Fox, 1/3 Wolf) [Josh Florea]
Rex Selestrial (1/3 Wolf, 1/3 Fox, 1/3 Demon) [Josh Florea]
Leona Briann (1/2 Human, 1/2 Dragon) [Mine]
Kiona Kitsune (3 Tailed Fox) [Stephanie]
Olarken Sercon (Dragon Andraen) [Mine]

And some more notes on the story:

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[*]Bob and Olarken die at the end.
[*]Venge and Kay get together.
[*]Soulless and Kiona get marries in it.
[*]After the final battle, Soulless and Rex disappear. They aren't dead, they just disappeared.
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I hope I get started on it soon. I'll post any new info I remember or whenever I have a good chunk of the story done.

-Matthew Duffey