Manga Another new manga idea ... sigh...

[klinanime1]

For those of you who don't know, my brain spurts out a surplus of ideas that tend to end up in a heap of nothingness. However, I really like this new idea and I love the main char design (^ - ^) I've thought of. It's tentatively titled, "Life/Death: New York."
Somehow in the future, a corrupt government is run by a kind of dynasty, (it sounds corny, but it's because the entire family are politicians and most are good presidents, but others have had their opponents eliminated) and the recent one has dual personalities. The "good politician" side is mortily frightened of her psychotic, take-over-the-world side, and she has secretly compacted with a group the media calls the "Untouchables" who have been ordered to kill off her opponents and mask it by randomly killing other people.
The mistake they made was 1) attacking the New York Boarding School for Orphans, and 2) leaving the guy who founded the school alive. Jimmy Devoian founded the schools after himself being left w/out his parents by a drive by shooting, and when all of his students were slaughtered, he woke from his coma vowing revenge. Donning a mask to defy the Untouchables, he was given the name ?Hero Protector? by the media. This undercover work didn?t last long but this experience made him a prime candidate to lead the ?New York Rebellion? with the Liberal candidate for presidency, Christoph Jameson. The bar Devoian worked at became their head quarters, and with the information given to him by Ellen Desalle, who works as an electrical engineer at a controversial tech advancement company, they are able to eventually eliminate the Untouchables and began the "Siege of DC."
Key Characters:
Jimmy Devoian ? A bartender and the mysterious ?Hero Protector? who begins the threads of revolution.
Ellen Desalle ? an electrical engineer working for the controversial ?Tech. Advancement Institution?
Donni Estefon ? the orphaned 12 year old son of a former Republican candidate for presidancy who is taken in by Devoian.
Sean Marix ? Professor at a small performing arts college, and influential propogandist and Devoian's adoptive brother.
Perry Cerol ? The owner of ?Orange Jasmine: Cerol?s Café and Bar,? where Devoian works and which is basically the HQ of the rebellion.
Christoph Jameson ? young Democratic candidate for presidancy who aids Devoian in the revolution
Karen Landsen ? Jameson?s fiance
Celliond Liensierre ? current president with multiple personalities: 1. Psychotic control freak, 2. able politician who as afraid of her other half.

I haven't really meditated on it yet to see flaws in it, so C&C are very welcome.

EDIT:: Oh yeah, I forgot to mention that firearms are banned from civilians, putting the rebels at a distinct disadvantage as they have to deal in illegal trades, & Jameson already got busted for it once. Kind of important, but hey...

EDIT 2:: Nyargh... I'm having issues with deciding the ending. At the climac there's a massive explosion-like thing, and DC's wiped out. I don't know whether to show: that Jimmy survived, have an explanation, have him approaching the group outside the site, and suddenly end it; or have more closure by going further and showing how he and the rebels are major heroes and how life will be. I slightly prefer the first, but the second is also so tempting... help.

[asian_tofu]

Ok, so I haven't been here in a while, and I seem to remember the rule was not to revive threads over two months old, so I think I'm safe. If I'm wrong, sorry!

Anyway, this plot is interesting, and reminds of a type a "gang revolution" thing. It's been done before, I think, and so I hope you work on the details thoroughly. Also, the name of the bar to be "Orange Jasmine..." that name sounds [i]so[/i] familiar...where have I heard that before?

The president with the multiple personalities would probably be my favorite character at the moment, mainly because she's corrupt. You wouldn't be incorporating some romance in the story, would you? That always makes the story more engaging, especially if the two aren't supposed to be romantically involved ...*reminds self that not everyone is a romantic* Ehehe.

Ellen...is she the second-in-command of the rebellion? I can't seem to understand her significance to the storyline other than another rebel.

Personally I liked the first ending better. Maybe have him end the rebellion, and the end panel being his retreating figure in the dust. He's never seen again, but the others lead on regular lives in the changed world they helped create. I enjoy to keep things dramatic. Open endings are nice to have, but try to keep a somewhat definite ending for readers. He can elope with his lover or something. :D Never leave the conclusion to a relationship open - that calls for violence.

--BLUE

Btw, I finally got my avatar and signature to work! *does happy dance*

EDIT: Nevermind what I said about Ellen. I [i]really[/i] have to stop scanning and start reading.

[Dielover]

Very interesting plot. A bit freaky, but in a good way. Kinda like battle royal. Disturbing, but still very interesting. (Sorry if you are hurt by the manga choosen to be compared by. I've said that to friends and well they don't like me that much anymore. I really mean it in a good way.) :D