Writing "Distant Love (Forgotten)" [Slightly Depressing] [E]

[Sora]

Here's the other one I was talking about, cyclone. Please post on it, everyone.




[B][CENTER]Distant Love (Forgtten)[/CENTER] [/B]

[CENTER]"I sit in my corner
Waiting
I have long since forgotten myself and her.
Could she ever return?
Will she?
Does she want to?
She's so for away. I couldn't catch up to my distant love.
She won't wait for me, I know it.
So I strive to sit down.
I strive to stay still. To not get up and run.
So I try to forget her as I know I have been forgotten.
I hide in my own shadow.
Trying to be patient and I wait for one love.
One that will find me.
One that can see me in my pool of mental tears were I stay.
Drowning
One that can pull me up.
And I hope that that one will slow down fo me and not become another lost, distant love and be forgotten."[/CENTER]

*Edit* I forgot to put the reason for this poem. It's thanks to a girl, as you can tell. She used to go to my school and I tried to talk to her but when I finally could she had to move. (Which I later found out was because she was "annoyed" by me.) I don't think many of you know how painful the word annoying can be when used like that. I've gotten over her though so I guess it's cool. To those of you who feel like crap, write poems, they help you release feelings.

[vegeta rocker]

i doubt she moved just because of you, she probably just said that to add a little extra sting to her rejection of you. Nobody changes their whole life because someone admits they have a crush.

Though if you stalked her or something thats a whole diffrent story.

The poem is okay, buts its not really depressing, just kind of sad. i think you should describe your emotions better.

[Kazuko]

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Edited October 11, 2017 by Kazuko

[Guest Misukii]

I think your poem is great but really sad :( I think it's great the way it is ^^
sorry about her rejecting u and stuff ><