Writing Kill Adam: Arianna [R]

[Queen Asuka]

[color=hotpink][size=1]I really enjoy Kill Adam. And more than that RPG, I really enjoy my character, Arianna Love. Since I don't get to write about her as much as I would like, I have played with my mind some ideas about her past that I wanted to develop. Since I have had a hard time focusing in one of my ultra boring classes, I found it was easier to pass the time if I was writing. Thus, I give you one part of my short story so far.

Let me know what you think, PLEASE.

[b]Chapter One: The Third Day[/b]

[i]Arianna met Adam on the set of one of her porn flicks in Japan. Surprisingly, he knew all about her past, knew what she was capable of, knew that she would be a valuble asset to him and the formation of his team of deadly assassins, Adam's Angels. Their meeting was not very long, and soon enough she was "initiated" by Lelia Angelo, the original Angel. Arianna came to fall in love with Adam, and saw more in him than any other person she'd ever known. A story from her point of view.[/i]

It was the third day of filming, which was relatively close to the end of the flick. Unlike the long months and even years put into big theatrical releases, a porno was treated in the same respect as a music video: a little under a week of filming on a typical set (office, bedroom, manor with a pool, etc) and afterwards edited and set in sync with cheesy music, ready to go. I didn't mind the cheap quality of the movies that I starred in. In my opinion, it wasn't the quality of the movie, but the believability of the actors. I know that in some pornography you see girls bucking and yelling and moaning as though they'd just been ran over by a dump truck. I didn't believe in that ********. I believed in trust passion and lust, soft and gentle fingertips sliding over warm flesh. I believed in the sweetest of my lover's sweat. I believed in staring soulfully into my companion's eyes, knowing that this was more than just "sex," that it was truly "making love." It was alwyas my goal to convey these feelings and emotions into everything I did. And maybe that's why I was so popular: not because of my sexual prowess and goddess-like body, but because of the sweet romantic feel that I gave to all of my work. Despite believing so firmly in these ideals and putting them to practice in everything I did, it tolled my emotional healthy greatly. I remembered back to a time when making love to Richard was really about being in love. Of course I was very young and naive, but I felt all of the key emotions between us. I guess I missed all of that, and so I tried hard to convey it in all o fmy movies. Sadly, however, my companions and partners never reciprocated my effots. They did what they had to do and were done; their methods were so lifeless and displeasing to me. I always thought that it was people of that sort that gave pornography a bad name. Everyone has sex, but it's rarely the same as what you see in the flicks, so pornography is viewed as disgusting and taboo. But maybe if everyone poured forth true emotions and feelings into what they were doing, society woldn't look down so hard on what my life has become.

So I'm an idealist. But I wouldn't change for the world.

I was tired and distressed. I was to the point when I would go home and cry myself to sleep every night. I saw how my companions used my body as a tool and I always felt so empty inside. THe words of Richard echoed in my head and I was truly convinced that no one could eve rlove me. Despite my love and despite my effort, I was still alone. I was just another porn star in her prime. Until that third day.

Looking back, I barely remember what movie we were filming, I just remember this vague, washed-out set. I was surrounded by asians and the only colors I saw were yellow and black. My auburn hair stood out a great deal and the Japanese loved having me in their films. I guess it was appealing to have sex with a naughty tourist, or, as I liked to think of it when I'm at my worst, an American prisoner. But on that third day I saw a flash of brown hair and I couldn't resisit the temptation to stare. He was a handsome man and was wearing a black suit with a red button-down shirt underneath his jacket; I had the strangest impulse to rip the shirt from his chest. My animalistic instincts had kicked in and for the first time in many long, hard months, I felt true lust. I don't know if it was becuase I was so lonely or beause I hadn't had "real sex" in a long time, but it was everything I could do to keep myself in check. I had no idea who this man was, but I wanted to be with him so badly I could almost taste the sweet sweat trickling down his powerful neck. I closed my eyes for a moment, my hard pounding hard in my chest. I tried counting to ten to calm myself down; I inhaled deeply and then exhaled, slowly opening my eyes. I saw that the stranger was looking at me. I smiled politely and sheepishly tucked a strand of hair behind my ear. I suddenly felt goofy and child-like and I felt myself blushing. This made the stranger smile as well, nodding his head as he turned his eyes away from me. There was something about this strange attractor, and I knew that he had come for me.

A moment later the director of the film came over to me and began speaking quickly in Japanese. He pointed to the set where a middle-aged man in a business suit was sitting on the corner of an office desk. He was chatting with a beautiful Japanese girl who was playing the part of his secretary, the one who, according to the script, would walk into his office in the middle of our frantic sex session--myself lying stomach down, back arched over his desk as he grinded me hard from behind. Instead of being shocked and mortified, she would be turned on and join us for a threesome.

(Don't you love those porno cliches?)

Apparently it was time to film that scene, so I made my way over there as well. I smiled and shook hands with the man (why is it that all men in the porn-industry are barely average-looking? A rant for another day...) and before long everything had gotten started. We only had to the scene once, but I was so distracted during the filming that I thought the director was going to explode. I guess I just wasn't myself. All of the emotion that I tried so hard to convey during these scenes was gone; I could only see that handsome man in red and black standing off to the side watching us intently. I think I saw every sort of grimace on the director's face, but it was long before we were finished for the day and I went to my dressing room to get dressed and head home to my uptown apartment.

I was sitting alone in my dressing room, all of the lights out except for those around my vanity mirror, casting an angelic glow across me. I realized that I was cold and I pulled the sleeves of my white turtleneck over my hands, balling them into fists. I stared hard at myself in the mirror, my face pale with black rings under my eyes. But my eyes themselves, they were ablaze with life. Dormant feelings deep inside me had been awakened. I found it strange that just the sight of a person like me had made me feel this way. Living in Japan, I saw lots of tourists, lots of American businessmen, lots of people other than the Japanese. But there was something about this one in particular that I knew was important. For some reason, I was sure that I was meant to meet him. If I didn't approach him, I knew he would approach me. I nodded an affirmation to myself in the mirror and stood up, ready to go home.

A gentle knock came upon my door. Once again my heart started pounding. I turned towards the door and the quickly looked back at the mirro. My reflection seemed to stare past me towards the door and I knew somehow that it was him. I walked slowly to the door and placed my hand on the knob. It was cold under my clammy fingers and I turned it quietly, pulling the door open a small bit. A tiny shaft of light filtered in and I saw him standing there. He smiled at me and then said softly in Japanese,

"May I come in?"

By this time was heart was in my throat, and I couldn't refuse his request. I opened the door barely enough for him to walk through and then closed it quickly and quietly behind him.[/color][/size]

[Mimmsicle]

[FONT=Verdana][SIZE=1][COLOR=Navy]I find it incredible how you can apply emotions ranging from naive and sweet - to hardcore estranged, in the same story. You pull it off well. That you do ^_^

It's really interesting to see where Arianna comes from (of course we know the basics from Kill Adam, but this delves further) and where she goes. Great that you decided to share this with us ![/COLOR][/SIZE][/FONT]

[Dragon Warrior]

[size=1]Hmm... it's intriguing because it's like the behind-the-scenes look on Kill Adam characters. I mean, I wouldn't blame you for wanting to write stuff like this. I'd too like to write about a character that seemed so interesting and fun to roleplay as that the RPG itself wasn't enough. Plainly, this is a cool idea. Maybe other KA members should do it.

So I'm guessing all this is before Adam, before everything. It's her normal life? Should be fun to read further. The only problem I saw was numerous spelling errors and typos. I'm sure you knew how to spell them, but your fingers went quicker than your brain could think. You often wrote the wrong word or used the same word twice in a row.[/size]
[quote]By this time was heart was in my throat...[/quote]
[size=1]Like that. No biggie. Just gotta watch it. You're far more superior in writing than I am anyways. Good work and do produce more.[/size]

[Queen Asuka]

[color=hotpink][size=1]No, lol, you don't understand. FIRST, her heart was pounding. THEN, her heart became a lump in her throat. Two different things, lol. I guess I can see where you thought that, though. Thanks so much for the constructive criticism and nice compliments. ^_^[/color][/size]

[Arcadia]

[size=1]It's kind of hard to imagine pornography as being cool or glamorous in any way, but Arianna comes close to making that kind of connection, heh. It's interesting to be able to look around the facade of the porn star and see what's actually driving this woman, what she thinks about her career and her coworkers and herself. It's [i]cool.[/i]

Your writing, from a technical aspect, is very good, as always. There are a couple typos and stuff, but honestly, it's not that big of a deal, heh. I know when I'm writing and the ideas are flowing, the last thing I'm concerned about is whether or not my grammar is perfect. lol

Anyway, I'm definitely looking forward to the next part. Yeah for Kill Adam! ^_^[/size]

[James]

[color=#707875]Here I am finally, phew!

I think this is a great addition to Kill Adam. One of the things that I like about the RPG (and those who write for it), is that they are able to extend the main story and introduce so many subtleties to their characters.

You are no different, Tori. Within the RPG itself, you've managed to flesh out Arianna to a great extent. Yeah, she's basically an evil killer...but she isn't without emotion. And we can see how she's been treated all her life.

It makes me think that Arianna's position of power (as an Angel) is almost like her way of getting back at those who have trampled her down over all those years. You know? I'm not sure if that's what you intended, but that's definitely my impression. She's sweet one moment, viscious the next; just what an Angel should be, afterall.

I also like the fact that you've developed more of a personal relationship with Adam. As you know, my intention from the start was for Lelia Angelo to be the "primary" Angel, or, in other words, to be Adam's favourite.

However, Adam (like Bill) is really a pimp. Perhaps he isn't satisfied to love just one woman, or to be close to just one woman. He has an incredibly weird relationship with the Angels in that sense (he's like their lover, their father and their boss). In a funny way, Arianna is finding comfort in Adam, but at the same time, he's abusing her in a more insideous way than anyone else ever has (because at least the others were very up front about their relationship with her, whereas Adam isn't).

In any case, those are all of the things that come to mind as I read your piece. It's very well written, of course, and that comes as no surprise. All in all, a strong effort. I'm definitely interested in seeing how Arianna and other characters are further fleshed out in the future.[/color]

[Queen Asuka]

[color=hotpink][size=1]Yeah, I know that Lelia was supposed to be the "primary" Angel, but I wanted Arianna to be a lover. And I thought there was no better way to make her as such than to put her in a relationship with Adam. But see, I wanted her to be more than just "one of the girls" to him, I wanted her to be "special." I don't know. I guess I wanted him to lead her on in many ways, but then to be serious in many ways. I thought of this even before I saw Kill Bill (ha ha for me not seeing before being part of this RPG), and now that I HAVE seen it, I like the relationship between Bill and Bea so much. I don't know, I could go on and on about it, but yeah. What's here is here. And since Jenna is out of the game, I don't exactly have to make Lelia a big part of it...lol.

But I have been inspired. I haven't written anything more than what I have above, but adding Lelia into the mix should be LOTS of fun. After all, Arianna IS the second Angel, and so making that a part of it should be easy. It would be a good way to incorporate the chapter where Lelia and Arianna actually meet.

Thanks for the feedback, James, lol, now I think I can continue more story. After my two papers and test. -_-[/color][/size]

[James]

[color=#707875]I tend to view Lelia as Beatrix and Arianna as Elle. That dynamic was sort of established from day one (ie: the sign-up thread).

However, we have to remember that Lelia was killed [i]before[/i] Arianna. So...I think this could actually leave you a lot of room to have Arianna muscling in on Lelia's territory during that timespan. I think that would be very interesting, particularly because it'd directly coincide with Volume 1.

But yeah, I look forward to whatever else you have planned, regardless of what time periods you are using. ^_^[/color]