vegeta rocker Posted October 8, 2004 Share Posted October 8, 2004 i let myself believe there was a reason you make me bleed talked myself into staying all the way through but you know you know what you did and you know i was just a kid tried so hard to forget but my heart just won't let me pretend i'm okay it dies a bit everyday make me believe in things good for me make me believe in things i've never seen so many times i held you i cried so much inside but none of that mattered just as long as you were mine who am i i've never seen straight who am i i'm hollow past this face criticism please Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Princess_Keiko Posted October 8, 2004 Share Posted October 8, 2004 Why do you want criticism? I think what you wrote was really cool,and the title fits it very well. Awesome job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vegeta rocker Posted October 9, 2004 Author Share Posted October 9, 2004 i don't think any poem is without flaws. I think any views or opinions would be very helpful, and would be greatly appreciated. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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