Writing Keire's Grasp the Novel [PG]

[2010DigitalBoy]

This is my novel version of Keire's Grasp. I'll post one chapter at a time, starting with "Origin of Keire". This has no connection with the RPG, but if you like this, by all meant join.

Keire's Grasp
Written and illustrated by: That One Odd Dude

CHAPTER ONE

"Origin of Keire"

Sometimes, the world may be at peace. No wars are happening.
No one is dying. And the balance of nature remains. But sometimes there
is not peace. Sometimes, the balance is lost, and so is order. Everything
is thrown out of place and the world becomes dark. Evil reighns, and
good is destroyed. That is the fate the world of Faryt suffers. It is all the
fault of Keire.
Keire was born in the southern city of Kilan, the Wind City. The
people of Kilan were masters of the power of the wind. They could use
their powers to do all sorts of important tasks. But one day, a child was
born without the power of wind. His parents didnt tell anyone, in fear of
losing their child. But the secret was not kept for long. Every young child
would have to go to school, where they would hone their powers. When
the time came to harness this power, Keire created dark energy. With
no control over his immense power, hecreated an intense darkness that
covered the area, and scared all of the children.
When the leaders of the city found out they tried to deny everything
to avoid conflict. They thought he could grow up like a normal child. But
the other kids picked on him and called him a freak, which would make his
dark power go wild. Once he destroyed an entire schoolroom. Finally
the townsfolk took initiative. They protested his stay, and had him sent to
the land of darkness in the north.
In the land of darkness, Keire grew evil. With no one who cared
about him, he went insane. He spent years learning to control his powers,
and learned to create creatures purely out of darkness. He decided to
get revenge on the people who shunned him and made him go crazy. He
decided he was going to ruin everyone else's lives like they ruined his. He
was going to destroy the world.
He created his own army of evil and finally sent them to destroy.
The creatures were to go from the North, to the west, to the south, and
finally to the east, and destroy all the lands. This story begins as the dark
armies of the western part of the world of Faryt.

OOC: So. Any good?